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The organizations violently fight for control over the harbour borders, and the reefs of course, the hallucinogens that started it all. It's happening at the wrong time and place, as an outcast's path intertwines with multiple places as he is caught within a cobweb.

Is it all worth the fight? When the dust settles?

But by then, it will be too late to ask.

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emssitumorangRoyal Road

★★★★★ 4.5

Alright, as many have said before, four chapters is barely anything to start with and the lack of further chapters leaves me with little to work with in terms of prospects for the future of the plot. That being said though, what we have with us here isn't at all terrible. Only slightly confusing. Though, it's clear from what the author has written that there's a marked improvement between his writing of the first three chapters (written about 2 years ago) and that of his lates chapter.
In terms of the Grammar, I saw no glaring weaknesses with the objective grammar and structuring on the language. The style of short sentences that are stringed along a little awkwardly was a bit jarring though as it confused me slightly on my first reading and it took me a second read through to grasp what it was trying to say. However, note that this mainly deals with the first few chapters which at this point do look like an early draft. The problem ceases to be in the latest chapter, but by that point, a lot of the setting and finer detail have been lost.
When it comes to the story, because most of the setting was done in the early chapters, I do suggest that the author give them a second look because a lot of the plot points have yet to be strewn. I could follow along the story with Hamoutan, but to be fair, if it was going to be like that, I'd rather Hamoutan be the main focus since the start and not bait and switch us with the character of Tinks because at this point I'm as confused as he was when he was out in about. I don't know who Tinks was, I don't know why he was so charitable to that rando merchant, speaking of which, some more setting to the story would be nice. Right now, I don't have a clue as to the cultural nor technological level of the world and I think it would do the author well to give that a look.
The characters though are written well enough, especially when dialogue is concerned. Even since the chapters written 2 years ago, the dialogue was fine and didn't co

CR0WSULLRoyal Road

★★★★ 3.5

As the review title says, Seascape Sonata has potential.
The story is still very much finding its footing, so I want to take a moment to mention that my review/rating is meant to be aligned with the current state of the story--not the final product.
The story has a compelling premise, and I think Hamoutan--who is featured the most at the time of writing this review--works well as a protagonist. He has a harrowing backstory, is on the run from dangerous forces, and is meant to take care of some of the people impacted by a major and traumatic event that we learn more about as the story continues.
I am in agreement with the other reviewer in that I think this story would benefit from a more focused point of view. The story does begin with a separate character, Tinks, who we're initially led to believe might be the main character. As of the the 5th chapter, we have not heard much about this Tinks. I will say, however, that both of the aforementioned characters--Hamoutan and Tinks--both have distinct voices, and this is something that the author has a knack for in general. The supporting cast that the author is building towards has a lot of ways it could go, and they are all generally well thought out and are easily recognizable from one another.
More time could be spent building tension as the narrative progresses. I would like the opportunity to sit with these characters for a bit longer, and when the author leans into this introspection, I find myself enjoying the story more.
The worldbuilding holds promise, and I do like when the author delves into the fauna, the types of armor, and the mentions aspects of the state of the world (politics, location names, etc). However, I believe he could lean into this more. Similarly, it is hard to make sense of the overall state of the world: technology, culture, race, religion, and so on. The synopsis leads us to believe that it is corporations vying for power around this harbor area and the sea, but I cannot tell if we are roote

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