Ten Lives Nine Deaths

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If you read my story on any website besides Royal Road and Scribble Hub, the website has copied my story without my permission.

Humans rule their known galaxy. They look upon primitive worlds like a benevolent parent and decide they can assist their advancement until developed sufficiently to join the happy human galactic family. Abiding by strict rules and subject to governance, the Galactic Planet Agency (GPA), on behalf of humankind, manipulates the development of planets by inserting a new life, a Galactic Planet Agent, into the native inhabitant’s community. Biding their time, the Agent rises to a position of power to exert the required influence to guide the native population in the appropriate direction: Civilisation -> Technology -> Trade -> Exploitation. Oops, scratch that last one …

For one Agent, his expected leave is cancelled, and an unknown sponsor orchestrates his next mission for a different purpose. This is his story (First Person POV).

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N.B. The sexual content flag is innuendo.

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2021
Author: Tituswolf

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Rating: 4.1/ 5.0
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Community Reviews(3)

alphaReviewsRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
My original review was very positive but also included some suggestions / small criticisms for the author to ponder, who then took it upon himself to incorporate them as much as possible with significant edits. It really shows that a lot thought, hard work and dedication has gone into this.
Anyhow, the story and characters are excellent. The MC is moral and yet complex, feeling very real. The other characters also feel very real and interesting, and the challenges faced by them are interesting and gripping.
I wouldn't say that this is perfect, but I don't doubt the author is still working to improve it even while continuing to progress the story and in any case, even as is, it certainly deserves a top spot on RR.
grovekeeperRoyal Road
★★★★ 3.5
Ten lives nine deaths is a story about an agent for an advanced human civilisation going to different worlds and leading civilisation in certain ways. The plot and thread are great, though the style and grammar leaves much go desire.
Style: This might be the single biggest drawback to the story. The prose is good, the internal monologuing is actually written as monologuing though it's confusing as it can often be interpreted as a mass of disjointed sentences. Another flaw is the lack of area descriptions. We know about where they are, but we don't know about the place. We don't the distances to different places nor how they look like. Numerous valleys are mentioned, but without better descriptions rather than directions over different chapters, it's difficult to keep in mind. I would suggest adding *** etc for different sections in the same chapter instead of continuing as a single block.
Especially in the area where he went hunting after experiencing the rage and woke up later who knows where
Grammar leaves much to be desired. The main issue is the writer intentionally maong sentences long and he does it by using more than 2 connectors in a single sentence. Maybe it's goblin grammar, but the author seems to struggle between making the culture (or lack thereof) known and writing good conversations. Many sentences miss words like is, if, whether though the author tells me that it's intentional. The random capitalisations are a pain, especially the capitalisation of tribe, goblin etc
Story is great. The plot and the way it progresses, the slow unlocking of his memories and thoughts on his organisation are written really well. The plot is good and refreshing. The progression speed is also very good, it's not a slow burn nor is it fast paced, but offers a good speed without sacrificing anything else. The characteristics of a primitive society is captured more and more as the story progresses and the MC developing as a character. The world building comes off slow but kic
hibigfan100Royal Road
★★★ 3.0
The story is slow-going. I expected to read about civilization building but 12 chapters in there's only been 1 paragraph related to that:
He changes a farm's crop rotation.
The rest is related to breeding and his wives, and some misadventures.
I'm not hooked by the 12th chapter and the lack of effective paragraphs to pace the actions taken makes the novel difficult to read.
There's a huge problem with grammar in the way of paragraphs being too long and infrequent, and inefficient writing - fewer words will work just as well as a lot, and be easier on the brain.
There are also issues with clarity. It's not always clear what's going on, why, or what the subject of whatever conversation the characters are having is. Here's one example:
Not much happens in this sections other than a deal, yet still so many words are used to make this happen. Questions are at the end.
Waving to Duzsia, she escorts Milga to me as I wait beside the river.
I drag her into the river without complaint or struggle. A quiet determination exudes from every fibre of her being, yes, she is different and therefore extremely dangerous.
“I am not going to steal your spirit. I will pretend to of course but your death serves me better.” I dunk her before she can answer and of all the goblins, she holds her breath and floats sedately beneath the water. I inwardly smile and punch her in the stomach. Shortly after bubbles of air erupt from her mouth and for a moment her eyes are ablaze with shock. She recovers, although her face is passing from green to blue-green.
I drag her up to gasp for air and then slowly submerge her again. I hold her until the air in her lungs exhaust and once again her face changes colour. She nods, not in desperation or panic, a signal. I lift her out once again.
“You must allow me access to Zeb Stone Grim’s seed. Once I birth a daughter, I will solely be responsible for her upbringing. If I chose afterwards to return to the tribe you will allow me to, holding my daughter hostage