Record of Another World: Party of Three
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Fifteen-year-old Taka dreams of becoming an adventurer. Setting out to make that dream a reality, he boards a ship to the town of Leln. Struggling to grow past his combat anxiety all while navigating difficult relationships with his less-than-stellar companions—an arrogant magician, Beriyl, and a closed-off, no-nonsense swordsman, Arthur— Taka finds that adventuring is far more dangerous and stressful than he ever imagined. After their first monster hunt goes awry, Taka works to become stronger under Arthur's watchful eye, while budding feelings bloom in his chest for the noble Beriyl. When the town is besieged by goblins and Taka yet again is paralyzed in terror while his friends fight around him, he finds himself face to face with his worst fear—that he might not be cut out to be an adventurer, after all. If Taka is unable to grow past this terror, then his friends will protect him forever, and he’ll never become the person he wants so badly to be.
Blending inspiration from non-western fantasy the likes of Rifujin na Magonote'sMushoku Tenseiand Kanehito Yamada'sFrieren, fans of the slice-of-life/steadily increasing stakes variety of fantasy will find plenty to love here. A found family dynamic runs center in the story; the people we follow themselvesarethe story, I always say. This is not quite a tale of the hero defeating a dragon, but a hero finding that the dragon lies more so in the everyday minutiae of being an adventurer itself.
Yes. There is suffering. There is darkness. There is an ancient evil.But Taka is only a child.
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- Ongoing
- Year
- 2026
- Author
- SGreyholt
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- 4.5/ 5.0
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- Jonathan BRoyal Road★★★★★ 4.5Everything is in one chapter, but I read the first 10,000 words. I really like what you have so far, and I've included my general notes below. Keep up the great work!
Not sure if you were planning on doing this, but I'd break up your first chapter into multiple parts. That big wall of text at the beginning could very well intimidate and drive off readers who are interested in your story, which would be a shame because what you have is really good..
I like your introduction with Taka on the ship as we slowly peel back the layers and learn what he does, where he's at, and about his goal to be an adventurer. When you mention that Taka wants to pursue this profession, I'd include a bit more detail about what exactly an adventurer is. It's such a nebulous term, adventurer, so are we referring to someone who fights monsters, looks for treasure, charts unexplored seas? When Taka sees the older man with the longsword, that might be a perfect opportunity for him to muse about the dangers of adventuring or something of that nature.
I like Dane's character quirk of elongating his ssssssss.
The goodbye scene between Dane and Taka was very heartfelt, but I'd honestly like to see or learn a bit more about the relationship between the two of them first. This is for all intents and purposes Taka's adopted father, and now they may never see each other again. Consider this less of a critique and just my own opinion.
I like Taka as a protagonist. He lacks confidence and is ignorant to a lot happenings of the world. It'll be fun to watch him grow.
The spoiled half-elf, Beriyl, seems a tad cartoonishly unlikeable. You might have a plan for the character, but I think he comes across a bit too goofy compared to the rest of the world you've been setting up.
I liked your description of the lone goblin watching the wagon of adventurers. I wasn't sure if we were only going to be following Taka's perspective and this was a cool way to give context to the horses getting scared a scene earlier.