Rune Masters
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From when he was a small boy Forihr admired the works of mages that visited his town. When he became old enough he went to one of the neighbouring cities to apply for an academy. There were five academia in total, each with a field in which it was more proficient than the others. He was deemed good enough to be enrolled as student and so he did. He chose to focus his studies on magic that could be written down or contained for longer periods of time, a field that was not very popular because it was complicated.Forihr is now an old man that lives in reasonable solitude. He spends his days working on a research project that he had started when he finished his time at the academia. Something was about to change the quiet of Forihr's life. Something that could change more than his life, but for the current world as well.[Participating in the NaNoWriMo]
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- Status
- Cancelled
- Year
- 2015
- Author
- Agnitio
Royal Road Stats
- Rating
- 4.0/ 5.0
- Followers
- 26
- Views
- 5,417
Chapters(4 total)
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Community Reviews(1)
- AheaelRoyal Road★★★ 3.0Another unique story. The plot is definitely a one of it’s kind from what I’ve read so far on this site so it already gets points from me, but what matters more is the understanding of said plot. And so far, it seems well-planned out or it would be more right to say well-developed because it doesn’t matter if something is great in the works if you don’t know how to execute it.
Speaking of execution, I just wanna clear up the small things. There’s typos here and there, lack of commas, the usual. I recommend you use a site like grammarly or just look over your work more carefully.
Onto the more real things, The good points of your story is definitely character interaction. So far the old man and boy’s interactions have the element of realism. Something every good story needs. However, I do feel that there is a lack of imagery, at the right moment. Right when the boy first meets the old man, and there was a great opportunity to describe the boy’s face as maybe innocent to get a playful effect. Or something along those lines. To further elaborate, it’s not the quantity of descriptive language but rather the mis-timing of just one sentence that would leave a good effect.
What’s also odd is the supposed “boy” speaks nothing like one. While I understand this may be done on purpose, you don’t take the advantage of this for little comments or just humorous dialogue or moments. Cheeky brats always give a good laugh.
Truthfully, a good plot, just the writing is mediocre. What that’s supposed to mean is NOT that your writing is terrible or you don’t know how to write but you should be writing MORE on your side. While it may be drafts or whatnot but I can definitely see a chance to improve greatly. There’s 100% opportunity for not just this story to become something but for yourself and your writing. You definitely come across to me as someone who can write a playful moment in a serious situation. So a writer who can understands and use humour, which is rare.
P.S, Stars for me