The Cat and The Heir (Rewrite)

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Taken from her life and stripped of her powers, Merci Darkwood must begin a new. Her life now harsh and bleak suddenly becomes alive as she starts to question her sanity as a male voice in her head begins to aid her in a magical adventure.

Merci, starts to learn how to utilize the magical essence that resides within her as her druidic abilities are awakened. Within three months her progression is slow but progress is progress.

During this time, the voice inside her head has promised freedom and to flee the home that she knew. Despite hesitation Merci trusts the voice in her head as he has aided her through tough times and show her things that she thought wasn’t possible.

As she travels, Merci must face the questions, who was she, what happened, and who will she become?

This is a rewrite of my first attempt at posting this story.

This story contains very minor LitRPG elements, a bit of romance, fantasy, and adventure!

Chapter release Monday/Friday at 3:00pm CST.

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Status: Hiatus
Year: 2024
Author: RavensFantasy

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Rating: 4.9/ 5.0
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Community Reviews(6)

Elijah KingRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Merci is a young woman with striking red hair and green eyes, living under the strict control of Zarro. What makes her special is her rare druid like abilities, which is a big deal in her world where magic is feared and almost nonexistent. Despite the fear and control Zarro tries to impose, Merci has this inner curiosity and strength that pushes her to explore and understand her powers.
The story follows her journey as she navigates her oppressive home life while uncovering hints of a mysterious past tied to her powers. She’s guided by a voice in her head that helps her learn new spells, but she has to keep it all hidden because magic is dangerous to reveal in this world. The plot builds up to what feels like an inevitable confrontation with her fate, as Merci tries to figure out her place in a world that’s scared of what she’s becoming.
Overall, what I really like about the story is how it mixes mystery, magic, and personal growth. The tension and suspense are great, especially with the mysterious voice and the wolves lurking in the background. It’s compelling, and has me wanting more.
Personally I think if you're a fan of druid type characters, especially in D&D, you'll love the story that the author is telling.
FallenMoon3Royal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
I liked this book. The first chapters aren't that interesting, but as the story progressed, I became really attached to the protagonist and the story.
I think this book is a standout for the romance/fantasy genre. Some tropes made me turn my nose up at it, but I understand that they were there to help the plot progress.
The main character is interesting. She has the standard personality of young girls in romance books, but the author managed to make her more charismatic than usual for this type of book.
For now, she's very naive and weak-minded, that makes sense since she has no memories. But I hope her personality evolves a lot and she becomes a person with a strong personality and mind. That would definitely make it different from other romance books. She is a very good character and deserves a great evolution.
The magic in this world is good. I liked the protagonist's powers. It has the potential to become something really interesting.
I think the writing in this book is good. The descriptions are well done and the dialogues are fluid and realistic. Nothing to complain about.
Overall, I recommend this book. It's worth reading.
Kane DrakeRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
The Cat and Heir is an interesting story. The author has good ideas and implements them well. The story itself is a bit slow to start, and I do wish some of the magical components introduced in later chapters were brought up earlier in the story. However, once the MC starts to learn magic things got interesting quickly. There is a good amount of tension from chapter to chapter, and the author does a good job of teasing that a big conflict is coming between the main character's kidnappers and the group she was originally from.
The magic system is very interesting, and I liked the concept of this arch-druid regression. I'm really curious to see what kinds of powers Merci gets in future chapters, because she was being taught some really cool things already by about chapter 5. I was actually surprised how powerful her early spells seemed, as I could think of many applications that would take the story in interesting directions.
The characters are clearly distinct and the author did a good job of making sure they each behave in their own consistent way. The main character, Merci, does not take a lot of initiative early on in the story, however, that was starting to change in later chapters, so I think this won't be an issue and gives her room to develop as a character.
The author had a few grammar mistakes, but quickly corrected everything that I pointed out. Upon reading again, I didn't notice any issues, and I'm confident the author will be more mindful of them in the future. So the grammar for this story is good.
Overall, I recommend checking this story out. It's fun. It has druid magic, shapeshifting, and teases a mystery worth figuring out.
R. C. VettaRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Overall this story has an interesting premise. A girl with powerful abilities is captured by a nefarious husband and wife team who intend to drain her power repeatedly over time. The father is a man you just love to hate. The mother is a sponge for reader sympathy. The girl's amnesia lends to early chapters of rediscovery and asymmetrical character growth.
Style - This story has a style reliant on dialogue and the main character's internal monologue. Each character has a role to play in the story and their personality lean into their role. The choice to surround the main character in so much mystery definitely keeps you reading.
Grammar- The grammar has its moments where there could be a comma in give the reader a pause, but that could take away from the stream of consciousness style of narration. Some of the dialogue feels forced at times and could benefit from loosing up. Nothing takes away from the story itself, just a point of preference.
Story- I love the idea of a Feywild story and the use of a powerful, although under utilized "class". It will be interesting to see how much more power is hiding in this lost girl's body. The girl's situation makes her an easy character to sympathize with all the while you are yelling at her to run away from her captors.
Character- What can I say, once you are introduced to these characters you know what you are getting. The big mystery lies with the girl and the curious guiding voice that helps here through her captivity.
TreesworthRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
This is a totally charming story with an absolutely tragic set up. RavenFantasy has written a nuanced heroine who I am excited to see grow! I am enchanted by the blue grass, elven cities and wood cabins - there is texture to feel and a palette I can see.
Style - The story is told through well paced and balanced dialogue with appropriate exposition so far which I love to see. The descriptions are simple but show a vivid imagination with care for the palette and feel of the world that I appreciate. The idea of the voice in the head is so clever and well executed.
Story - I have a daughter and the premise of the story hit home fast and made me a little bit uncomfortable (in a good way?). I barely feel like we have scratched the surface yet but I am getting some fun DnD style adventure with some promise and I am looking forward to a payoff with a free Merci and vengeance against Zarro.
Characters - The naivete of the MC really juxtaposes the atrocity of the antagonist. Zarro is just the worst and I love it. It also gives some really fertile ground for Merci to grow, will she retain her innocence or will the experience taint her worldview?
Having spent a little time around cows I can absolutely tell you that they know they are cows… and some of them are assholes. In the milking shed I always imagined it a bit like a busy nail salon: lots of gossip and calm chit chat till some Karen demanding she speak to a manager pushes her way through the crowd. I’d love to see your skills at creating characters and dialogue apply to the animals as well.
Grammar - I can see that you have done quite a bit of work on mistakes already, keep it up! When I read through I noticed some small things but nothing too bad.
saba_86Royal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
The concept is immediately engaging. The idea of a reincarnated elf queen, a pair of ruthless power-harvesters, and a world with twin suns creates a rich tapestry. The detail about the suns' abnormal positioning due to the queen's abduction is a fantastic touch that shows how cosmic and significant the event is.
The story moves quickly from the portal's arrival to the moral dilemma and the extraction scene. It doesn't get bogged down, maintaining a good pace that keeps the reader engaged with the central conflict.
The story has great visual elements (blue grass, purple skies), but engaging more senses would pull the reader deeper into the world.
Describe the smell of ozone, the sound of the girl's muffled whimpers or the hum of the crystals overloading, the sight of veins glowing under her skin. Instead of "her body started to twitch," you could write, "Her back arched against the leather restraints, a silent scream frozen on her lips as a faint, golden light began to seep from her pores, snaking through the tubes."
This is a story with a powerful and captivating core. The dynamic between Zarro and Violet, set against a backdrop of cosmic consequence and personal grief, is a fantastic recipe for a compelling narrative.