Romeo, India’s: Where was his Juliet?

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"In the ballet of rain, delicate droplets traced the silhouette of your hair, gracefully descending from your forehead to your eyes, lingering on your lips, and finally, as if enchanted, caressing the contours of your breasts. In this ephemeral dance, envy welled within me for those raindrops that intimately explored the canvas of your being."

"I pledge to you, my dearest, that you shall reign as the undoubted princess of my heart until my final breath escapes. In the ever-changing tide of people flowing in and out of our lives, only a select few leave indelible footprints on the sands of our souls. Your footprints, a testament to the profound connection we share, adorn the landscape of my heart. The fragrance you've etched into the corridors of my mind is a treasure I shall forever hold dear. In this present moment, you stand not only as the pinnacle but as the very essence of my achievements in this life. My love for you transcends the boundaries of your estimation, reaching depths that words fail to articulate. Now, I beseech you, grant me the promise that the memory of our love won't fade from the tapestry of your thoughts."

The story unfolds against the canvas of 1999-2000, an era when Internet communications were in their embryonic overture, much like the tentative opening chords of a musical composition. It narrates the poignant tale of a long-distance romance between an impassioned Indian software engineer and an enigmatic woman discovered through the enchanting realms of Getfriends.com. What secrets lie within these digital sonnets, and where did, or will, the elusive woman vanish to? Can love endure the relentless crescendos imposed by distance and the symphonic interplay of age disparity? At the tender age of 23, the Indian protagonist composed these electronic ballads, fully cognizant of the societal norms clandestinely prohibiting the crescendo of their love.

This narrative resonates with the timeless tragedy of Romeo and Juliet, weaving a modern sonnet that beckons the question: what will be the cadence in a world where human beings strive to redefine love and relationships in the ever-evolving symphony of the 21st century?

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2019
Author: TomMary

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 1.6/ 5.0
Followers: 11
Views: 54,022

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Community Reviews(3)

mythosiRoyal Road
★ 1.0
I've skimmed through the story, and I can't make heads or tails of it. This resembles a creepy diary, and it isn't flattering. Is this some real exchange? Is this some strange format for a fiction romance? The grammar is poor, and gets nearly unintelligible in places.
Would not recommend.
TempestbringerRoyal Road
★ 0.5
I have no idea how I stumbled upon this, but somehow I did. This isn't a novel whatsoever. I have no idea what this is at all...
UlbertRoyal Road
★ 0.5
This fiction is all over the place.
I won't give it a long review. The only thing, that I have noticed, is that this is a story of some really creepy dude. The style is kind of cool. But that's it.
The grammar is horrible. A lot of the time I just ask myself, what the last few sentences meant. I only picked this up, because the other review by Tempestbringer kind of told me, that this might be so bad, that it is enjoyable. Sadly. This isn't satire. That's why I won't punch anyone who is down already. If you enjoy this: Good for you. If you really just want to claw out your eyes after reading this, I won't judge you. It isn't good. It is bad.
There are a lot of ways this could have gone. Take the weird indian facebook posts for example(bob and vegana). That can be enjoyable.
But this was one of the few times, I've felt true cringe in my life.
The concept is cool and unique, but the execution, if you can call it that, is hellishly bad.
There are a lot of points the author could improve on.
Grammar, worldbuilding, general understanding of the english language, etc.
And I know that I didn't read that far ahead. So I might be judging a product, that has evolved over time. And if that is so, and anyone who read ahead reads this, I beg you to make a review, that tells everyone, whether the author is willing to learn, or if they just want to publish stuff, in order to have something out there.
Well... this became rather long... Welp.
If anyone following this fiction reads this, please let me know whether it has changed.
But as it stands, this is more akin to an unintentional shitpost.
So tread carefully. And have a nice day.
You too, author. I hope you like what you do.