Sins of the Father

Self-Published

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Description

This story follows a girl named Jade, she finds out mysterious secrets about her past...and her father. She has to get to her mother and father to save them before its too late! The hardest part about this is that the bad men that have her father and mother are hunting her, she has a little help from her trusty horse, Rowdy. At 13 years old, she is facing the impossible. Questions remain as we go through the story with suspicious minds, and saddened hearts.

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2017
Author: Ariana Evans

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 4.6/ 5.0
Followers: 116
Views: 50,925

Chapters(61 total)

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Community Reviews(8)

SatsumaPRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
This is a top tier royalroad novel. The author does a great job writinng interesting and compelling worlds, characters, and mysteries. Where it shines the brightest is us watching the protagonist develop/come to grasp with his own feeelings about his partner/others.
I do wish it focused a little bit more expansively on these developing relationships/feelings throughout the novel.
MoonlitJourneyUnderAForeignSkyRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
The characters are pretty alright and the style is written matter of factly that I'd say it's cool. The Father is kind of evil but not heartless and many characters have their own selfishness and flaws. This is a good thing. The moral I'd say is being taught in this story is that you shouldn't be cold, you shouldn't close yourself off, and that kind of thing; fine, if a bit overly typical for my tastes.
The grammar is pretty good. Occasional spelling mistakes but he's actively editing those out and he makes use of semicolons. Giving five stars for using semicolons.
The story itself? It's interesting. We're following the life of a being of unimaginable power as our MC learns of him. The world is an alternative to our own and, while the world building isn't the focus, it is done well I'm the background.
The style is one that's rather unemotional. There's rarely any abundance of emotion I'm the narrator's voice, the Father is the one telling the story to the MC and he's by necessity the narrator. I enjoy this kind of style and it fits well with the nature of the character. A lot of time has passed to consider what had happened after all. The one moral the narrator seems to consciously value, he still grudgingly likes humans, is exchange. It hasn't been gone into too much but the narrator often, but not always, wants stuff for his help and usually gives things to people for helping him. Mostly power for the latter and he doesn't always give any consideration to the recipient themselves but he thinks they should be grateful at least. May have been wrong on my analysis f the narrator but we'll see.
PagliacciRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
I like where this story is heading, it seems to be getting into the real meat of it now but everything so far has been done well and interestingly with a unique persoecative. I haven't read something done like this and I have hope that it continues being as good as it is so far.
im giving this a 5 out of 5 because I have no complaints at all so far and am looking forward to it continuing towards its pull potential.
RationalMindRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Excellent characterization. The premise is also very unique. Unlike most other stories here the occasional side characters are also very interesting. Each with unique traits. Not much action. And lots of info dumping. But this info dumping doesn't bore you.
A must try for Royal Road veterans. Because unique stories rare as unicorns here.
Raz ScrivensRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
The premise is great, I think. It’s a unique setup and world that Vreasque has crafted here. This is one of those stories that I have to rant about critically precisely because I enjoyed the setup so much that I take more issue with a perceived problem, vs just reviewing a story that didn’t resonate with me as much. This one I feel is unique, so I have a lot to say here (mostly in spoiler tags.)
STYLE (4.5)
The style is epic in parts, solemn, at times a bit dry, and occasionally dipping into the realm of purple prose. The tension is palpable in the first two chapters but then diffuses somewhat when the story becomes sort of a prolonged prologue. I love the material that’s being told here, but the way it’s presented messes with the story’s pacing, which I’ll get into in a moment. In general though, I really enjoyed the style.
STORY (4)
A story that mentions the Annunaki as well as the Akashic Records? You instantly have my interest! As said, the first couple of chapters with Maru set up a fantastic story.
Essentially a deity, or something even above a deity, is hiding in plain sight on a planet in the future, and there’s an ancient order that sends a student to learn from the Father… I’m hooked! But then the story does a 180 and spends several chapters focusing on backstory. Essentially, the Father spends an entire day recounting his history to this guy who is now in his employ as a barista. The fantastically, impossibly grand divine mingling with something as mundane as running a coffee shop, this is a good setup—but I want to see more of that setup, more of what it was building to, and I was rather taken aback by the prolonged detour. Granted, it was some epic history spanning thousands and thousands of years, but I felt it would have been better told piecemeal throughout the story. Maybe the Father could have divulged details to Maru along the way. At this point in the story (just past Interlude I) the story isn’t even about Maru, it’s all about the Father, and it
God_is_GoodRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
Being good friends with the author, I'm afraid I'm rather biased, but I'm rating this novel like I would any other novel, and the story itself is incredible.
The style is what first grips you. The moment you start reading, you see a girl running, fear and uncertainty surrounding her every movement. The author vividly paints the setting, making us feel for the girl before she even says a word. Really good quality descriptions capture you and make you wonder who the girl is and what she is doing here.
Then we see men who have trapped her on every side, the girl fights but this is a battle that she can't win. The story itself is hooking, vivid, touching in every way, and very suspenseful. The men ask her questions that reveal dark secrets of the past and reveal that there is much more beneath the surface that we don't know. There's more here than meets the eye, and the author shows this to us from the moment we begin. We see first hand the danger that these men hold, and despite multiple attempts to run, the author strongly emphasizes that she cannot get away from them. Near the end of what has been written so far, a massive plot twist occurs that simply took my breath away. I won't spoil the surprise, but what has been building up for the beginning of the story has finally unravelled, and the author made it just as dramatic and heartbreaking as I could possibly have hoped.
The grammar is pretty good as well, and I didn't see too many mistakes. There are a few that annoyed me, but to be honest, I really don't pay attention to that kind of stuff.
Ah, yes, the characters. Jade is the main character in this, and although there are the kidnappers and later on, two other figures that I won't spoil yet, the story is really about her and her horse. Jade's reactions are so defined, her fear so real. The author makes you feel for her, and truly hope that she'll be okay. When Jade cries, you cry, when Jade laughs, you laugh. Her journey for healing and hope in plu
KrownageRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
Sins of the Father is the book equivalent of a video game with a really long tutorial. I'm not kidding here, it's actually quite the decent comparison.
Most stories begin small and slowly unravel the world’s circumstances and setting during the protagonist’s journey. This one on the other hand starts on a grand scale, giving insights into things that would be considered the important secrets of other stories, before throwing in a figurative grenade of cosmic proportions that shakes things up while at the same making the readers wonder how the setting will change.
After this spectacular and very well written explosion the story’s perspective changes quite drastically, hence the comparison to an overly long tutorial. The author has planned this from the start so the transition feels quite natural and expected, being also introduced earlier in a sort of mini-arc which I will cover in more detail later. Ultimately this means that your experience at the start of the story will differ from later on. That isn’t an inherently good or bad thing, but simply something to keep in mind.
The story itself is conveyed in an interesting way. We have our protagonist, a godlike being known as “The Father” and sporting many more titles, recount his life experience to what is essentially a highly trained zealot from an organization with old ties to the Father. Him being the one who tells his own story creates a feeling of reminiscence, there being several parts where he comments on his own decisions, which is nice and enhances the events and changes we experience.
From time to time the story returns back to the present, giving us glances of things far off in the future. These sections are short and infrequent by design. They serve as a break between plot lines and one can’t help but scrutinize them a bit more closely, looking for secrets or foreshadowing the author has hidden in them. All in all they are quite fun and Maru, the aforementioned zealot, is an interesting character. I have
BullerRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
I will not say this is what I usually read. Tropes included, overall character design, and the genres used to display the story are out of what I go through casually. However, it is still possible to see the work put into this story. While there are a few points where the grammar breaks, it is overall pretty well-done. It is good enough for previous lovers of the genre. 4.5/5