Rise of Toki

Self-Published

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Description

From a common worm to human to a dragon, they have a gem embedded in their bodies since birth. These gems contained the skills of that specimen for it to grow and mature. The more skills one obtains, the stronger they become, the more evolutionary options they open. Then their powers would be passed down to their children to unlock.

This is a story about a little tortoise rising up against ... the world! Maybe not.

It all started out when this little tortoise sought out to find her little sister in a big world.

My attempt to draw the main characters.

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2017
Author: node.

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 4.5/ 5.0
Followers: 51
Views: 17,999

Chapters(12 total)

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Community Reviews(1)

FerarioRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
Good read, fun characters, evolution setting, decent grammar, overall a good story. Its very light reading and the chapters are short too. All great things really. The only thing I can truely say I don't like is the upload speed for new chapters and perhaps the rate of the story's progress.
Honestly, the number of chapters released so far (chapter 8) is to low to really give an indepth review, but one thing is certain, you really need to focus on a decent schedual for updating if you want this story to go anywhere. Since you have so few chapters and the chapters themselves are short, the actualy progress in the story seems to be too fast. A lot of things seem to have been left out and a lot of stuff isn't really explored to its full potential. Some things like the initial forest scene and the interactions between the brothers and the encounters in the forest afterwards could have been expanded a bit more to improve the pacing of the story.
The only advice I recomend for you is that you keep writing and have fun doing it. The more you write, the better you'll get, and the more chapters we get to read, Its a win win for everyone! XD
Keep up the good work!