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Unfortunately, not posting for this unfinished story anymore, I got a new job and I dropped my writing. Then I went back to it and realized that the story direction was wrong and I messed up some parts of it. So I went back to the drawing board and worked to reboot it. I still really believe in this story.

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GoldeNeedleRoyal Road

★★★★★ 4.5

I have read the first 36 chapters and this seems promising. The characters are fleshed out and differentiate themselves from usual main characters of this kind of stories.
I may elaborate further in a longer review when the story gets going, because for now the pacing is a tad slow.
All in all it is a very promising story to me.

luminariumRoyal Road

★★ 2.0

Early on there should probably have been significantly more development of the story in terms of exposure and interaction to other characters, getting a better idea of what the main characters are trying to accomplish, what kind of person they are, what other conflicts are brewing, what kind of world this is. But that seems to be missing from the story (at least thus far).
Story:
Pretty interesting premise, but could have been developed better by focusing less on the MC's and more on developing the setting they are in and the other characters. The lack of the development of setting means I don't really care about the world nor am I particularly interested in the outcome of whatever happens.
Characters:
The problem with making the MC's overpowered to this extent is that it's hard to make readers relate to them or to set up any difficult situations that they have to overcome. Thus, I didn't feel like I cared much about these characters. The MC's characters are poorly developed so I can't get a good idea of what kind of character they are. And the rest of the characters are either unrealistically unintelligent caricatures or nonexistent.
Style:
Pretty unremarkably mediocre. There is no unique narrative voice that is the author's, and the way the storytelling is done, it suffices to convey the plot but is otherwise banal, ie. There is no humor, no hinting of a greater world, no aura of mystery etc.
Grammar:
No grammatical or spelling problems from what I could tell, and pretty readable, so full score there.

The Children of the Divine Limit [Inactive]

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