The Agartha Loop

Self-Published

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Description

They asked Amber to become a magical girl three times.She refused.That only made her more interesting.The fourth time, she asked them.

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2021
Author: RavensDagger

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 4.7/ 5.0
Followers: 1,435
Views: 151,951

Chapters(18 total)

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Community Reviews(10)

vini_kalRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Nice magical girl story, author's still setting the tone for the whole story, but I like the fae vibe and the myths becoming reality.
Hope to see more urban legends, maybe even Slenderman.
Thanks for the new meal, Ravens, your stories are awesome.
I still need to write some more words... Who decided on 50 words minimum?
Undead AdventurerRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
At the point I've read, which is the entirety of it to this point I fully believe that you need to read to chapter 41 or more to fully understand the entire premise, the pacing is fairly fast due to the main character getting swept up in this new life of hers and she seems fully believable with her reactions
But I cannot stress enough that the twist is fairly late blooming at this point and If you are interested at all you need to see it before making a informed choice
caerulexRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
I binged this story to current and I've really enjoyed it. Ravensdagger is clearly knowledgeable about the genre and the story is filled with costumed girls and boys and the Seelie, magical creatures that grant the magical girls/boys their powers in exchange for fighting off nightmares.
There are still some unanswered questions about the world but I'm excited to see where the characters are going and based on the story's title and art Ravensdagger has commissioned for this fic, including the cover, I have a feeling there's going to be lots of interesting plot points to come.
BlueCoffeeJavaRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
As the title says, I'm writing this quite early in the story's release.
That said, the writing so far matches the high quality I have come to associate with RavensDagger. We get to start off with an action scene while the details of the setting are introduced in a smooth, engaging fashion that maintains narrative flow. The main character comes off as a reasonable everyday Jane suddenly finding herself in extraordinary, utterly unreasonable circumstances. I especially like her reaction to the cat.
Leahcim ZanathaxRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
So far, it's been really enjoyable. The plot is only really just getting started, and we've only really gotten a general idea of what the world is like, but good stuff so far!
It wants more words, and I don't have too much more to say, so I thought I'd write about how I don't have much to else to say yet. That seems both logical and amusing to me, so here you go, more words!
Phil276Royal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
At the time of this writing there is only the prologue so there's really not much to compliment or criticize. What I can write about however are both the author and overarching theme. RavensDagger is a very prolific author with a track record of high-quality fictions along a gamut of themes. what is however always the same is that his stories feature realistically portrayed adolescent girls in broadly familiar settings with a subtle twist that makes the story fresh and engaging. Although Magical Girls are a popular theme in Anime, this has not translated into a popularity in stories on this website (Unlike other themes like transmigration and the like). The overall thematic seems to be right in RavensDagger’s wheelhouse though and I'm excited to see what he has/will come up with.
I'll be back around chapter 10 to give an update on whether, and if so how, my feelings have changed.
Sledor12Royal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
The way this is written makes it seem more believable. there are consequences for monster attacks, and the people without powers sometimes seem slightly resentful. Overall I really like the story so far and the protagonist actually uses her head. She just doesn't go with the flow, and her emotions seem real.
ParahummintheEternalOptimistRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
I am a long time follower of RavensDagger, and he is a prolific author. I enjoyed it. The Agartha Loop is less lighthearted and humorous than most of RavensDagger’s works, but it works.
The author takes urban legends, folklore, and myths, and uses them in interesting ways.
We get to see some realistic consequences of Magical Girls and monsters. In the first few chapters, we see the sheer devastation that monsters can bring. The protagonist and her father go to a disaster relief camps. In fact, monster incursions feel more like natural disasters than invasions.
Raven also uses Magical Girls as a vehicle to explore class division and wealth disparity. Magicals are at the top of human society, and in military operations, there is often friction between magicals and baseline humans.
Lord of ChangeRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
i will say that i am enjoying the twists on magical girls they are putting here,but thats kinda his jam,so i will just say that there is a above zero chance of it going madoka magica, right now it is also showing consequences for monster attacks,which is definitely new in the magical girl genre
Gibb, Occasionally Omnipotent Annoyance.Royal Road
★★ 2.0
Alright, for those of you read up on RavensDagger, this is closer to Dead Tired than Cinammon Bun in terms of quality. (Not sawing this pieces flaws are similar to dead tired, just the overall quality.)
The pacing is insane, crazy, bananas and other statements of shock. We go from getting half a line to digest seemingly large parts of the main character, her father, and their backstory to getting half a line to understand monsters exist and magical girls exist and look there are monsters and we're gonna nonchalantly go fight one, worry while fighting it, then be nonchalant then we don't want to be a magic girl then the military is here because the town is gone then we do want to be a magical girl and OH MY G O D.
There's no reason for anything. The main character has no character, and what little character she says she has is flashed through in like, 3 lines.
it feels less like someone publishing a fullsome story and more like someone has taken their "To be fleshed out" second draft and posted it.
The rest of it, so far, is also seemingly surface-level. The mc is given a choice between the military and being part of an academy. Well, in chapter 1, she's shown to not want to be a magical girl, (We're never given a reason for this) so one can assume not wanting to be a magical girl is a part of her motivation, hance why I thought she'd join the military, but nope! Making decisions of their own is for characters, and the mc ain't one of those, that's for sure!
RavensDagger seems to be putting out every idea-string that has the potential to be a story, rather than creating a solid core for a story and allowing it to flesh out more rather than at all.
I think this is a classic case of an author putting out a few good character-driven stories, then a few meh character-driven stories trying to play their hand at a story based on worldbuilding, and it just ain't the play.