Remnant Stars (Being Rewritten)
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What would you do if you suddenly woke up in a strange new world? A world filled to the brim with fantastic creatures and unfathomable mysteries. Here, you can fulfill your wildest desires.
Have you ever dreamt of infinite wealth or obtaining unparalleled beauty?
What about unshakable power and authority?
Perhaps Immortality? Or maybe, you want something else entirely.
Gil, a young man from the mid-twenty-first century, found himself in this exact situation. Yet, there is only one thing that drives him forward; finding the truth.
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- Status
- Hiatus
- Author
- Bizmuth
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- Rating
- 4.5/ 5.0
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- 58
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Community Reviews(2)
- HamelinRoyal Road★★★★★ 4.5Style: 4.0
I like it. It’s precise and for the most part, well put together.
Story: 3.5
The story starts off slow and lacks a general sense of direction, but after chapter 1.15, more of the world is starting to become unraveled. In this chapter we’re finally introduced to the magic system in the form of “lusris manipulation.” (Unless the time and illusion powers that the mc has are a part of that, but I doubt it. Also, I hope the author had a goal in mind when he used the word “lusris” instead of plain old mana.)
In 1.15, we're also introduced to a major plot element that changes the main character's (and I suppose his team’s) goal from randomly wandering around the world to potentially working against the clock to escape from their current location. Overall, I prefer the new direction the story is heading.
As for the world building, I’d say that it’s a little too early to really judge since there are only 15 chapters out. What I managed to get so far is that the new world shares some deliberate similarities to Earth which even the main character comments about, but these similarities seem to focus mainly on the background stuff like the length of the day or from which direction the sun rises. I’m not sure if this was done for the convenience or if it has a meaning beyond that.
Beyond that, the world is set up in fragmented safe zones. Travel between them is dangerous because of all the monsters that roam around outside. So to travel around, people form these parties like they are going dungeon raiding in WoW. There are front liners and back liners, though in this case the back liners are the damage dealers and appear to be focused on support. And it looks like the main character is going to be an archer. (Hell yes!)
While not totally unique, this setting has the benefit of being able to explore various cultures and societies.
Grammar: 4.5
Other than a few small mistakes that should be fixable with another revision, the grammar seemed fine. I didn’t look too deeply - Professor PorkchopRoyal Road★★★★ 3.5I Read through 1.3. The story seems ...empty. And I'm not entirely sure why. I get the setting and characters (2 and a figment) I get that they have powers of some sort. I never did get WHY they are there or WHY they have powers, or indeed what the powers are. Illusions, primarily, but Im getting some vagueness that implies other powers
Also, guy's on an alien planet (maybe) but he still has the ability to perform microtransactions in a video game? that's one helluva phone and range. Just sayin'
Not saying the story is bad. It's readable, but it could really shine if you address my points.