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Meet Don, he's a Demon.

As a pragmatic sort, he doesn't really mind.

Unfortunately, the religious fanatics who captured him have a different opinion on the matter.

As if that wasn't bad enough, Don has partial amnesia

There is one thing working in his favor. A little fairy who is full of ideas, suggestions, and advice.

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★★★ 2.5

Review as of chapter 35.
The writing is mostly smooth and mistakes are scarce but it is also rather beige which makes some parts (mostly the grinding) unentertaining or outright boring.
The character system looks rather simple and solid, the reputation category however seems to consist of makeshift events to drive the story forward as the Mc is reactive at best and passive and directionless at worst.
As I see it, the characters are the stories biggest flaw. With exception of the protagonists they do not reach past their stereotypes or stay non-descript mobs. Meanwhile exposition on the main cast is nigh entirely done by talking and major reveals get glanced over in a few sentences.
Don himself remains largely undefined but is going down a typical 'peace-loving but op-figther' clichee route and any challenges or tasks are heaped upon him by the narrative. While the author repeatedly comments about later developement what is missing here is the very foundation of the character. And with 35 chapters into the story exposition should have been done by now. Worst of all it leaves no character to even remotely connect to, leaving the reader largely uninvested in the story.
Last but not least, the pacing of the story is all over the place, neither are there clear temporary build ups before fight/flight scenes nor is there an overall build up for the story climax. Instead it bounces between life or death and baseline. That the progression of events is rather rushed doesn't help either.
My advice: plot a clear path for the stories major events and let the smaller ones be played out by the characters interactions, let them show who they are. Prerequisite being you having a clear image of them, past their roles and archetypes. And for the love of god give Don more personality, amnesia or not.

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