Realms Alight: Aria's Odyssey
Self-Published
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Description
In the calm village of Oakridge located in the middle of lush forests, Aria, a bright and spirited apprentice to the revered healer, gets a small vacation from her master. She decides to use it by walking outside and going into the woods. She stumbles upon an ancient amulet. Its pulsating glow captivates her. Unaware of its deep significance, she takes it away with her. She goes to her house to to examine the strange amulet. After a while of not understaning what's with the amulet, she decides to wear it as a jewelry, not knowing what powers she just awakened.
Information
- Status
- Hiatus
- Year
- 2024
- Author
- Akkkajuy
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- Rating
- 4.7/ 5.0
- Followers
- 3
- Views
- 833
Chapters(3 total)
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Community Reviews(2)
- AysegulRoyal Road★★★★★ 5.0It is engaging and fun to read. I reccomend trying it. You will probably like it. And, its going exciting too. The character development is really good. Storyline is interesting. There are 2 main characters and there are more than 1 focus points the main characters focus on. I can hardly wait to see how the story will progress.
- Merlin PendragonRoyal Road★★★★ 4.0Worth a shot. It’s very short so what do you have to lose? This short story is surprisingly compelling, with characters built by necessity upon the reader's own assumptions.
Style - The concise nature of this fiction makes for a speedy read and the spacing makes it easy to read.
Story - The story is the main point of this fiction, there’s no overlong descriptions or intolerable waffle. Each sentence is to the point and furthers the plot. You read there’s action, you’re done.
Grammar - This will probably be the biggest sticking point for most. To the authors credit I only found one actual spelling mistake but that’s where the good news ends. This work suffers from:
Inconsistent tenses. The first chapter is in past tense but the majority of the story is in present tense, although it does change a number of times.
Repeated capitalization of "I"s at the beginning of the words It and If in the middle of sentences.
Often using what is unquestionably direct dialogue when I think they intend to quote the characters throughout.
Occasional misuse of the small words, such as “at” when “to” is intended though this can be overlooked.
Character - There are two characters and I believe that is all there is room for in such a short story. They are overall compelling and engaging. That said, we are often told what the characters are like rather than shown. This phrase is often used in TV but I feel it applicable here: show don’t tell.
In conclusion, worth a shot. This fiction may not be breaking any new ground or telling the most transfixing story but given how short it is I bet your day would be improved by reading it.