Tale of an Anomaly

Self-Published

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Description

It was supposed to be a normal weekend, staying a little bit longer in bed, not worrying about work, spending quality family time, or partying late night for some people and hoping to get a little lucky. Then why the hell were half the buildings disappearing right in front of them? What was the big message in the sky supposed to mean? And why the fuck was there a dragon in the middle of the city?!

Follow Bharat, an ordinary freelancer out for a job, who, after getting caught up in an unfortunate series of events finds himself all alone in a forest full of dangerous creatures out for his blood, along with a strange screen in front of him that felt awfully similar to the games he used to play and the books he used to read as a kid. Maybe his countless hours of gaming weren’t useless after all!

Release Schedule: 4 days a week

About the author:

Just an amateur writer from India who started writing as hobby during quarantine. English is not my native language, so any kind of feedback is most welcome. Don’t take the tags and warnings too seriously though. It’s just to prevent flames later, just in case.

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2021
Author: Alpha_guru

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 4.4/ 5.0
Followers: 64
Views: 13,760

Chapters(20 total)

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Community Reviews(3)

Invictus21Royal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
The story was not what I expected when I had started reading it. It was much more. It begins with the typical world apocalypse and transfers to a training environment. But the author keeps the story enjoyable throughout the journey. Though I'm still chapter 10 and not much has happened yet, I have thoroughly enjoyed what I have read so far and plan to continue reading. Keep up the excellent work.
Style: The novel is excellent with its pacing and narration. Would suggest the author try using the blue boxes a bit more. Believe that would take the story to the next level.
Grammar: Grammer looked good. Exceptionally well, considering this is one of the new works. I think it would only get better with time.
Story: Awesome story. More than the story, it is the way the author takes us through it which makes it a compelling read. Hope you can continue with the same
Character: The character looks good, and monologues are definitely helping. But still, see scope to improve more over here. Considering the story is still in the beginning stages, I would look forward to more.
If you are still on the fence on whether you should read it or not, I would suggest definitely giving it a try
KevinADavisRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
Read the first 5 chapters. Intriguing start with a solid introduction into Bharat. The opening in more of an omniscient third POV does the story well in this case.
Story: The opening hook is strong leading to a promise of an action filled fantasy. These hooks keep coming as the chapters evolve. The situation is developing as the chapters progress. Stakes
Style: Dialogue is good, though I would like more of it and interaction with other characters. The pace is steady. The most difficult aspect is the shifts in POV. As a reader without any indication that POV has changed, I reread to confirm or discern if I misinterpreted.
Grammar: I'm not skilled enough to identify the actual issues. There did seem to be places that would work better grammatically.
Characters: Bharat is developing clearly, especially during moments of interaction with Xenakieth. I am curious about his flaws and assets are simple and I’ve yet to see any direction in arcs which is normal at this stage of the narrative. I can empathize with his situation.
Xenakieth has a quirky personality that is quick to relate to.
Overall, a good read that I'd suggest. The hooks and questions are solid, hooks move into true situations and answers come in time. The POV shifts are the only area that caused me concern.
HyperAlphaKingRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
Overall, this is a decent attempt for a first time writer. The story doesn't provide any unique elements or twists to the typical litRPG "System Apocalypse" scenario.
Style:
Pacing is slow for my tastes, the main character spends way too much time in the forest hunting rabbits, 12 chapters worth of hunting rabbits. The character progresses very slowly, which isn't necessarily bad, as they explore and try to figure out the system, but it would be more interesting if they encountered something different every once in a while.
Sentences and dialogue can be a bit clunky, but decent. The protagonist would say something to himself like "Watching anime paid off!" then would say the same thing would repeat in the following paragraph.
One thing I do like is the little Remarks, left by the System. They can be cute for the bunny enemies and funny. They add a sort of casual tone to the story.
Grammar:
As the author states, English is not their first language, so keep that in mind. There is some funkiness with the punctuation and missing capitalization. It can be a bit distracting, but I trust the author can fix these with revisions.
Story:
Not much of a story, this is your typical litRPG plot of "World gets the System, now protagonist must survive." This is much of the same. There aren't major plotlines and action scenes are serviceable. I would recommend the author to determine a unique mechanic or selling point, that makes their story stand out from the rest.
Character:
As of review, there is only 1 character of Bharat, the protagonist. He's a fairly interesting character, with flaws and some strengths. But the lack of even basic supporting characters to talk to does inhibit the growth of Bharat.
I would recommend the author to at least one more character, with whom Bharat can interact, and for their flaws to result in mutual conflict and growth.
All in all, this story is fairly decent but rough around the edges. I feel with some trimming and editing of the chapters, it could