Strange Matters
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There is nothing special about Lando. Well, except that an alien race is trying to secretly communicate with him. Aside from that, Lando is a typical sixteen-year-old boy overshadowed by his know-it-all younger sister, Luna.
Lucky for Lando, Luna acquires a gift. She can bend dark matter and energy and becomes an even bigger know-it-all.
Lando is thrust into an unfamiliar world surrounded by other too-smart-for-their-own good children. These kids, dubbed weavers, manipulate dark matter and energy to traverse the universe at a whim. The possibilities are endless, albeit tightly controlled by the Guild. What Lando finds sad (and a bit ironic) is that this skill fades as the children age, and before the kids turn eighteen they become just as boring as Lando; except with extra baggage.
Luna is discovered to be an immensely powerful weaver. As she masters her skills, Lando try’s to decode what the aliens are telling him. Why him, though?
As Lando unravels the secrets hidden in the universe, he unveils familial secrets which cause him to question his beliefs of the world around him.
He becomes frantic as the Guild positions to attack the aliens. It’s clear their weapon of choice is Luna.
Lando sets on a quest with his two not-so-bad weaver friends to untangle the alien message in hopes of protecting his sister.
Can Lando and Luna protect mankind while keeping their humanity?
Information
- Status
- Hiatus
- Year
- 2024
- Author
- The_Copper_Witch
Royal Road Stats
- Rating
- 3.0/ 5.0
- Views
- 110
Chapters(1 total)
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Community Reviews(1)
- Aetherchasm ExplorerRoyal Road★★★ 3.0Hi there, great start!. here is what i think so far of your story.
Style: 3.5/5
The writing excels at atmosphere, with vivid imagery in both the alien desert and the Earth-based domestic scenes. Descriptions like "the howl of hot wind and hiss of silver sand" create a striking visual, while the details of Mr. Larson’s pie-eating and water issues add humor. However, the tone between the two settings feels mismatched—poetic and mysterious for the aliens, mundane and comedic for Earth. The contrast is interesting but jarring, making the narrative feel disjointed. Refining transitions and ensuring the tones complement rather than clash would improve the overall reading experience.
Story: 3/5
The chapter offers a dual perspective: an alien judgment of humanity and a peculiar domestic moment featuring a supernatural child. While intriguing, the two sections feel more like separate vignettes than a cohesive narrative. The cosmic section introduces stakes but lacks context—what are the aliens’ goals, and why now? Meanwhile, the Earth scene provides some tension with the star-eyed baby, but it doesn’t fully explore the implications of this phenomenon. Adding a stronger connection between the two halves or more development in the Earth scene would help ground the story and make the stakes clearer.
Grammar: 4/5
Technically solid, with proper punctuation and clean sentence structure. However, some sentences feel overly detailed or redundant, particularly in the Earth scene (e.g., Mr. Larson’s extended internal musings). Tightening these sections could improve pacing and make the prose more impactful.
Characters: 2.5/5
The alien figures are enigmatic but one-dimensional, serving primarily as a vehicle for exposition. Their motivations are unclear, making it hard to engage with their plight. The Larsons are more relatable, but their reactions to the baby’s glowing eyes feel overly casual given the bizarre circumstances. While Mr. Larson’s humor adds charm, Mrs. Larson’s concerns