Stronghold In The Apocalypse

Information

Status

Hiatus

Year

2018

Author

Apocalypse Defender

• Announcement!
  Dec 16, 2018

Reviews

Community Reviews(10)

• DarkOneRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  Story is awesome! More please! Ignore the haters because they can't write a good story or their story's sucks!
• YoshaRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  Nice work for now. I cant say wether the story is very good right now, but the idea and your expression of it is wonderful. However, please edit your work before posting as there are many grammatical and spelling errors in your work. I hope you continue to keep up the good work.
  4 stars for good idea and execution.
• shader009Royal Road

  ★★★★ 3.5

  Yes, this story has potential. But its got problems.
  1) Grammar- Now I'm not a grammar nazi and in all honesty it's not that bad. A good edit/editor should  clean it up nicely.
  2) Characters- Almost all stories of this nature tend to have one dimensional support characters. The M.C. gets some fleshed out backstory along with a good helping of plot armor, but this creates problems for the support characters, who tend to become boring extras whose names are usually forgotten. The sheer number of support characters only adds to the problem. Just start with a smaller group and only add to them once the original gang has been fleshed out in detail and have their own irreplaceable role.
  3) Harem- I'm not against this genre, hell i love it, but just like the problem with the support characters, if you keep throwing women at him within a short period of time, we'll probably forget about them or not care. Take it slow and steady. Also in respect to both the previous point and this one, try to find a balance between adventuring and some slice of life stuff. Too much of either becomes boring.
  4) M.C.- Don't have the emcee solve every problem. Leave the random stuff for the support characters. Even if he is one punch man level op, use the support to atleast build tension by cleaning up the small fries and stalling the boss for him.
  These are the major problems i can see right now or am anticipating soon. Now as i said these problems are solvable and for all know you might already have a grand plan that makes my views moot.
  Either way your story is enjoyable and I eagerly await your updates. Good luck and I hope that you'll continue until the story is completed.
• cwsRoyal Road

  ★★★ 3.0

  I’m only giving this a 3 star because I don’t know what is going to happen in the future. I like the idea of building a stronghold and being “Humanity’s Last Hope” but is he going to build a super stronghold that he has to constantly repair and keep everything inside his stronghold safe? Anyway, I hope you do well with this story and I’m looking for more.
• JknottRoyal Road

  ★★★ 2.5

  You should work on your sentence structure. The flow just isnt there. Your word use needs editing. As an example. You wrote stole instead of steal. Theres more but i dont want to go into greater detail.
• riles656Royal Road

  ★★ 1.5

  Story itself seems interesting. I’ve always liked base building stories. This one, however, finds a way to ruin it.
  Spoiler: Spoiler
  So the theme is that the dude does an online survey and gets stuck in a world based on those survey answers. He gets to build a base while surviving a zombie apocalypse. That’s as good as the story ever gets. The story would be cool if the author had consistency and paid more attention to what he’s writing. The weapons, for starters. All weapons made after ww2 are somehow unable to be used. They just don’t work. Yet guns made before/during ww2 or bought from the “store” work. Makes no sense because guns haven’t advanced that far after ww2. They were just made to look a bit better and hold more rounds. That’s it. No reason for them to work since the bullets are the ones doing 80% of the work. Bullets made in ww2 aare made the same today. Anyways, base building. Sounds awesome, till the author cochs it up. Instead of using the normal way of using base points (or something system created) it uses resources. Real resources. Story has these weird resource units (author doesn’t specify how much of each resource is considered a unit btw) that it uses to build something. Lvl 1 uses a few thousand units of a resource. But at the point I stopped, some of the “upgrades” cost millions. No idea why or how. Here is the last point of why I gave a sh*t rating. Authors memory (or lack of said memory). We get at day 1 a quest to save this chick and her parent by escorting them to the base before the apocalypse hits of. Cool. Easy. The rewards are some plot armor in the form of the girl becoming his girlfriend (disgusting) and a weapon that never runs out of ammo. For failing the quest the girl will get turned into a zombie and he loses his base(for some reason). Cool-ish. Well, the dudes base is in England somewhere and when the apocalypse hits off he’s still in the USA (lemon juice haha) with the girl and family that’s supposed to be in his base by the
• HamsterDesTodesRoyal Road

  ★★ 1.5

  When I read the description, I thought we'd get something similar to "The Defective Hermit", one of my favourite stories on RRL. Unfortunately, while the premise is similar, the execution is terrible.
  I'm deeply disappointed that the premise of the story (sigh. why did you leave your story unfinished SciFiAddict?) was dragged so low. Maybe the author grows up a few chapters further, maybe after the introduction arc is finished this will be a tale worth reading.
• tempest86Royal Road

  ★ 1.0

  Villiage builder stories are great. This one isnt at all. As someone else (MFF_ZEWS) put it is a Qidian novel, and very typical of that style. It appears to be based in England so I assume a native English speaker/writer, sadly it reads as a poorly translated novel.
  There are mentions of guns, quite a lot actually, which clashes with both the fact that all fire arms are illegal, apart from very serious restrictions on shotguns for farmers and the like, in England, and the first few chapters which states that firearms will be unstable.
  It's just a poorly written and thought out story. (I stopped at chapter 4. Just could not continue.)
• chakforRoyal Road

  ★ 1.0

  The storyline is inconsistent. The MC is creepy (he wants a hot and famous girlfriend, so the system gives him one). Grammar is awful. Sentence tenses make no sense.
  I couldn't get past chapter 5. This makes the Twilight series look like War and Peace.
• Genesis of the VoidRoyal Road

  ★ 0.5

  I love the story so far and I wish you could post more often.
  You may need one or two editors and/or Beta-readers to correct your grammar.
  Edit: I changed the rating to 1 star for multiple reasons. I felt the story was a bit too rushed, your grammar and sentence structure is very bad and you ahould think of getting an editor/beta-reader, there are next to no conflicts (i.e the MC just steamrolls everything), and there are big inconsistencies and no-no's, just to name a few.
  Another HUGE issue which I andany other reviewers saw was how Amanda (the girl from the US) was treated like an object, a prize, which is a big no-no.
  There is also the move to Qidian while removing all the chapters here but keeping the story up. Please remove it as it is a pointless endeavour.
  The base building is also horrible as you use measurements which are 1. Not defined properly and 2. Increase a bit too much.
  Another issue is how the MC did not fail his quest to bring home Amanda and her family to the base even though the time limit was over... :/
  In other words. I do not recommend this story as it has huge flaws, inconsistencies and weird logic.