The Boy With Rabies

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Description

It was supposed to be a normal day for 17-year-old Theodore "Theo" Williams. He was an animal-loving teenager. One day, he was in the woods when he saw a raccoon. It approached him and he thought it wanted to be pet. When it bit him, little did he know that the bite will soon have him fighting for his life.

DISCLAIMER: I got this idea based on a documentary I watched a few years ago. I apologize if any information is not accurate. I tried to use the stuff I remembered from the documentary.

This story is also on my WattPad account: @SparklingSnazzer

Update: I did go back and edit some more so I hope it looks a bit better now. :)

Information

Status: Completed
Year: 2019
Author: Lydia R.

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Rating: 3.1/ 5.0
Followers: 5
Views: 9,035

Chapters(19 total)

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RznRoyal Road
★★ 2.0
This was a bit awkward, not because written particularly detailed so as to cause a lot of discomfort in the reader, in fact it is the opposite. The story is still dramatic and unsettling enough, but some of the prose and the descriptions are lacking. The grammar and pacing were fine, but at the same time did not feel like its length and lack of strong details worked out as planned. It doesn't carry itself well with the characters, the portrayal of the disease or the dialogue.
Tana NariRoyal Road
★ 0.5
Most people can guess the plot of the story right away, and if they can't, then what are the odds they can read this review?
The story does, indeed, follow a teen boy's trials after getting bitten by a raccoon carrying the famous, deadly, and misunderstood virus known as rabies.
By showing no understanding of the virus, human behavior, or hospitals.
Editing is nonexistent, and though the basic spelling and punctuation is solid, the experience is filled with wall-of-text paragraphs which make it near impossible to determine who is speaking in any given line. The habit of switching between Past and Present tenses are but icing on the cake.
Which may be a blessing, since the dialogue is more wooden than Ben Stein playing Pinochio as directed by George Lucas. So even if you can separate out the characters, none of them have a personality to call their own, and the seventeen year old boy acts more like he's seven.
Then we move on to progression- which is perhaps the most welcome part of the story. It doesn't waste time, jumping right into the disease without taking more than a moment to tell us the characters' names and relationships with one another, nor is there any purple prose to slow down the story.
Which is a blessing, since it doesn't bother trying to build a rapport between reader and character. A child dying of a horrible disease, a mother and father facing the likelihood of their son being taken from them. The knowledge that even if he survives, his life will be forever altered by the raveges the virus inflicts on his brain and body.
It skims over all that stuff, so it doesn't even have a chance to get it wrong.
Worst of all, for people like myself who have an interest in biology and realism, is the portrayal of the disease itself. I have to wonder if the author bothered to so much as read a single medical article on the progression of the illness. Amongst other things, there are two types of rabies (that infects humans, at any rate) that have quite different s