Remainders

Information

Status

Hiatus

Year

2023

Author

Shrike Law

• Final Chapter: Chapter 18
  Aug 14, 2023
• Chapter 17
  Aug 13, 2023
• Chapter 16
  Aug 6, 2023
• Chapter 15
  Aug 3, 2023
• Chapter 14
  Jul 29, 2023
• Chapter 13
  Jul 24, 2023
• Chapter 12
  Jul 24, 2023
• Chapter 11
  Jul 21, 2023
• Chapter 10
  Jul 17, 2023
• Chapter 9
  Jul 16, 2023
• Chapter 8
  Jul 15, 2023
• Chapter 7
  Jun 13, 2023
• Chapter 6
  Jun 3, 2023
• Chapter 5
  May 13, 2023
• Chapter 4
  May 7, 2023
• Chapter 3
  May 2, 2023
• Chapter 2
  May 1, 2023
• Chapter 1
  May 1, 2023

Reviews

Community Reviews(5)

• JD GLASSCOCKRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  the author certainly has  the environmental painting down...i could feel the frigid landscape....a solid start...obvious world building....some kind of mystery capsules.....edges of threat and nuanced feel of political machinations with guards.....and the paper.....suspense thriller...wish nothing but beautiful thoughts to the endeavor and hope it is a great success for them
  JD Glasscock
  Author of the series Blood Brothers and the Dream
• JavonHindelburgRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 4.5

  Overall I like the direction of the story, and I feel like I understand what the author is trying to convey.
  There are some major and minor grammatical errors however. And at times I feel like the story makes some large jumps around. This isn't always a bad thing but it can throw off my reading a little bit.
  Let's start from the top though.
  Style: Overall I think the style is great. Not perfect but I've seen much, much worse. Certain things like more diverse word choice, some choice dialogue tags, and certain verbiage changes could majorly improve the story.
  Some points can be kind of clunky to read. For example at one point the author basically says "when they arrive" three times in two sentences. It feels a little redundant, but it's not the end of the world.
  Story: I think the author has a very interesting concept on their hands. I really enjoyed considering some of the aspects, such as what a political sphere would be like in this world. On the other hand I'm not sure how much thought went into the overall structure of the story.
  There does seem to be a level of thought as to what has and will happen. But not a solid story board level of thought. Being a pantser has it's perks and, when done right, can be very engaging. But there I'd always something to be said for both sides.
  Personally I am a planner. I think committing to a structure and overall story arc, that I've laid down beforehand, has helped my writing tremendously. It's not for everyone but it's certainly worth a try.
  My main gripe with the story would have to be minor plot holes and nuances that may not be fully fleshed out or considered. However these are minor grievances in the grand scheme of things.
  Grammar: This section has to be my biggest complaint, but also stems from my hard on for editing. The grammar is not the best. Grammatical errors litter all the chapters and, while I do understand, it severely detracts from the legibility and great story concept.
  Missing or misused commas are a minor
• BeezeRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  This story has a nice flow to it. The only thing that I have noticed is that there were a few Grammatical errors, but it's  a good story and going in a good direction, and has potential.  With  some fixing up in the Grammar, it can  turn this into a Great story.
• InfinityphoenixRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  Definitely needs to have its grammar checked over again, but not a bad story so far.
  Style: I can see a consistent style emerging here, but it's rough. It needs a good thorough check before any chapters are posted. At first I thought the shorter sentences in the first few chapters were to fit the theme, however it seems the author needs to work on writing longer sentences, while using comas appropriately to give them natural pauses.
  Story: Story definitely seems to have taken inspiration from 12 Miles Below, but not necessarily a copy. Characters are introduced a little to quickly then ditched soon afterwards, without much exploration of their personalities. I can't yet tell what side characters are important to the plot yet, because the mc did so much in the first few chapters. But the story is going somewhere. I probably just haven't read far enough yet.
  Grammar: Needs a lot of work. Full stops are forgotten, sometimes spaces are between multiple dots used to represent sentences trailing off (like this...), and the paragraphs and dialogue doesn't have consistent spacing. But it's readable, if something that needs work.
  Character: It seems like the mc has some secrets, including his past and metal leg. This means the author plans on exploring that, which is something to be commended. Everyone else besides the mc is a little bland, and again, they get introduced and moved over too quickly to give this category a higher grade.
  Overall: The author could do with reading a few other top-rated stories just to have a look at what they've done and compare it to their own story, not to copy plots, but just to see how they've used language and grammar in their novels. As much as posting chapters frequently and constantly writing does improve writing, readers don't want to read a story that takes a hundred chapters before the reader has improved. I suggest to the author they use Grammarly or other free programs to quickly find their mistakes.
• SaiphRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 3.5

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  The grammar holds what could be a great story back quite a bit. The world and characters are rich and interesting but this is hampered by a rushed style. It would appeal to those who want something fast-paced which doesn’t beat about the bush with excessive description. Plot points are hit quickly and there’s some obvious forshadowing that shows a larger plot has been thought out.
  Style
  The language is simple, not over done, but not always clear. Occasionally it’s a little bit repetitive in places.
  Some scenes and locations need a little more of a description earlier. There is a lot of action but sometimes a character will just be described as running up or running out and it won’t make sense until a bit further along where it is they have actually gone.
  Sometimes people randomly show up by speaking and you’re not sure if they’ve always been there or not.
  What state a character is in and who is in the room is not always obvious. Sometimes the order things happen in is a bit confusing.
  Like Zeno being both very sick but also there to react when the white robes tell him what they think of his family.
  One can appreciate the not-beating about the bush aspects of this story. Plot points are hit quickly and there’s certainly nothing boring here, however it is at the expense of description which could potentially give the the story a little more depth.
  There are some scenes that are better described than others so I think the author just needs to go back through and give the other parts some more attention. At the moment the writing feels a little rushed.
  Story
  The story and worldbuilding are pretty solid. This is where this work shines. The plot has obvioulsy been well thought through and there is some nice forshadowing. The world the story is set in is interesting and rich. I think it could benefit from a slightly more consistently descriptive style though.
  Grammar
  Needs a serious edit.
  Sometimes it is hard to follow which character is doing what or who is sp