Rise of the wyvern god

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Status

Hiatus

Author

DemonReadsNovels

Reviews

Community Reviews(2)

• EmilyEvelanRoyal Road

  ★★ 1.5

  Before I start this review, I would like to explain the title. This story is pretty bad. However, everyone started by being bad, then working their way up. Don't drop this one. Keep writing and look back at how much you improved. You can start another novel later, but you can always use this one to gauge your skills.
  My scale: [1: Terrible] [2: Bad] [3: Okay] [4: Good] [5: Excellent]
  The overall is an average of the other scores, rounded up.
  Style [1]: This fiction flows terribly. I lost track of my position in the novel several times because of how badly it is paragraphed. The punctuation such as commas and periods within a paragraph is nonexistent.
  Several times, I found myself asking if you purposefully went back and deleted all the punctuation.
  Aside from how well it reads, the style itself is terrible as well. It's full of you telling us what happened in an extremely dull way made worse by how difficult it is to slog through it.
  There is a reason why "show-don't-tell" is so important in the writing community. It's almost always more exciting and immersive to show the reader the action rather than narrating what happened. This novel is an example of the latter.
  However, this means there is room for improvement.
  Story [1.5]: Despite your self-patting, having a unique way for your character to die and reincarnate does not make it special. This is made even worse since you yourself referenced other novels of this type, thus lumping this novel into that group.
  Like most amateur LitRPG with monsters, your story starts out with your MC killing things and leveling up. However, unlike more well-written stories, your character is not very interesting, nor does he feel real. More on this in the character section.
  So far, this feels like a generic LitRPG novel. There is no reason for me to read this over any other novels. Grabbing my interest is your job, and a unique premise for your story is a good way to do this. A good character is another way.
  Grammar [2]: I'm going t
• DDclashRoyal Road

  ★ 0.5

  If you improve, glad for you.
  If not, please don't write more novels, if you ask why: 1) There's already alot of garbage on RRL, I don't want a few more. 2) If you didn't improve and someone, not mature enough to just laugh at it, read it, what will you tell to their parents?
  P.s. 50 Int for such a stupid hero is too much.
  P.s.sAnd if you improve + rewrite the story, please write me in PM, I will delete my review, well, if it's bother you.