Tale of Lolicon in Another World

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Description

Preface :

Fanfiction yet Original.

Fanfiction because there'll be a lot of character and town name that taken from popular game/manga/novel. Only the character name is same. Character personality is following mine (Author) dream.

Original story created by me. Based of my unique dream 10 years ago.

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Synopsis :

5 years after the dissapeared of his father, Ryousuke Akira got a mysterious package from him. He then knew the existance of the another world Edea. With the help the item power he then train himself untill limit.

10 years after that he meet the self proclaimed goddess in the hospital room after 2 months hospitalized because of traffic accident. Using the ability he got toward the goddess he then obtained a 'cheat'. Using his cheat he 'collect' his dream as a gentleman (Lolicon).

Starting the journey with destroying a Kingdom that hunt him, he leisurely go tourism while adding more harem member to go to the promised place Midgard

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2017
Author: Suzaku Ryou

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 3.7/ 5.0
Followers: 116
Views: 65,097

Chapters(26 total)

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Community Reviews(4)

deadshift2010Royal Road
★★★★ 3.5
I'll be honest, I haven't even read any of your current 9 chapters right now. I'm extremely busy and only have time to read quality fictions, so quite often I end up basing my decision on whether to read it on the amount of chapters and the synopsis. The grammar in the synopsis didn't inspire me with a lot of confidence as it leads me to believe that the entire story has grammar like that. I'd reccomend fixing the grammar in the synopsis and make it proper English as a synopsis is meant to try and sell people on reading your story. I'll probably end up properly reading this around 15 chapters.
Liamrodhudson331Royal Road
★★★ 3.0
And here I thought Awakened Cheater grammar was horrendous. A little advices, you should improve on your grammar (ASAP) and giving away your story in the synopsis isn't helping.
IwanttowriteRoyal Road
★★★ 2.5
Ampas...
Too many cut scene there and there without an explanation, and what with your other POV? Basically its just a "copy paste". And its seem you want to build a mysterious character but what i seem its just a failur
aissh such a shame!
cnicks032296Royal Road
★★★ 2.5
This story has a great potential, however the grammar and the fact that the story is both kind of rushed and the characters aren’t fleshed out is dragging the score down. It is nice that you have started fleshing out the main character but the members in the harem need to be fleshed out also. A good example is (I hate to use these) are Japanese stereotypes aka tsundere and kuudere and so on and so forth. They aren’t totally fleshed out true but they set a good guideline to fully flesh out a character later. I’ve also noticed that some words are misspelled or have random punctuation inside the word. I basically read the current chapters however a backstory is IMPORTANT if you just have a different viewpoint with hardly any real emotion then it’s hard to empathize with the character here is a good idea do a backstory on the two church women and how their mentality got warped by dying and time traveling repeatedly.