The Chains of Rebellion
Self-Published
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Description
In the world of Errus, two great civilizations, the Republic of Doros, and the Kingdom of Rodina, are at war. But the real war comes from within, when the freeing of slaves is outlawed in Doros, the chains of rebellion will bind us all. Our story follows five characters, young and old, male and female, enslaved and free, through the fires of liberty, and the shackles of fate.
Maps:https://imgur.com/a/t4j42TDCharacter Art:https://imgur.com/a/8lFu0vp
Information
- Status
- Hiatus
- Year
- 2023
- Author
- Biosphere
Tags
Royal Road Stats
- Rating
- 4.7/ 5.0
- Followers
- 6
- Views
- 4,289
Chapters(16 total)
- 15: Tiberius IVNov 3, 2023
- 14: Virelia IIIOct 14, 2023
- 13: Zhanna IVSep 23, 2023
- 12: Aquila IIISep 13, 2023
- 11: Tiberius IIISep 5, 2023
- 10: Zhanna IIIAug 29, 2023
- 9: Virelia IIAug 26, 2023
- 8: Tiberius IIAug 23, 2023
- 7: Severus IIAug 20, 2023
- 6: Aquila IIAug 18, 2023
- 5: Virelia IAug 17, 2023
- 4: Zhanna IIAug 15, 2023
- 3: Tiberius IAug 11, 2023
- 2: Aquila IAug 10, 2023
- 1: Zhanna IAug 3, 2023
- Prologue: Severus IAug 3, 2023
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Community Reviews(1)
- OneHairyTarantulaRoyal Road★★★★★ 4.5I'm going make this brief because I like your story and don't have to many negatives. I like the characters and story quite a bit. I find them interesting enough to continue reading. Your dialogue is also pretty good for the most part so far.
As far as I can tell, I haven't seen many grammatical errors, if any. So good job on that front.
The dialogue is well written an interesting enough to keep me engaged as I read. The world building also seems pretty good. I might do with some more descriptors. You know like descriptions of what a room looks like or what food is like. You have them but I think more would help. Again, pretty good so far.
My one real complaint is a formatting one. I noticed that a lot of your dialogue is sandwiched in the middle of paragraphs. You should leave spaces between them and your descriptive text. It makes it very hard to read when it's formatted like that. I am also on mobile so that could be why it shows up like that. Really easy fix but it's one I'd recommend doing.
Anyway good job and I'll definitely keep following the story. I'll update the review if you fix some of the formatting issues. I'll bump up the style points.