Tail Devourer

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Description

Bitten to death by a snake, Shai reincarnates in another world as a snake.

The familiar world she knew changed into a brutal world of magic and cultivation, governed by an almost omnipresent, unfeeling System with a single law of order:Devour or Be Devoured.

Shai is merely a little white snake, alone and overwhelmed with everything. Thankfully, she can cultivate and become strong by eating...

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What to expect:

1. System, Level up, skills, Law Comprehension, evolution, and more...

2. Whimsy, lunacy... and sometimes idiocy as well...

3. Fast-paced, with a lot of fights...

4. And of course, a starvin' snek...

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2024
Author: Eon R. Solara

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Rating: 4.4/ 5.0
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Community Reviews(10)

Reading BoiRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
So this is a monster litrpg with a female mc who got reincarnated into a cultivation world. The description of the story is pretty accurate and the world is pretty brutal to our little snek. We have a relatively standard system with some differences since it's also cultivation. Shai gets some interesting skills that we so far have only seen a little of but promise much at later stages of power.
I'd recommend this if you are searching for a monster mc who is relatively smart and a snake.
adam1Royal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
So far, this is an interesting advancement and progression story.
It's moving rather quickly, and at this point there are a few plot threads that aren't being used effectively, but that could change with more chapters.
The world-building is a little loose and a lot of the rules aren't fully clear, but that seems to be because the main character is effectively clueless at this point and piecing things together as she goes.
Overall, this is definitely worth a read.
DeathwingminionRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
I really like non-human story's and find them unique and enjoyable.because they provide a different view point then a human. That why I really like this story form snake pov, even if she was a human perviously.
This story is good with it's non-human aspect, and really like the snake and her personality. Shai is our little snake MC. I thinks she is in an litRPG world. Where theirs cultivation and Evolving monsters and a system.
The monster MC litRPG with a female snake protagonist offers an enjoyable experience overall. The character development is good, but what I really like is the worldbuliding. You rarely find this kind of story in a cultivation world. And i want learn more about the mysterious spiders and dungeon they inhabit. The Grammar is mostly flawless, though they are occasional misspellings.
Despite the initial lack of extensive interactions with others, the world hints at potential for diverse encounters with intelligent monsters and some humans. Also I really love the spiders and their little society.
They are some issuse but despite these issues, the story remains enjoyable and engaging. I highly recommend it to new readers, whoever like cultivation or non-human story's. it's good story with a unique non-human MC.
Reader1587Royal Road
★★★★ 4.0
Please bear in mind that the review was written after reaching chapter 35 and may not reflect any impactful events or style changes after that point.
Overall, a decent novel that is all right enough but currently lacks re-reading potential. The groundwork is present and can be upgraded to the next level. The present version won't make you desperate after reaching a chapter with the next button grayed out.
Grammar: good; no glaring mistakes that would disrupt the reading experience.
Character: The protagonist should be developed a bit more; currently, readers might find it hard to become invested in her. Shai also exhibits minor annoying traits that are, fortunately, not too disruptive. For some reason, I find several secondary characters (dungeon spiders) more interesting than the protagonist herself. So far, the author has addressed the biggest issue from the previous version, where the main character literally became baggage for a few more powerful characters, resulting in a significant loss of agency for herself. There still remains a feeling that external factors and system drive the development of the protagonist, and she is currently not yet the master of her own fate.
Story: I would classify it as a light litRPG, but unfortunately, it feels like leveling has so far had no significant impact on the protagonist. Shai is slowly upgrading her skills, occasionally swapping one skill for another, but otherwise the story fails to convey a preferred long-term strategy behind it beyond the avoidance of certain negative impacts. Special attributes look like afterthoughts without having an impact on the protagonist. To be honest, the LitRPG part is lacking, but the story has no quality yet to become a GameLit. Messages like "You have achieved a small breakthrough" are presently extraneous information with a minor impact on character development and don't feel like an integral part of the story.
Style: swapping 3 POVs (spider community, Shai, and dungeon invaders). They
Strictly WorseRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
This is based on the first 12 chapters so obviously things could change as the story progresses but I figured I'd seen enough to give a first review that might be helpful to those considering picking this story up.
This is a reincarnated as a monster with a system story with the particular monster this time being a snake and the system having something of a cultivation theme. If those kind of progression fantasys are your thing then this is looking to be a fairly solid example of the genre. The system manages to balance not being too complex at the start while still leaving room to grow and having some clear limitations like a maximum number of skills known.
The fight scenes are pretty good though the limitations of her body and skills by nature mean her approach to combat is in danger of becoming a little repetitive but the author does a good job of mixing up the opponents, terrain and objectives enough to help mitigate that. Tools are also slowly added to her arsenal at a decent pace which I think will mean that is less of a problem as the story progresses.
There is the odd very minor issue with spelling and grammar but these seem to get fixed when pointed out in edit suggestions.
Overall while I can't point to any particular aspect of the writing that is truly spectacular, it's all good, and the cumulative effect of that is an enjoyable story that's really easy to read and I'm looking forward to seeing where it goes. With a start like this I'll be shocked if the story doesn't hit rising stars.
SuvrenimRoyal Road
★★★★ 3.5
A really good story, there is a bit of an issue where the author is really forcing the MC to befriend the spiders, never completing timed quests, and the so called friendship with spiders resembles stockholme syndrome more than it does friendship.
the story is good, but is definitely in need of some work.
edit: i was looking back at my old reviews and saw that i was unreasonably harsh, so i cut out my rant and other stuff. personal feelings dont really have a place in reviews.
ShadowTratonRoyal Road
★★★ 3.0
Before I delve into anything else, I have to mention the stylistic mess. System messages - yeah, what a surprise in a LitRPG - go from sometimes bold and sometimes not, to entirely green, then to nothing but brackets, back to bold, and last, but certainly least, you get the entire rainbow thrown at you because whatever causes a system prompt apparently determines its color now.
Which leads to a completely new problem I've never had to deal with before: No matter what background color you use, there's always at least one type of system message you'll hardly be able to read!
Now with that out of the way...the writing!
And boy, oh boy! Not to exaggerate, but way too much feels empty, bland - soulless even. Often, sentences hardly flow by themselves, not to mention with each other, and the protagonist feels more like a robot than the living, breathing being we're lead to believe she is.
The ironic consistency in that would almost be funny if it weren't for the negative impact on immersion and overall reading experience.
The grammar beyond that is okay-ish. You find a good few mistakes but none of it impacts comprehension.
Lastly, the system prompts almost exclusively guide Shai's actions. Which makes for a lack of agency as far as I'm concerned.
And an important rule of thumb: Show, don't tell!
"Shai refused to give up. One thing about her was that once she set her mind to something, she'd either break or complete the task."
I'd much rather have her collapse from exhaustion and curse in frustration, yet she still continues, instead of just being told who she is.
Overall, it's a pretty average execution of an interesting premise in almost every regard and you have to either like, or put up with the colorful style and the stiff writing. The former is definitely something the author should fix (and will after the volume ends according to the author), as for the latter....I honestly don't know. It's so fundamental that probably only extensive writing, or reading lots of goo
OddmonRoyal Road
★★★ 3.0
After reading a few chapters in, I’m honestly confused (or left in the dark) about a lot of things. This story lacks the oomph to keep me wanting to read more; it skips over many enjoyable character and world building introductions (and everything beyond that) that I would have liked to have read.
The character, Shai, wasn’t really introduced to us. All I’ve gleaned is that she hated snakes, but accepted becoming one within seconds. She also rapidly accepts her new life...while questioning nothing but somehow understanding everything. I haven’t noticed any kind of personality about her yet...she also has no motivations or goal; the plot only moves forward because of the quests given to her; the first quest is literally to just eat some food, and the second is basically to git gud (I am paraphrasing here). The quests pop up like you’re getting video game quests from random occurrences, and not because it’s important to the character’s actual desires (because she doesn’t seem to have any).
Maybe my words are a disservice to the writing, but I feel like everything is moving quite fast and without direction, while following this kind of format: create RPG player, player kills an enemy, player gets a new skill, player levels up, player gets a quest, player does the quest, player gets another quest. To be more clear, it’s like I’m reading a somewhat brief report of what someone did while they played a video game, rather than actually exploring a new world and character in a narrative.
Grammar looks okay: I didn’t notice any major issues jumping out at me. The writing/story feels rushed -too fast paced?- though, or perhaps it comes back to how the writing doesn’t explore the character’s thoughts to any satisfying degree (mostly I thought of it like a report or short info dump about what they did) with a few briefly direct thoughts sprinkled around.
As for how all of this ties together; to me, it looks like this character gets a lot of handouts in the form of skills and lev
LickItRoyal Road
★★★ 3.0
Overall: A non-human reincarnated as a monster story with a female MC that now needs to survive in a snake's body. It is hard to follow the story because there are a lot of situations that just feel out of place, breaking the reading experience. Also we as readers never know how big MC is. MC can simply scale trees and eat wolves but hamsters shadow over MC? Also the Python mouth situation just does not fit size wise. This keeps breaking my immersion all the time and makes it hard to form a picture of the story.
Style: A cultivation flavored litRPG with a Monster MC that reincarnated into a baby snake. Not too bad but the interactions of the MC and the system are all over the place in how they feel. There is magic in this world and skills progress by fighting and training. The attributes are… let's say special. My guess is that the author really didn’t want to use the standard attributes and make their own home brew. Also the system is in colored text but sometimes it has other colors, not a big fan personally.
Story: MC dies, Becomes snake with magic and now needs to survive in a world with magic. MC has a system to gain more power and has a blessing from the get go that gives +5 points in all basic stats. This makes MC way more powerful and lets MC fight way over MC's weight class. MC just gains random knowledge and does things out of the blue while fighting.
Grammar: Mostly good but few instances with sentences that break the reading flow. Generally it is hard for me to immerse myself and the sentences feel stiff. Some variations and more flowery words would help to smooth them out. Very robotic and on a spectrum more on the side of what an AI would type with minimal prompts.
Character: MC dies from a mysterious snake bit, hates snakes from that. Reincarnates into a baby snake and hats her own body. Few chapters it is no problem anymore. It is too extreme a change in personality without reason. MC also just randomly does things and knows things which are confusin
GravishRoyal Road
★★ 2.0
I do like the story and the bit slow pacing at the start was ok.
The charakter development is nice and steady and not like a switch.
A bit plus to use snakes.
Sadly I have to take points away for dropping it... and wish new chapters would come out since it was in the middle of starting a big event.