Serenity of Reprisal [Completed]

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Description

The noble thief is known to take from the rich and give to the poor. The thief's tale is known throughout the kingdom of Ronan. However, the thief made a mistake. She stole from the wrong person. With his family now dead, he will seek reprisal. Nevan Prima will make the thief pay whatever the cost. Money, he can easily replace. But for the loss of his family, he will demand retribution.

Information

Status: Completed
Year: 2021
Author: Mellifluous

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Rating: 4.0/ 5.0
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Community Reviews(2)

L'odeur de WumpusRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
I love this story because it's building up two main characters quite well. Without giving spoilers, both MCs have a nice hidden past that will, hopefully, crash into a wonderful explosion later.
Style: The author certainly knows what they're doing. They're not experienced at writing, I think, but their story is very readable and engaging.
Story: The story is excellent. It's where this fiction shines. The author is building out a super-neat world, although we're still in the early chapters. I find the story engaging, the battles interesting, and the world-building is slow but interesting. The author is show, not tell. The Nirvana bit was a bit weird, but there's some backstory that makes it feel not-out-of-place - more like the MC doesn't understand what's going on yet, and isn't interested, so it isn't explained *yet*
Grammar: The weak point. The author is very clearly not a native english speaker, but they're doing their best. Spelling is fine, but word choice, tense, and punctuation are very clearly not EN-main. Still, they're working on it. Update: The grammar has improved quite a lot over time. The author seems to be doing their best.
Character: The characters are good. We have two main characters, and they're both sympathetic and interesting. We also have a small set of side characters so far that are *also* interesting and sympathetic. Again, this is early days for the story, but even throwaway characters (those that are dead or a realm away) are pretty interesting, which is a big plus.
Conclusion: I like both MCs, and I am very much looking forward to what happens when their interests collide. I *really* hope they fall in love first.
Sidenote: Author is very responsive to edit suggestions.
DecieverRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
This novel is a typical revenge type of story, but in a traditional sense. It has a big potential, and I believe author will achieve their goals, he just in a need of some polishing done to his story. Maybe even rewrite after it's finished?
Style
The style of that novel is mostly in third person, and we see through the interactions of characters, how diverse this new world is. My only complaint is that sometimes, there's too much unique elements shown, without any real explanation or dwelling on them. Besides this, style is good.
Story
Well at first it sounds cliche, but if you read it, it's pretty logical in its execution. More or less the story consists of a simple plot, delivered with quality and unique worldbuilding - a boy is seeking to enact revenge on popular thief, famous for his robbery of wealthy. It's not everywhere you see the object of revenge being local robin hood or anything of the sorts. Whoever is reading this, I suggest to give it a go, and try.
Grammar
Not the best, and not the worst. I've seen grammar worse in a novels, but here is nothing impossible for author to fix. It doesn't even need to be done by author himself. Anyway, those grammar mistakes are not a big issue; I'm not a native speaker myself, and I had a hard time finding mistakes in text.
Characters
I think I might consider characters as somewhat a weak point of this novel. First of all, I want to say that author surely knows what they are doing with their characters. However from what I understand, we had two characters, both boys. One was and is a very good written character, I like him, he's a believable Character. Honestly, all of authors characters are believable, or CAN BE believable if they have more screen time. Sadly, this is what those characters need. Example: we had a second main character, a boy who heroically fought on a war and his plotline was going in a parallel to the MC's ark, and this went on and on, until from what I understand, it ended. I don't see any real tie