Sent to a New World
Self-Published
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Description
Adam a 16 year old boy who liked to fight but also never seemed to get along with people. However, he died in a car crash. But fear not for upon death he met god who gave a new chance in life with many powers of his choosing. join him in his journey in the new world.
This story will have skills, status, and the like if you don't like that kind of stuff, sorry. The gender bender tag is for later in the story and might not come up for a while. This is my first fanfiction will love feedback of any kind P.S. the mature content of the story involves explicit language, sexual content(detailed), and descriptive battle scenes that some may find gory. read at your own risk.
Information
- Status
- Hiatus
- Year
- 2015
- Author
- firestarter
Royal Road Stats
- Rating
- 2.9/ 5.0
- Followers
- 245
- Views
- 18,816
Chapters(5 total)
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Community Reviews(5)
- Lewisking50Royal Road★★★★★ 4.5The story sounds interesting and I think the MC will be funny and cool as well. Your writing needs some improvments tough as some parts aren't very smooth, like chapter 3 the first sentences. But I have nothing else to comblain about atm.
- avinashRoyal Road★★★★ 4.0i think story and its content are fine as it is.
but your way writing sucks a little. i am not talking about content of the story but the way you have written it
make more paragraphs. a little more description about some things.
And also you can create boxes for status ands skills that would be better. - Chaos DichterRoyal Road★★★ 3.0at the moment this story is okay to read nothing really good or bad but its stil a good read ill wait and see how you improve for now i think 3 stars is just fine for this story^^
- AlgozRoyal Road★★ 2.0I really would have liked to give a better score, but with the way the story was written, I really can’t do that.
1 – what Is the point of making a chapter about choosing a skill where It helps learn new ones and train the ones that are learned already If you just put a time skip where you character already have mastered every single thing in existence
2 – MC Is too OP. being OP Isn’t really a bad thing, but there Is a small difference In being OP and being ”absolute perfect”. When the character Is really good at something, but not that great in the rest, makes him more realistic. For now, your MC Is just a ball of absolute perfection, no weakness (lots of physical skills, magic skills, crafting skills AND being a incredible beauty), this makes for a boring character.
3 – Masturbation/sex In the story. I’m not saying that It can’t have that, but you make a man become a woman, and you only did this to have a woman having sex with other woman or masturbating by herself. It didn’t even show other things that a woman experience that a man can’t (like a woman’s period) and his reaction to It. Also, the ”sex scenes” (If you can even call that) are underwhelming at best. Too short, no detail with feelings, nothing. Aim for quality instead of quantity (since It already have more or less 3 scenes like that).
My suggestion Is to read your story again, and see If you can improve It. - omnerabdatorRoyal Road★ 0.5i dont expect much from this fiction every chapter the author is asking for readers output cause he has no idea where to take it.
I just dont trust readers, you ask them if a characters mom should join their harem and 90% will agree with it even though it goes against everything that has happened...sorry a little rant about a series i liked that went to crap cause of readers choice.