Seeker

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Description

Let's begin this story with aOnce upon a time...

...there was a boy named Arthur. He, a hotblooded adolescent male, love adventures and duels and heroes like boys of his age. However, unlike others, he had uncanny interest in anything of the sorts that it borders on obssession. He was reckless and relentless in his pursuit of anything interesting that anyone would consider that his vice. He was brave and oddly cunning. He was considered a misfit when he was a kid. He really loved adventures.But then...

But then, a new adventure awaits him, and this time... he might not be ready for it.

Yoho! Lemme say this in advance... Thanks.

Anywho, thiz iz me first story so, please umm be gentle? Oh, i'm from the Phils. so english is not really in my turf but it is considered a second language here if you exclude our local dialects. So please pardon my grammar a bit, eh? But only a bit, okay. I'm trying to widen my vocabulary here so, yeah? Thanks comrade.

P.S. The tags for this story are not set in stone so it may change. ;)

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2017
Author: Chronicler

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Rating: 5.0/ 5.0
Followers: 4
Views: 370

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Community Reviews(8)

RznRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
I was waffling on 4.5 and 5 because of the exploration of the setting and the focus on Penny was a bit undeveloped to really ground the reader, but in doing so would probably unbalance the piece and make the ending less impactful. The slim details work to capture the mood, and the relative ignorance of the character in a way that mimics the reader's discovery with her. This was not some big quest, it was a chance discovery that mattered. It works and it is fun. So I went with 5 stars.
D.PidgeRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
(As of chapter 11)
Overall:
The premise is an interesting one. With two main characters that must individually find their way through a world that's completely alien to them yet familiar to us. So far, it's been an enjoyable read. And definitely different from the usual formula of just punching everyone and everything in sight.
Style:
The story shifts between the POVs of its two main characters. I won't go into much detail due to spoilers, but although their paths are separate, you can still see some influence that one's choices indirectly have on the other.
Grammar:
Not much to say except that the grammar is very good. You likely would have a bit of a hard time finding typos unless you're an experienced editor and/or are looking for them.
Story:
The story so far is probably my personal favorite in terms of these categories . It has a good bit of world building, which is a drug that I and several others are addicted to. Following the two main characters as they each choose a very different path to forge their way, you get insight into their old world and see how this new one is similar to our own, yet different in certain aspects as well.
Character:
The "mad" god with an insatiable thirst for knowledge and the archangel looking for her purpose. The way they try to adapt and change themselves to match their new environment has been fun to watch. Once again I can't say much because spoilers, but let's just say that it's the little things that give them some trouble. The side cast is interesting as well so far, but I'll wait for the story to continue further to see more of them before casting my opinion.
Igor KarpliukRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Nice work, keep it up, man! I hope you will write more and more books, and if you do, I hope they will be as good as this one or even better than this one! How long did it take you to write this anyway? It must have taken months to do it, maybe even more...
MK bk-201Royal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Fun, cute, little short story about a girl who has only know the cold city and a great mountain all of her life, so when he went a little over her usual zone of search she is surprised to see the lush greens of a wild jungle past the mountain.
NexferRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
This is a short story for my standards but enjoyable no less.
Even reminds me of 'Coiling dragon' with these deties and all.
STYLE SCORE:
I want to give 5+ to the author for being able to lead me from hoping from one lead to others without annoying me with abrupt transferring of point-views. I didn't have an urge to jump back to one of the hero of this story and being bored with another. I was really interested in every main characters.
STORY SCORE:
Interesting concept of deities like gods and devils and modern world with magic and technology but without symbiotic stuff between them.
GRAMMAR SCORE:
I'm not native English speaker that's why it's not up to me to comment about it.
CHARACTER SCORE:
This story is short but even then i fully grasped their characters and i don't have much to add here
Spoiler: for those who is not afraid
I don't like bad endings but i didn't see a happy end for this story with these kind of characters. Well maybe for Angelica but it would be kinda boring for me. That's why I'm satisfied how it ended. The author said that this an open ending but for me it's not. I don't know what could be happening from now on what with these deities runnung around. It would be pure surrealism and I'm not a fan of this to even try and fantasize about a probable continiation of this story. And that goes for First and Third. I'm not interested to read about them in their own story either when i already know the end of it (I'm not fond of prequels).
The main negative remark I'll give is abrupt ending of Angelica's life. Coz of this the ending of this story seems abrupt too and it's main issue for short stories and author wasn't able to clear this obstacle.
javertRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
Review written as of chapter 11. This review was written as part of a review swap.
Seeker is an interesting story, I'll give it that. The general premise of the story is that two hyper-powerful magical beings functionally spent 2000 years in hibernation, and emerged into a world where the old ways of gods and magic are mostly dead, and technology and science rule. I like that premise. Unfortunately, the story doesn't quite live up to its full potential.
Style
The writing style is... fine. The author spends a lot of time trying to describe magical/religious/mystical events with grandeur, but it comes off as clunky rather than poetic. The prologue chapter contains some of the worst examples of this, so if you don't mind that, you'll probably enjoy the rest of the story.
Grammar
There are occasional typos and grammar mistakes, including things like wrong apostrophes and mis-punctuated dialogue. It's not a huge deal. If you're not a nitpicker, you won't notice anything wrong.
Character
Character is one of the biggest areas in which this story falls a little flat. The problem here is that there are two main characters, Angelica and Galileo, who are generally unlikable.
Angelica (really could not have picked a more on the nose name!) is supposed to be the "good" and "nice" character, I believe, because we're supposed to feel sorry for her for spending 2000 years basically in solitary confinement, with her limbs ripped off. The reader feels pity for that, but when one of the first things Angelica does after being freed is do some mass murder, that lessens the pity just a little bit.
Galileo is straight up a self-centered jerk. If the goal is to hate him from page one, then yep, success at that.
Because they are more powerful than everyone around them, both Angelica and Galileo spend a lot of time looking down on everyone around them. While understandable, it's annoying. It has the unfortunate effect of making it hard for the side characters (who have real potential to be i
ZadikariaRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
Its an alright story, with some very enjoyable bootleg SCP Foundation lore. It isn't very long as of right now, so give it a read. Be warned though, the character arcs in this story will give you whiplash.
AsvilokaRoyal Road
★★★★ 3.5
First off, awesome premise. I highly enjoyed the story of Galileo, an ancient wizard awakening in the modern world, with a fascinating combination of insane power and childlike curiosity. But between finding a job and searching the internet for knowledge, he ends up entangled in the silent battle between the Covenant - who seek to preserve relics of ancient magic - and the Foundation who seek to destroy them.
Like I said. Awesome premise.
The story as a whole, though, had some issues.
Galileo isn't the only main character. We also have Angelica. An angel of the olden times, seeking to fill in for her now-deceased god. She goes around talking to churchgoers and stuff. And does powerful dramatic things whenever she gets the whim to do so. Her PoV chapters felt weird and largely pointless. I didn't skip them in case anything important happened, but it never seemed to pay off.
The chess subplot really really bothered me. Games between highly skilled players tend to end in a draw quite frequently, from what I've seen. It seems incredibly unlikely that Q is actually so much better that G that they never even drew once unless he's incredibly slow on the uptake. For a few days, yes, he'd be pwnt, but after weeks and months of playing regularly? With access to the internet and his own superhuman intellect? Feels very forced to me.
I wish we could've had more time with G and Q. Their developing friendship felt very sidelined. I could've done with a bit less boring angel and more actual character development for our main dude.
And then the end happens. I won't spoil anything here, but it felt rushed. Some of the revelations were very abrupt. I suspect that's just a biproduct of the nano-ness of it, but it's worth noting.
Typos are regular, expect a handful in each chapter.
Overall, it has a lot of potential. It plays with some of my favourite plot elements, and with a bit of editing and polishing could be an absolutely stellar little adventure.
[I read this story as part of a