[RE] System

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Description

Wrongfully condemned and brutally dispatched, Connor’s spirit, adrift in anguish and bewilderment, was thrust into the ethereal maelstrom of the Spirit Rift—a fantastical realm teetering on the precipice of a cataclysmic World War II. His agonizing fate, however, was not oblivion. Instead, he was tasked with averting global annihilation, reborn not in human form, but as a sentient, all-seeing system.

~[You have one minute left to occupy a being before your life is forfeited.]

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2018
Author: fyrokai

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 3.7/ 5.0
Followers: 305
Views: 57,810

Chapters(19 total)

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Community Reviews(6)

BullerRoyal Road
★★★★ 3.5
The plot-idea is good enough. Definetly enough to get me reading. What it didn't achieve was make me keep reading. I think this has been said before more than a few times now, but this story has problems with the grammar and style. Sure, it means well and all, but there are flaws which just cant be ignored for any real reason. I honestly cant get through this.
It has potential, yes, but that will likely never be actualized. 3.5/5
The LostRoyal Road
★★★★ 3.5
A new take on the system storys, with the main character being the system itself as of ch 11 it is quite good.
BinLoxRoyal Road
★★ 2.0
English is obviously not the author's native language, and is in dire need of an editor. The only way I could see myself reading any more of this is if he/she gets a damn good editor.
The story is pretty normal, person gets taken to another universe, reincarnates... and ends up in the absolute best host body they could. Pretty dull and boring. Oh, and there's infodumps all over starting in the third chapter.
In dire need of a wordsmith's polishing.
MartianflameRoyal Road
★★ 2.0
It is an interesting story but the grammar, word choice, and exposition need a lot of work. Those three factors make this a difficult story to read.
LittleSheepKobiRoyal Road
★★ 1.5
Anticipated a good read based on the shot synopsis, and was sorely disappointed upon reading it.
The author speaks in broken English near constantly.
The setting in the opening could seem to decide what feel it was going for.
The characters may as well be cardboard cutouts for all the life they possess.
However, despite all of the glaring flaws, i would be tempted to read it if the writer gets an editor to look it over as the concept is pretty intriguing.
argusthecatRoyal Road
★★ 1.5
Okay, everyone else has already mentioned the poor grammar. I'm here to confirm that yes, that's a huge problem. Word choice is sometimes just broken, typos are eternally present, and it takes serious effort to decode what's being said sometimes.
That's not my biggest problem here.
My biggest problem is that decoding what's being said isn't worth the effort. The main character apparantly can't decide if he misses his murdered wife, or is on board with the whole 'being a system' thing. One of the first things he does is comment on how shitty it is that the new world has slavery, but then he seems to mock the person he posesses for having an interracial relationship, and doesn't have any particular care about the nature of the slaves? It's just super confusing.
Super confusing is honestly just the Big Mood of this story. I have no idea what the *point* is. Is he supposed to be a good guy trying to save someone and stop a war? Or is he just a malevolent asshole who doesn't explain anything and harasses his only charge? Spoilers; it's the second one.