Sacrificial Ascension (The Endless System)

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Description

Abel finds himself drifting, when he hears a voice.

“Ah, a drifter, I see. I know just where to send you.”

And with that, a bloody path filled with blue boxes and battle maniac gods begins!

A suggestion I've heard for writing in the litRPG genre is to first build the world, then create the system. This allows for explanations as to how the system came into being, balancing, and generally not turning the entire page into a wall of blue. Thing is? My talents lie in math, not worldbuilding. Welcome to the Endless System, a world where God, The Creator is level1,038,930,000,000,000.

This novel is currently on hiatus! It will beyearsbefore I return to it! In the meantime, go look at my other work. The quality is much better, they incorporate a lot of the things I've learned from "authoring" so far.

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2022
Author: VagrantCrusader

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Rating: 4.4/ 5.0
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Community Reviews(8)

1Royal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
This is pretty much exactly what it sounds like, a fast paced progression mixed with constant battles, enabled by a system. It is a LitRPG, so expect plenty of tables being used. Personally, I'm enjoying it, but I hope that a bit of plot is mixed in at some point, because following the same narrative formula for long can get boring.
Frankcastle747Royal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
So I've really enjoyed the authors style and the way things seem to be going. It's hard to form an opinion on just the chapters that are out but I really like what I see and I can see the potential here.
Pacing is good for me, the time skips and faster pace make good sense to me. When real things begin to happen we get the slow down we need. The MC is still a blank slate for us for the most part but I don't think that's a bad thing and fits so far.
World building seems to be ramping up, but again only 11 in so hard to form a complete opinion.
Keep writing author to me you have something by great started here.
NizzreRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
So far its good, my only gripe is that mc passes up the gamer class saying that he wouldn't be unique or original, just a copy of pop culture characters; yet then chose the most cliche class- mage. Mage classes have been done to death, every tom, jane, and miguel make there character into a mage because most people are not very good at artfully describing a combat scene(rightfully so, it is hard even for the best writers sometimes!). Healers suck donkeyjewels and even that would have been more interesting than another mage story.
Also it is noticable but not terrible that stat sheets and maths are your strong point. What i noticed that needs to be worked on are descriptions of the scene, the atmosphere. Its hard to form a mental image of the world the Mc is supposed to be brought to because i've been told literally nothing. Just a rock cave. Is there moss? is it damp and musty? what sounds can he hear in the distance. Why is there light in a cave? It must be magic works but is lazy, intentional or not. Glowing moss, glowing magical pools or water, glowing insects, mana rich ore in the cave walls. any of these would be much better than, "well must be magic".(even if some greater source deeper in the cave IS giving off soft light. Also descriptions of the intensity of the light would help set the tone too.
Even though a story might be High Fantasy or include magic; Magic is a terrible excuse to use when it can easily be explained mundanely. If the reason for everything is always "Well, it must be magic!" then pretty soon magic will lose its wow factor(you don't want that especially since your MC is a mage) More detail was spent on the tier up hallucination that on his new reality.(i am aware you said this was your weak point, but it still needs to be said that this is what needs work).
On the positive side the system the mc uses looks interesting and i enjoy it.(But at this point it isnt unique or original so it doesn't offset the lack of detail in the scenes)
So in c
mighty crowRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
I love this story. It's fun, has a lot of elements that have room to grow.
Before going forward, I have to admit that it is a bit rough around the edges. Even the author admits that, but in my opinion that just means there is room for growth. Going into this story vagrant only had a few ideas on what he wanted to do with it. He had the basics and for 24 chapters ( I'm a patron) he has built characters and a world I'm immensely interested in.
There are surprisingly few characters in this story, with our main character taking the bulk of the attention. He's a fun character, who can go in many directions emotionally and power wise. The supporting roles are also developing nicely, with a sprinkle of romance on the horizon.
All in all, sacrificial ascension is a promising story with a author who cares about his readers. Give it a chance
Chaos JesterRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
As much as I love action and quick pace in my litrpg, we're entering into a phase of its evolution where we can't become reliant on that.
This story is a great start with amazing potential, but by chapter five, I was hoping to see more of a story begin to unfold. Hopefully as it continues, plot picks up. If so, then this has the makings of being the next lrpg hit.
Gamer8Royal Road
★★★★ 4.0
This story is a good read, a solid four stars. One thing that I found interesting and unique is how the MC's class and profession evolve. Each class and profession have a hard cap of 10 levels. When both reach their cap, then an evolution for both my be chosen. The evolution allows the MC to change most of his skills into more powerful versions of the same or into completely different skills (sometimes radically different). The evolution options are based on the MC's experiences and choices.
My one complaint is that I would like the author to write more. More free stories please! And Thank You!!!
maclitRoyal Road
★★★★ 3.5
Overall: The story seems interesting but is just not for me. The leaps in logic that you need to do to make the plot and characters work are too much. The author seems to accept feedback from his readers, and this may be one to revisit in the future.
Style: The story seems to be primarily singular POV with a bit of other POVs to add context. Hopefully this is maintained. There are some minor time skips but it helps the story along. The summary said it would be stat heavy, but they need to be cleaned up and explained a bit more to be relevant.
Grammar: The grammar is pretty good, and the author is taking the time to go back and fix issues as he has a chance.
Story: It follows a single isekaied MC. There has not been much world building at this point, and what there is, has been confusing.
Characters: Only one real character, the MC. He is supposed to be overpowered, but it seems more like the world he is in is just broken versus him actually being so. He is acts like the typical edgy, I want to wield magic type. It also looks like performing ritual sacrifice is in his near future. His decision making is strongly suspect. The other characters are almost nonexistent at this point.
I don’t understand a lot of what is going on. First, the MC goes from normal to selecting the class with ritual sacrifices and dark overtones within ten chapters. Then the Vampires are supposedly the nobles in charge of the region they are in, but his vampire companion gets openly disparaged and refused service from everyone right outside their manor. The Adventurers Guild just makes no sense. The fact that no on cleared the catacombs below the manor makes no sense. Walking into their first town where their quest revolves around blood when their party is a blood mage and a vampire is just forcing them to be useful. Some of the ideas used in this story are ok, but their implementation defies logic.
Goat ManRoyal Road
★ 0.5
Spoilers!!!
It takes less than 10 short chapters to become a soul-sacrificing cultist from a normal person.
MC starts off trying to survive and becomes an arcane mage as he's uncomfortable fighting up close all good so far he also avoided the god-related options. Then he becomes a blood-arcane for some reason when high arcane seemed the better option and more suited to him. Then became a cultist serving all gods by delivering souls to them an unaffiliated servant to the gods which just means he's got none of the bonuses of working for the gods and yet still subject to their whims.
This is a complete U-turn from the beliefs he had at the beginning with no reason to justify it because it happened so quickly.
Goes from Tier 0 to Tier 3 way too quickly given how hard it's supposed to be. Not even the local lord is stronger than that.
Personally, I think the LitRPG system is way too restrictive, only 4 skills split between a class and profession in every tier and no way to earn more skills through the ability to make traits is cool.
He dies from mac and cheese which is forgivable because it's meant to be a comedy.