Shoko in the Dragonball Universe
Self-Published
Community Rating
Description
Unknown time, unknown place yet I think, I should be dead.
When I made my errant wish I did not expect anything to happen.
Read about Shoko's life growing up within the Dragonball Universe.
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This is my first story, be warned. Have fun though.
I hope this is not boring.
Information
- Status
- Completed
- Year
- 2019
- Author
- Actzoltan
Royal Road Stats
- Rating
- 2.7/ 5.0
- Followers
- 14
- Views
- 5,392
Chapters(5 total)
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Community Reviews(2)
- edited_user_nameRoyal Road★★★★★ 5.0Wonderful short story showing the beginnings of an evil sayan!
Experience the dark side of the dragon ball universe. - RznRoyal Road★★ 2.0There are a lot of questionable elements in this story that might give the reader pause: Such as having untranslated Japanese in the first chapter or using binary in the second. For fan fiction it starts with an interesting premise and goes off on its own, then just ends abruptly. The writing itself is not strong, but all the noises and awkward capitalization make it seem like a bit of a joke. It does not establish or set itself up, and even still the plot is very thin. The author does at the end state they did not have the skills to finish it. This could be fixed with a copyedit, but it seems that will not happen. It wasn't terrible, but so much of the 'galactic this' and awkwardness could have been cleaned up easily.