Spirit King's Incarnation

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I didn't know why I chose to save her. Was it to finally achieve something I could be proud of? Something was necessary in my other life.

Change. I won't become the same person I was before.

I reincarnated into another world of magic and fantasy.

"I'll become the greatest mage in existence."

Story is under a massive rewrite. The version posted on here was my second draft for when I actually begin writing the third and final version. I hope that those who read Spirit King's Incarnation before will read the final version when I finish it. Hopefully I can turn the story into what was inside my head and fix any flaws like plotholes, pacing and many other mistakes. I've been writing this story for two years now and I hope the final version will become something my readers will enjoy reading.

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2021
Author: Immortal_17

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 3.2/ 5.0
Followers: 80
Views: 139,752

Chapters(128 total)

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Community Reviews(5)

nunya bisnisRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
Amazing story, good characters, and really good grammar. A must read! I really hope the author continues this and doesn't drop it.
The characters are entertaining, and the storytelling is addicting.
My only criticism is the lack of environmental detail and storytelling. That's really all it can improve it's that good.
Lord KerhenRoyal Road
★★★ 3.0
I don't bother reading reviews myself, I am of the opinion that everyone's tastes differ, so read the synopsis and if you are interested give the first few chapters a go and decide for yourself.
So this is for the author.
I could tell that you had decent story to tell, with many characters and plot lines, sub plot lines and a complex world with interesting history.
I just feel that you struggled to bring that all out, everything was a little disjointed and I think you missed out on what could have been some very good world building and character development.
The MC development has been a struggle to follow, his maturity changes to often. I think you should have made a choice between him acting like a reincarnated adult (e.g. mature but in the body of a child) or had him regress to a child's maturity and show his growth normally. I struggled to connect with the character because he changed from mature to immature throughout the story.
A lot more time could have been spent developing some of the other characters, I think you made an attempt to do this but it's not quite there yet.
I have read to chapter 92 so far and will probably take a break and come back to this in a few weeks because I am interested in reading how the plot progresses. It's very good for a first novel, especially in a language that is not your native tongue. I hope you continue writing and improving.
SpudTreeRoyal Road
★★★ 3.0
If you like Mushoku Tensei you'll probably love this as their plots are pretty similar, a little too similar for me though.
For a while I enjoyed this book but lots of things are quickly glossed over, leaving lots of promising story undeveloped or forgotten. Characters are also fairly inconsistent or do things that didn't make too much sense.
Honestly it's not that bad for a writer's first fiction, theres lots of creativity and the writing style is unique. But this story wasn't for me.
Nameless13Royal Road
★★★ 2.5
The story has a lot of potential, but the writing is very disjointed. I was often not sure of how old the MC was, who was talking, or what exactly was going on. Which is a shame, because I think the story could be interesting. I suggest restructuring it to make it more readable.
Magnuss999Royal Road
★★ 2.0
The story is not consistent and the mc is making decisions that are very questionable. This get enhanced by the constant time , place and viewing switching. So when u can overlook that it can be enjoyable but when u are getting turned off by the early story drop it becase its not getting better.
The main MC is at a base model solid (he isn't anything new but he also didn't pretend to be). As in every weak to strong story he can't do a thing early but has limitless potential. The porblem with that is that the power ranking is so inconvenient that u cant see how his training is progressing and what are the obstacles that he needs to overcome. The story is saying at one point that nobody can cast lvl 9 God magic (it must be lvl 9 the story is using a lvl and naming system that I think are interchangeable but I could be wrong xD). He is a lvl 8 spirit mage and a lvl 5 arkane mage that has spells that are close to god spells in his repertoire but he gets beaten so often that ist comical. On top of that he has the strongest water spirit at his disposal and time magic form a god. Other mortals are much weaker becase the story tells us that nobody exept the heros of ancient time had this powers in the mortale worlds. So why gets he beaten all the time? The answer is realy easy becase he the supposed genius is realy stupid and don't use his powers until its to late and he gets trashed. The conclusion is that the fights aren't realy good and u dont know if an enemy that he is fighting is strong or not so u don't get any excitement out of it. That wouldn't junstify my bad rating when the character interactions were good but sadly they aren't. This is becase of the many timeskips in the story. They are ruining every real development becase why should someone get invested in a side character when u knew her only for 2 chapters. The MC is pledging allegiance to a princes that we know nothing about so why should we care? On the other hand is that the MC is not fighting against any