Reborn in Flames
Self-Published
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Description
This story is gonna be my first take at a litrpg
read if you like
-Mc who works hard
-reincarnated into a trashy noble
-There are gonna be some sexually explicit scenes but hopefully you'll find them tastefully done.
Information
- Status
- Hiatus
- Year
- 2025
- Author
- jarlballin
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Royal Road Stats
- Rating
- 2.0/ 5.0
- Views
- 234
Chapters(1 total)
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Community Reviews(1)
- VelvenolRoyal Road★★ 2.0There are a lot of things that rubbed me off during my read, the style, the characters, the pasting.
1. The style: Your current writing style is indicative of teenagers. In writing swearing should be used sparingly or it becomes flat out annoying. There are a lot of grammatical errors done out of sheer clumsiness as if you were rushing yourself to post it here. The entire thing contains mostly useless exposition considering he's going to another world anyway. Also for internal thoughts use a different shrift, it's hell to read otherwise.
2. The characters: They lack any and all substance. Who is the main character as a person except being nerd and poor. What does he want from life. Also he feels like a self insert, (it's telling when i can probably guess your political views based on your character.).
3. The pasting. Way too fast for anything to sink in, might as well just have started being reincarnated. You just skip on and on from one scene to another even though you dont have a lot of scenes, it all happens way too fast for me care.
I hope this was useful. I know you definitely can do better.