最も強い -- ( Strongest in existence ~)
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Description
First of all this is a story that I´m writing casually in my free time so i think for the first few chapters dont expect regular updates..
This will be a story where the comment squad has a heavy influence on the story because I would find it funny to try and mix some things in that you guys suggest me in the comments :)Anyway now to the synopsis :This is a story about a boy named James Anderson.James died because he was struck by lightning while he was walking down the street on a rainy evening... After he thought everything was over he heard a voice asking him for a wish and for one wish only.. He knew his answer as soon as the question was asked because he fought for his whole life despite being only 19 years old.. He always has had a rough time because his family was poor and they needed to fight for every bit of money they could get.. he got in fights a lot.. so his wish was a simple one that would change everything.. " I wish to have the potentiell to become the strongest being in all existence so that i dont have to fight anymore ! "
I dont really know where this story will go but i have a few ideas in mind, as alredy mentioned before, i write this on a whim and hopefully " together " with the readers...I hope you enjoy the story ~~~
PS: Cover found on Google, i own no rights on that one.
Information
- Status
- Hiatus
- Year
- 2017
- Author
- Wiz0fTime
Tags
Royal Road Stats
- Rating
- 3.8/ 5.0
- Followers
- 33
- Views
- 11,744
Chapters(6 total)
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Community Reviews(2)
- SoiichiroRoyal Road★★★ 2.5Honestly, when i saw your pseudo I was almost tricked^^ You just changed the O in 0. You said you didn't know but I don't buy it. Sorry^^'
Otherwise you've got some good ideas and i think this story got some potential but your style is pretty bad. - Book CultivatorRoyal Road★★ 2.0Its not WizOfTime, it's just a random guy
Thought he was trying to pass by as the true wiz because of the title "Finally I am back ."
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The style is bad, the author writes the character dialogue like this:
James ^ah my parents sure are as nice as i have them in my memory.^
-- After another month or so in the hospital they went home for the first time since he came back --
James ^ WHAT THE FUCK WHY ARE WE SO FILTHY RICH ?!?!?! THIS IS A F*CKIN MANSION AND NOT THE SMALL OLD HOUSE I REMEMBER!!!^
And that is the worst style ever, even more for xianxia, that is overly descriptive (and repetitive: he was umbfounded, speechless, mouthgaped, dumbstruck, etc) in dialogues.
1 star
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The story was not well written, as there are too many gapes on the plot, and the gapes are boosted by the story being fast-paced
3 stars
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The grammar isn't that bad, it's not the best but isn't the worst either
3 stars
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The characters are one dimensional, or even 0 dimensional
1 star
(if you are wondering, 0.5 is for -1dimensional characters, and 0 is for 'not understandable characters')