Soulless
Self-Published
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Description
Aiken was born with many talents necessary for magic, but he completely lacks soul power. However, for a magician, soul power is necessary, since it increases the power of your spells, and compensating for this disability is not easy. Will he be able to reach his dream of becoming a powerful magician? And is this dream really worth it? Warning: Some disturbing and bloody scenes come later in story.
Information
- Status
- Hiatus
- Author
- Trystan
Royal Road Stats
- Rating
- 4.5/ 5.0
- Followers
- 9
- Views
- 566
Chapters(2 total)
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Community Reviews(3)
- MenaiyaRoyal Road★★★★★ 5.0A very unusual tale. One of hope and despair. I look forward to seeing where the author will take this.
One man without a soul must fight against his nature to save another. - Jack BlankRoyal Road★★★ 2.5It's not to my personal taste. However you've got yourself a good story here. The main character's fit their profiles. The setting is consistent from where I left off. If it was more to my taste, I'm sure it would've been a very enjoyable read. Keep going.
- KyrenoxRoyal Road★★ 2.0The very first thing that should be mentioned is that this fiction's chapters vary in length. There are also not very many of them. Therefore, story will be left at 3/5 as there is not enough to form anything coherent. This is also being written at 0500 and I am a cruel, cruel person. Ha ha ha ha ha!
Style and Grammar Nonsense!!!!! Honestly, it isn't particularly unreadable, but it still seems like a machine translation. A good machine translation, but still a translation. Often times in the sentences it appears as though whole words are missing. Mostly they seem to be indefinite articles. The author himself said that his main language is Czech, so it's understandable. Anyone that reads the average RRL story shouldn't have too much trouble with this one.
The writing is close to being all tell and no show. It is also hideously fast paced. It soars through things, and these first chapters seem like they are all world building. That being said, what I could gleam from said world building seems pretty okay. The magic system used seems odd to me, I feel like all those tiers seems useless. At the very least, it should turn out well enough.
Character's and Such! The story is told in the first person. The main character has read hair, as for the rest of him... Not much of his personality or quirks has been shown, and he mostly seems to give information out to the reader and then talk to people. Most of the fiction so far is explanation and dialogue, with nothing that provides much depth of character.
The author should look up some grammar rules for English, and eventually come back and edit these past chapters while he improves future ones. I would also suggest slowing down and expanding upon things without directly telling the reader about them. If I'm still around, and the author is still around, at Chapter Ten or so I might revisit and expand upon this review.
For an ending statement, the author shouldn't worry to much about the scores. Keep writing! And all that. As lo