The elf Astrid finally became of age, allowing her to join the local adventure school. Little did she know that her life will soon change as she is thrown into chaos. Will she be able to maintain control, or will she fall and lose everything.

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jason_smith1984Royal Road

★★★★ 4.0

This story started out to be great and still is however it now as of chapter 13 got too dark for my Taste's however don't be discouraged by that it is still one of the better fictions I've read on this site. Admittedly I don't have high standard's but I won't penalize a fiction for being of a type that I find too dark or Boeing. Overall style was alright and easy to understand.
The story is delightful up until chap 13
As for grammar well I didn't notice any errors so good marks there
As for character I especially like your main character
As for overall I gave it the lowest score I gave the sub score's .
Once again don't worry about me not likeing your fic anymore it just no longer is my type of fic anymore

PyottlRoyal Road

★★★ 3.0

As of chapter 15.2
Style
Good 3rd-person narrative, not as rushed as some of the other stories on here are, which I think really helps establish the plot. Other novels probably would have gone with 1-3 chapters to get to the (presumably pivotal) chapter 15 events.
But the prose is often somewhat clumsy. It's not quite run-on sentences, but there's nonetheless a tendency to string together more clauses than what makes for a decent read.
Grammar
Related to the style issue, there's some punctuation problems. It's luckily not the biggest deal, but it's fairly frequent, and could definitely be improved on. Likewise, there's some issues with mixed-up words (where/were), tenses, incorrect syntax.. well. A bit of everything, I suppose. Nothing really huge anywhere, but it piles up.
Story
It's a straight-forward plot so far, with an elf girl going to some type of academy, learning magic, getting a familiar etc. Then it turns darker, but I found the shift in tone perfectly fine.
Now, but that's just my personal pet peeve and not really a fault of the story: I absolutely despise tropeish romances, and this one is about as bad as it gets. Vaguely eligible female meets vaguely eligible man. Two chapters later they're basically married. Urk.
Characters
The heroine is quite likeable, and it will be interesting to see how she develops from here.
Some actions of some characters were perhaps a bit questinable in a few scenes, but nothing too bad.
Overall
Personal hate of the romance aside, I think there's potential here. Sure, could do with some cleaning up, but even without there's worse out there.
Crucial will probably be where the story and the characters go from here on out. A few more chapters should answer that question.

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