Rise of the First Necromancer

Self-Published

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Description

We're on a lengthy hiatus here, fellas. Sorry.

Asrael Nessarat awakes on a sandy dune with a mouthful of sand and nothing but tattered rags in his posession. As the High Magus of the school of Necromancy, he once aspired to prove to the Emperor that magic still held a place in their society. But that day came, passed and inevitably accelerated his kind's downfall. Now; they are hunted, strung up and burned on pyres throughout the Empire by the Emperor's holy Inquisition- an efficient and ruthless army hell-bent on bleeding every last droplet of magic from the lands. With nothing but a mouthful of sand and tattered rags; Asrael is determined to seek the one thing his cold, still heart desires. Vengeance.

This story can, at times, get very dark. It is not recommended for the faint of heart.

This is not a story of an overtly powerful wizard who can pulverize his enemies from across the world, nor is it in any way, shape or form ajoyoustale. We follow Asrael as he and his companions explore and seek to change an unjust world, where kindness and acceptance are exceptions, rather than the rule. If you are looking for a story to inspire hope or joy, this is not it. If you wish to read about likeable, heroic people, turn around. If you wish to see good battle evil, where the cut in between is clear, then this is not for you.

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2021
Author: UnoriginalPervert

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 3.8/ 5.0
Followers: 283
Views: 209,419

Chapters(172 total)

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Community Reviews(10)

BullerRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Not dry like when you mean bitter. I mean dry in the sense that parts could have been quoted from Blackadder without me being too surprised. This is certainly not the standard throughout the entire fiction(or the parts I've read at least), but the few paragraphs with this style were quite the treat to sit through.
Grammar had a few misconceptions but overall better than average. Personality was a little rough but might turn out better in later chapters. Not too sure but giving it the gift of doubt. 5/5 for now.
KNOWLEDGERoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
I've gotten up Chapter 63 and gotta say I love the world building , power structure and the plot. My only complaint if you can even call it that is I was looking for a more serious story when I picked it up and while there is a compelling storyline the jokes threw me off. I'll most likely come back to it in like a week but if you're looking for a necromancer power trip with the occasional neutering joke XD this is for you.
A Rhetorical RockRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Alright back to review now that I have caught up.
First off from my opinion the story is fairly well written, however it is very dark/gory especially with perverted things going on. If those are things that don’t tend to bother you then I absolutely recommend the story.
The characters have all felt unique despite the shared overall theme, and the characters have grown off of each other throughout the story.
The "magic system" has been great I personally would not consider it a power fantasy as I’ve seen some people describe it. The wizards are in fact quite limited to their specific profession not stretching it and doing everything.
From the story so far it seems like the mc is more of a academic wizard in the sense that he understands a decent amount of magical theory but even still is only capable of doing his specific magic aka necromancy specifically converting living individuals to sentient undead ones. They have slightly greater than normal strength along with the classical undead stuff of not needing to eat.
However aside from that it is just as easy for them to dry out in the sun or be cut up. There is no throwing around magic deathbolts.
The world building/history has been pleasant to pay attention to, as we learn more about this inquisition along with the power behind these modern wizards.
Anyway, I wanted to write a proper review now that I’m caught up. In summery dark book similar to Pith, perverted in a classy way? and lastly consistent in its themes.
Sparks2020Royal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
If you're going to give you story a certain style, then you LEAN into it, no apologies. This story delivers on that count.
This is a dark, gothic type of read with chunky paragraphs that help set the mood. Great if you're into this kind of stuff; you know at a glance if you are or not.
That said, there's lots of places where I'd have preferred paragraphs to be broken up, but that's personal preference. Also the shift of POV from 1st to 3rd after Chapter 1 is a little jarring.
Still very much worth your time to read. Thumbs up!
The_chernobogRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
Look let me put it this way. If you like this book you're going to fucking love it, and if you don't you are probably going to hate it. It's an amoral psychopath necromancer who comes back to life after the ignorant masses killed all the mages. And he just fucks shit up. after the first couple of chapters, you will know if it's not for you so just go ahead and don't read another review.
A bit of a warning this book has scenes that make some books on the holocaust seem tame. And some light erotica. But besides all that the author manages to mix a dark, gripping, brutal, tale of vengeance with dry and witty humor timed to break it up. The author also presents multiple sides of human nature, and each character has a lot of depth and growth throughout the book. My only complaint is; that I can't own a physical copy to force my sick depraved friends to read this book.
So in summary: Do you like depraved and love dark twister stories with gore? Read this. Do you like stories with depth and good world-building? Read this. If you like amoral protagonists on a murder-filled revenge spree against the ignorant masses that wronged them. Read this. If you like dry witty humor and varied and complex takes on humanity? Read this book.
Golenishchev AndreyRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
Opening: from the first lines of the story, a thought crept into my head: is this really something interesting? The first chapter comes from the first person POV, the subsequent chapters from the third person POV. This introduces a slight dissonance. It seems to me that if the author of this work somehow highlighted the first chapter in font or separated the descriptions from the third person, and the thoughts of the main character in italics, it would be much easier to follow along.
I think that such a technique should be corrected in the future, since it does not allow the rest of the story to be revealed in all its glory. And the story is really worth continuing to read it.
Story: The story, its setting and events made my soul fibers tremble. I love something dark and gloomy and the ambiance here are served perfectly, as well as the events in which the main character falls.
The style is verbose. Long descriptions, huge paragraphs. This is for those who likes it. And I do. I always felt uncomfortable when I read paragraphs that were two short sentences long. Here my inner critic rejoiced.
Grammar: I am not a native English speaker. But I had no problems reading with pleasure and understanding everything. So I won't find fault.
Characters: The story tells about the necromancer Azrael. He is an interesting character and immediately gets into the thick of dark events. To be honest, I didn't really like his character, his manner of speech and what he says in the situations he gets into. But I probably am being subjective here. And I will not lower my rating for subjectivism.
I was probably most confused by the fact that in the first chapter he speaks of himself as "a superior intellect", and then he acts as a whiny boy, at least that’s how I saw it. For me, it doesn't matter if the main character is bad, vile, immoral or kind and sympathetic. Different circumstances require different approaches, and words come from feelings. If you are smart, it is unlikely that you w
NicebagdadRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
This story does something that very few stories have been able to do, it has a necromancer that actually makes sense and is competent while not being too op. A trap I find many necromancy stories go into is making the necromancer far too powerfull from the get go, but the necromancer in this story slowly builds up his strength and will most likely become an unstoppable force eventually.
The short term power creep vs the late blooming power has always been a problem amongst necromancy stories in my opinion and this one does it just right.
HickupsRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
This absolute page-turner has a woefully inaccurate synopsis. I expected to read about the exploits of an edgy Banderas-esque avenger carving a bloody path through a victorian-styled fantasy world. What I discovered was a nuanced tragi-comedy about a motley crew of characters fighting for their place in a degenerate hell-hole of a society, with wit, grit and varying degrees of charme.
Unfortunately, the grandeur of it's characters provides stark contrast to the points where the story fails to deliver. For one, despite deep lore the setting is very constricted, giving the protagonists only a microcosmos of stages to inhabit. Not a bad thing per se but they often remain underdeveloped. Exception being Kester's countertop, which was an absolute genius way of setting up the most recurring location, imo.
More pressing however, the main protagonist is remaining static in a rapidly developing group. His inertia so great it stains his dialogues and inner voice with repetitive (and occasionally redundant) diatribes.
I cannot tell wether the author is intentionally postponing his developement or if it's an unfortunate oversight. Initially there have been small, recalcitrant steps, which befits Asrael, but they have halted. The problem is the current ambiguity and resulting 'foreigness' of the Main character, as it inhibits the empathic link to the reader.
Lastly, I think this story is a bit too rife with obscenity. An overabundance of unnecessary vulgarity and cheap shockers turns the grotesque mundane and inundates the reader from the truly horrific revelations, eventually. But that is personal opinion and as such not necessarily a flaw in itself.
Otherwise this is a story to laugh, cry and question life, society and your own morality. You can easily tell how much effort and heart goes into it. Which leaves me with the conviction that with polish and experience this story will become one of the most incredible projects this site has seen.
Now stop staring at this highbrow re
grovekeeperRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
The story isnt the usual everyone is good and people help each other story you see. Its rather set in a world of magi with all its traits, good the bad and the ugly.
The synopsis gives a promise of a solo revenge journey but the story is a bit different.
The characters deep. Well thought out and have been progresses well, except for the MC who's progrrss is non evident and dialogue often feels repetitive. Maybe it's how a narcissistic mind looks like, but imo it's too much.
Grammar is good minus minor typos.
Story is excellent, the setting is good and so is the pacing. Gore and violence is plenty, but enjoying the story.
Don't know why it has been rating bombed.
rem_brandtRoyal Road
★★★ 3.0
It sadly did not hold my interest. I found the MC too exhausting to follow.
All his internal and external dialog seems to revolve around how people are too stupid, too pathetic or too filthy.
Apart from that the writing seems good. And I like the conception of necromancers in this story.