Starborne Warrior

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Description

I died, time and time again. A flower became my friend. I stole an AI and made mental love, I met an inebriated bird, and escaped from the golden tyrant above.

I found my other half, and never let her go. I was the dark of space and she the light that glowed.---------------------------------------------I was a simple human born in a world of blood. Then lay a flower, a vibrant blue flower, that changed it all and let my fate begin to unfurl. The finger of destiny began to curl as it sent me into the many worlds.

A warrior entranced by the power of blood and souls, fated to carry the stars.

I remember sitting on one as I sang my eternal song -

Oh, dust of the cosmos make me kin, smoke of celestials allow me to win.Make me unbreakable, a child of the stars. Make me unshakable, A god of war - Mars.I am starborne, I carry them all, I am unnamable and I cannot fall.

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Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2022
Author: Rathowm

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Rating: 4.6/ 5.0
Followers: 45
Views: 27,602

Chapters(55 total)

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Community Reviews(10)

DandyJordanRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Style – One thing that readers will either hate or love about this story is that it features both first and third-person descriptions. It doesn’t bother or attract me either way, but for some, it’s some kind of unforgivable pet peeve. I think the author uses the transitions well though, and it’s not an accident when it happens.
Story – One thing I love about this story is that the author has ‘Mistborn’ style mythology/flashbacks chapters. Normally, I hate flashbacks. However, here they’re used as flashbacks should be – to give the reader hints at what’s coming next.
Grammar – this author and I share the same writing style in the way that we both tend to write unique sentences now and then. Sometimes you’ll have to re-read a line or two to understand what’s being said, but I don’t view it as a negative (I am biased).
Character – The MC is the strongest and most well-developed character, the first person POV helps with that. Some characters do tend to have super-fast aspect changes, but since this is a fast-paced action story, it’s nothing to cry over.
Overall – I enjoyed this story! It’s solid, and I’ll be reading more of it in the future!
Banner CaygeonRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
Do not read the first chapter and think you have any idea what is going on. I read it, and thought what is this biblical, creation of the universe non-sense...until the second chapter when the non-sense meets the MC in a hilarious exchange and sets the tone for what's to come.
Grammar: Some minor mistakes here and there, but nothing worth docking a mark over.
Style: Full marks. The turn of tone at the start is worth it alone...thinking you are in for another 'chosen one' quest to rise from nothing to almighty, and turn it into a smart talking slime is beautiful. In fact, not enough credit is given to the author for that opening, the satire of it is quite something to behold. Some of the core path, derivative path stuff could have been implemented a bit more cleverly.
Character score: Full marks. The MC and the slime are great. The subsequent characters are also great. The dialogue is zippy, funny, and well handled. The whole story clips along, and some other reviews think this might be a great binge-piece and I'd tend to agree. The flow from one chapter to the next is part of the charm. If you're just starting out, enjoy!
All in all this is a fun read, with great dialogue, interesting magic/levelling/progression and you won't be dissapointed!
Akten DreamsRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
Being the first review will be hard for me since others will largely judge my words before reading the story. I will try to lay out my thoughts, in as much clarity as possible.
Overall, Starborne Warrior is a good read, but only if you can binge read it. If you have to wait for chapters, it would easily lose a lot of its charm. I am a very fast reader, so it took me 6 or so hours to read the latest chapter. I don't regret spending my time on that, but I will wait for more chapters to be stockpiled before reading over the number this review is based on.
Style - Stylewise there is nothing special about it. It's a mix of 1st-person and 3ed person PoV. Sometimes it's a bit clanky when the switch happens, but it ain't bad. The reason I am not giving a higher score is that the story could have been delivered in a cleaner style. I am not a professional critic or writer, but that is the feeling that I gained while reading the story.
Grammar - The grammar wasn't that bad to deserve a 4-star score. There are parts that a good editing tour will fix easily but nothing major in that department. You can easily read the story for what it is, but there are times when the story gets jarring in its wording and execution. My English is not my first language but I have read a lot of stuff, so take this with a grain of salt.
Story - The story itself is a minimalistic fast-paced progression. Because of that, it's a good story to bing for a few hours. If you have to wait for more chapters it is a different story. Due to the fast pace, you read through quite a few things, and many things are introduced into the story, but that does not take it away from the storyline. The storyline is consistent more or less and it's easy to see that the author has a goal as he is writing. The reason I have not given it a 4 score but a 4.5 is because of the unique feel the author gave his story.
Character - This part, I was debating for quite a bit. There are some inconsistencies in character development.
Evil_WarlordRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
It started off a bit difficult to get into the story with the first chapter, but then in the second chapter everything got better, at least for me. The main character quickly accepts what happens to him and also the change to gain strength. What I like is that the story seems to have multiple different races and beasts and opens up the possibility for the protagonist to devour them all to evolve.
It's a fast paced action story where the protagonist makes decisions quickly. It does not have so many descriptions, only those necessary to describe what surrounds the protagonist and the battles. A point in favor, since the rhythm of the story does not require wasting time with excessive descriptions.
If someone likes a fast action story, that the protagonist doesn't overthink changing to gain strength or doesn't hesitate too much to be ruthless, then this story is certainly for you.
GaherestRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
The author hits on the interesting parts of the main character's journey and suggests the rest, so that the story keeps moving while not feeling disjointed. The emphasized parts are battles and character relationships in a good ratio for an action-packed story.
As for style, the story is mostly told in a fantasy register that could be used for the backstory of a metal album. Sometimes, however, it slips and becomes too lecturing, as in an early explanation of some power stuff, or a bit too casual in a contemporary way, as when the author slips in a couple references that are just a bit too cute. Attempts to keep up the style sometimes also lead to some awkward sentences. There are some tense slips here and there as well.
For grammar, most of the problems are probably due to style. Rather than being mistakes, they come off as conscious deviations for effect that don't always work. Aside from that, there are some missing quotation marks and such. "Neigh" is used instead of "nigh" a few times, which is the most glaring error. It could use a little more polish, but that's all.
Story. Good decisions about how much space to spend on each element result in an exciting, fast-paced story. Each episode of the journey is entertaining in itself. The snatches of the larger world make it seem ominous, dangerous, and full of potential for action.
The main character is somewhat bland and underdefined, but at least he does take action based on his own motivations rather than being yanked around by all the crazy powers in the world. Better are the supporting characters, who feel distinct from one another with different voices and different relationships with the main character, one another, and the world. They prevent the story from degenerating into a boring cycle of nothing but fighting and getting stronger.
It is mostly a cycle of fighting and getting stronger, but not a boring one (because of the energy and pacing), and not just that (owing mostly to the supporting characters, bu
Roof MonsterRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
Overview: This is the story of a man who merges with the remenants of a god-like being and his adventures as he takes on a monsterous path of evolotion. There is a little bit of stumbling at the start but it quickly finds it's footing as an entertaining episodic story.
Style: The good news is that after some chapters of god-being-faffing (which is well presented and draws a direct line to the characters and world) and calibration to how the main character thinks, the brisk pacing keeps the story moving moment to moment, fight to fight. I read this work as something aiming for Glen Cook or Gene Wolf sort of 'stream thoughts from a drifter bulldozing his way through things he doesn't always understand'
The downsides are something I'm blending with grammar: I think the author sometimes needs tighter control over the perspective from line to line. The mix of first and third person narration without marking changes clearly is like switching trains every other station when they are moving on the same track. I also think there's room to refine the way the narrator speaks to us about his experiences. Things like very early on having his whole body reformed, he does say it doesn't hurt but I feel like the effect would at least be nausiating or make him feel pressure even if the pain was dulled. A real life example is a dentist working on your teeth: if you've been numbed properly it's the things beside the pain that make it uncomfortable (noise, sensation of pressure, smell of drilled teeth)
I recommend also trying to think about ways to show rather then tell.
Grammar: Some small stumbles with tense (I think it's all supposed to be past tense?) and places where I noticed corrections could be made.
Some of the word choices are unusual. Early on there's a sentence like 'The king upheaved his entire kingdom' which is okay because he *is* throwing it into disarray, but upheaval is used for civil disrest because the idea is that it's an event where the old order might turn everyt
DreameroftheUnknownRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
This is a nice story, with good action and a fast pace. It's pretty fun to read, and probably works best as a binge read.
Style: Nothing really bad about it. However, there are definitely times when it feels clunky and there's too much exposition, which can make it much harder to read for people. The sentence structure also feels a little disjointed, but nothing that makes it impossible to read. Overall, a 4/5.
Story: Every chapter is entertaining and fast-paced, introducing the world to us at a neck-break pace which doesn't relent, but keeps us interested all the same. There are hints that the author has everything planned out, and the world-building feels like it is about to shoot off. A 5/5, looking forward to seeing how the story adapts and evolves.
Grammar: There were some spelling mistakes, but the biggest error was in punctuation. Commas and periods were missing, especially during dialogue scenes, and sometimes, some words weren't capitalized when they should be. It isn't so hard that it affects your reading, but still, a 4/5.
Character score: The main character is slightly bland; there isn't a lot of depth to them, and unfortunately, the same is for every other character. I'm giving it a 4.5/5 because I sense there is potential for growth and development later on in the story.
Overall: A 4.5/5, a good story to read in one go, specifically for people who like much more fast-paced stories.
Casey BacaRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
Story: Starborne warrior is a fun read. It's fast, it's action packed, it's in your face, and it's all about defeating the next enemy to steal their strength. The over arching big picture of the universe, worlds, and higher order powers takes a bit of a backseat to the asskicking, but it's still there and given time through side story segments. If you love a fight scene, this is for you
Character: The mc is a bit of a battle junkie who barely even minds being completely transformed for the sake of strength and more asskicking. Not much of his past is revealed yet, but he seems a bit unrealistic. Then again, that's what this story is about, tearing apart his enemies and literally devouring them whole. It takes a kind of crazy person to do that.
I liked the secondary character, the God star being a lot more. He's got a bit of humor to him, an insane backstory spanning millions of years that I want to know more of, and really all the power in their symbiotic relationship.
Grammar: a couple of places I found myself looking twice at a sentence that threw me off. Author has a style that sometimes leads to longer, wordy sentence structure. A bit more proof reading and it would be perfect.
Style: personally the mix of first and third person is not something I prefer. In Starborne warrior it comes and goes sometimes abruptly. The pov changes are fine, with only the mc being in first person, but I find myself just wishing it was all in third person. I don't think this is a story that benefits from the more intimate connection to the mc. I just want to see him tear off the limbs of more beasts. I understand the choice, especially with the cosmic entity in his head, but I think it would read better in third person pov.
emily_mccoshRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
Style: Starborne Warrior has an interesting style, starting out with something that sounds like a god in a world-altering event, then ended up with said god-creature inhabiting a human(ish) body. The style is a bit different than what I’m accustomed to, but it has a neat way of doing action scenes, especially with such an OP main character. There’s a bit of switching between first and third person, which can be a bit jarring, but it’s its own style. I really like the worldbuilding with the tree in the beginning and it that’s any indication of the whole story, it’s going to be quite the interesting read!
Grammar: I didn’t notice any typos in particular, but there were a few places where the spare sentence switched to present tense when the rest of the story is past tense.
Story: It’s a fun, action-packed read with a very murderhobo overpowered MC. The worldbuilding is cool if a little sparse in nature, and though not all the motivations go past leveling up in power, it really works for this type of story.
Character: There are plenty of strange side characters even from the start. As mentioned, our MC doesn’t have a ton of motivation past leveling up and killing monsters, and that works just fine for him. It’ll be interesting to find out more backstory on him as well as the god-like creature inhabiting his body.
All in all, if you like a murderhobo MC with lots of action and weird creatures, give this story a shot!
LadyFluffingtonsRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
Starborne Warrior is a popcorn novel.
Just like movies, novels can fall into different categories. Fantasy books can be light, grim, upbeat or straightforward. In the case of Starborne, the action flows quickly and the main character gets interesting new powers and abilities at a quick pace. However, the story is lacking in certain areas and tends to be most interesting when you read it in bursts.
Style - Fast paced, good combat, and a focus on ability progression, the style hits the high points of an Overpowered Main character novel, but falls out in the details. Some parts of the story are told in a style reminiscint of high fantasy, only to switch to less formal words.
Story - The story is portioned out in bursts, large chunks of text that don't overly relate to what's going on in the story. What overarching story there is, is kept simple. The MC wants to survive, as does his Companion/Benefactor. That's... pretty much it. Little bits of lore surrounding the universe is giving in small dollops, but it doesn't feel overly cohesive I'm afraid.
Grammar - Outside of the occasional grammatical mistake, the story reads perfectly fine. Rarely does a turn of phrase seem out of place.
Character - The characters are a bit shallow, but they're interesting enough. Amidst all the action and set pieces, it would be nice to see more depth shown, but really, the focus is on the well done action scenes.
Overall, I'd recommend this novel to anyone who loves Overpowered Main Characters, fans of binge-ing content, and people who love great action scenes.