Single Creation

Information

Status

Hiatus

Year

2017

Author

thelastspark

• Chapter 16 - An Old Promise
  Feb 27, 2018
• Chapter 15 - Equipment and Gearing Up
  Feb 16, 2018
• Chapter 14 - Progress
  Dec 3, 2017
• Chapter 13 - Twist
  Oct 19, 2017
• Chapter 12 - Reunion
  Sep 29, 2017
• Chapter 11 - Collision
  Sep 26, 2017
• Chapter 10 - Jungle Gym
  Aug 6, 2017
• Chapter 9 - Boom
  Aug 1, 2017
• Chapter 8 - Goodies
  Jul 19, 2017
• Chapter 7 - Shiny Things
  Jul 18, 2017
• Chapter 6 - Lust
  Nov 8, 2017
• Chapter 5 - Getting To Know Each Other
  Jul 14, 2017
• Chapter 4 - Recovery
  Jul 12, 2017
• Chapter 3 - Realisation
  Jul 11, 2017
• Chapter 2 - Awakening
  Jul 10, 2017
• Chapter 1 – Betrayal
  Jul 10, 2017

Reviews

Community Reviews(3)

• Herr DirektorRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  It's a great story that has kept me intersted since the very first page. The story constantly keeps me guessing as to what will happen next, and each chapter has been a pleasant surprise. The way in which it is written is such a unique take on story telling. As mentioned in previous reviews, I do find that some characters could use more developement to create more memorable people/robots. Grammar wise there are some minor errors as well as some odd phrasing. However this is understandable since english is your seconds language. Overall I would definitely recommend this to anyone interested in the sci-fi & fantasy genre.
• Tana NariRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  That's the best way I can find to describe the feel of this story. It feels an awful lot like a script to an adventure RPG which, while a scifi adventure, borrows more heavily from High Fantasy tropes of the JRPG tradition than all other styles of game or literature combined.
  Complete with establishing an existential threat that the main character loses against in the first chapter to establish the long term goal of the story, then throwing a mass of weaker immediate threats to fight through in order to eventually reach the end goal (not that the story has progressed anywhere near said end goal yet).
  The pacing is excellent (it should be, since it's following a well-paved path), and I binged the entire story thus far in a couple hours. The writer knows how to get the point across in a quick, clean manner that manages to thread the needle between too much and too little detail in a way that a lot of professional writers can never seem to manage.
  Next, the world building... oh, the world building. Like all good JRPGs, you can feel the love the author has for the setting. It isn't the most realistic you can find, in fact it has very little grounding in the realism that scifi often strives for, but it's well crafted, imaginative, and is a great fantasy setting with a scifi skin.
  There are only real problem with it.
  First, like most RPGs, it can take forever to establish the personalities of anyone other than the main hero, so at this point only two characters (the hero and the Big Bad) are fleshed out complex beings, while everyone else suffers from Generic NPC Syndrome.
  Second, so far there's little to no risk being taken. Everything hits the notes of its fantasy game genre exactly right, but there's a distinct lack of flourish and zero attempt to challenge convention. This may change in the future, as the story has established an excellent groundwork to explore concepts of humanity, free will, individuality, and the increasingly blurred line between Man and Machine, b
• TheAgeOfTheYakRoyal Road

  ★★★ 2.5

  This is a very primitive first glance review. All my scores range from 0.1 (poor) to 5.0 (sublime).
  Things I liked:
  World building: 3.8/5
  The progress from the first chapter to what follows was well done. There was tension, and it felt gripping. Your little snippets at the start of each chapter also add to this feeling of diving into something living and complex. Generally speaking, I appreciate you going to such lengths to create your world. The reader can feel that you don't just wing it and that a lot of thought went into it.
  I also like the atmosphere. Corrupt corporations, ruthless experiments, mysterious dystopia - who doesn't like that stuff?!
  Formal aspects of writing: 4.15/5
  Orthography was better than pretty much anything I've seen on this site. Good choice, getting a capable beta. Props for that (and to him/her). Some things still to improve would be the stylistic use of punctuation marks or cleaner, professional formatting.
  Things I didn't like:
  The aimless direction of the plot: 1.9/5
  A common issue on this site, in particular. Your story is fluttering, loose, uncontrolled, capricious. Beyond your protagonist losing his memories and his creation, there's basically nothing that carries over except the general mystery of what happened to your world.
  It's as simple as this: what works for games, doesn't work for novels. You can't just have your protagonist wander some unknown world without some sort of story anchor: a goal, a nemesis, a dream - anything. And no, I'm afraid getting his memories back is not enough.
  The choice to go for first-person limited
  I know, some people think it instils urgency and subjectivity. It doesn't for me, and you can achieve the same with any third-person narration. I usually wouldn't have remarked about this, as it really is a matter of opinion. There's a problem, however; the perspective only enforces the impression that one is reading a game script. It feels too...stereotypical. The entire beginning with him trying to figur