Re:Shard - Due to RL issuse uploading is very slow, but still undergoing and not yet dead

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An abusive bastard of a father and a mother who never cared. A life in crime, used as a human shield and an assassin and what not. Our main charter’s life is not the best. But he doesn’t complain, he has seen worse after all the is the one to deliver it to others. So his death doesn't come as a surprise, but what comes after does!Cast into a world of magic and monsters, how will he fare in his new life?Cover: [The Ice Barrier] by Horriso.NOTE: This story is for MATURE readers only meaning 18+ (Or what counts as mature in your country!), It is NOT a story for the faint of heart.It contains violence, gore, evil, sexual content + rape - might put them as spoilers, for thoses who want to semi skip them. Utterly brutal and vile. Murder, Slavery etc.2th Note: This is my first posted fantasy story. English is not my first langue. So there will be grammar poops along the way. Will try my very best not to get to much of it in. Will try to get at least one chapter in each week hopefully more.

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Status: Hiatus
Year: 2016
Author: Lellith

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Rating: 4.0/ 5.0
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Community Reviews(8)

BlackjakasRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Good.... IMA FIYERING MHA LAZER ON TIS FRIKING GOD KNOW HOW I LOVE THIS LN BBWWWWWOIIIIIIIIII!!!!!!
HexwolfxRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Your story has just the right amount of story building and world building
FlashfyreRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
What really gets me in this story i how he died to his father in his last life. Now that he has been reborn he doesn't trust his new father one bit, but the kick is that this new father just wants to shower him with love, not being an abusive fuck boy like his last father. And after 20+ chapters you can see him gradually opening up, albeit in an unconcious fashion.
Futhark the ElderRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
I've enjoyed this story a great deal and am disappointed that there hasn't been an update for a while.
The main character is not exactly a nice guy, but he controls his impulses well in the presence of his second set of parents (i.e. after reincarnation), while his horrible first life explains his emotional instability. The author cleverly creates a humorous contrast between the MC's inner monologue, which is disrespectful, cynical, and sometimes vicious, and his outwardly polite interactions with his loving parents and other adults.
The author deserves to be congratulated for ensuring that the MC makes good use of the experience earned during his first life. Too many authors of reincarnation stories have MC's who, despite having been reborn with full memories of their first lives, nevertheless act like and frustratingly reason like the children their bodies appear to be. This author has grasped that a reincarnation or do-over is supposed to give us the sense of living your life over while knowing what you know now --- a dream we all share.
Ultimately, the only factor leading me to take off half a star is that the author struggles fairly often to find the correct English word. I hope he/she will resume this engrossing tale and also find a competent English writer willing to help with editing. The story-telling talent is there.
WolfsnowRoyal Road
★★★★ 3.5
Style- Author is pretty consistent here, and his style is fine.
Grammar- Like the author said, English is not his first language and it shows. Not the hardest thing to read, but a proofreader would go a long way in making the story a bit easier to read.
Story- Pretty typical reincarnation story-a once murderous person is now reincarnated by an intrigued god, born into a family that isn't poor, but not rich and are slightly respected. Author kinda weird me out with his stats screen, because at a rather young age from like 6-11 the MC is killing basically fucking everything- bandits, spiders, wolves, etc, and as far as the reader knows he isn't OP. In fact his stats are a bit mediocre imo, but what's strange is that he seems way too strong compared to those around him. His father was scared of dying to spiders, so the sons knocks him out, and then just walks out of his fire ring and basically kills every spider in the area over 5 hours, and also clears a spider dungeon. Idk, it feels really weird that he is so strong here. Also I don't mean to dictate how the author does his story, but the pacing is veryyyyy slow imo. Some of the scenes just feel very tedious.
Character- The characters are alright, but painfully oblivious about the main characters strength. Also the MC i know was abused by his previous father, but I mean cmon you've lived with your new dad for 8 years since birth and he still doesn't trust him pretty weird.
kuraitjaRoyal Road
★★ 2.0
the first thing I noticed in the story is the mistake you make every time and have not fixed it after 20 chapters.
LITTLE BIT OF SPOILER.
every time there is a time jump, it is like the MC stops doing anything and just sleeps or something because in the story it said he was hunting wolves for 1 whole year but he only killed 8 or so at the end and he has not killed anything before that in a whole year what makes no sense at all. also at the beginning of the 5 year time jump he has done nothing but learn 1 book and for some reason he needs to choose which 10 herbs to learn but after reading that book it should have been done but that did not happen. another thing is that the mc get's no points or anything in the time jumps. when he travels to Flood village his mother told him to find 10 herbs and he finds 7 of them very fast, time jump half a day, and he finds nothing but then finds the last 3 in the village, that makes no sense at all.
the story goes nowhere either, I see no potential for the story to go anywhere for one reason.
reason: he lives on a small island.
you have not explained anything else of the world so I have no idea where the island is on the world.
the only thing good about the novel is the grammar. I am not good at grammar and I saw almost no mistakes, so that is it.
overall it has to improve a lot before it becomes a good novel. I hope you improve the novel and good luck.
daimyo29Royal Road
★ 1.0
Story: 2/5 - Generic cliche reincarnation story. Not bad but also not good.
Style: 2.5/5 - I enjoy the pace and the mood of the story.
Characters: 2/5 - The side characters are actually really good. They feel real and are nice to read about. Too bad about the MC, he is at best bland at worst annoying.
Grammar: 2/5 Not bad, a few mistakes but not too bad. The only problem is the format of the chapters, it gives me a headache reading them.
But all these are nothing to the biggest problem of the story, and the reason I stopped reading it. The way the world works in the story doesn't make any sense, it is illogical. And worse is the fact that the author is trying to use flawed logic to explain other illogical things in his world.
I can accept a lot of flaws in a story, but when it is illogical it's the end for me, I can't read it anymore. So, if you are not bothered by the lack of logic in a story, then you will enjoy this story, otherwise, there are better story on RRL with the same plot.
mrttaoRoyal Road
★ 0.5
Spoiler: Spoiler
The timeskips really make no goddamn sense. The 2 year old reincarnator finally connects to his shard (a divine attachment to the soul which is used to grant people RPG system)... at which point he has already fully mastered the language and convinced his parents he is a genius.
At that point he had already memorized 7 plants (need to memorize 10 to unlock herbalism skill). Then he takes 3 year timeskip to DECIDE which 3 more plants to memorize (from a book containing hundreds of herbs), and once he has decided at the end of the 3 years he memorizes them in minutes and then immediately memorizes the rest of the book in hours.
He has a 1 minute conversation with his parents that lasted over 6 hours. He timeskips several years doing literally nothing.
The author should just rewrite all the early chapters, it should go like this
chapter 1 - reincarnated
chapters 2-4: grow up to age 16
Chapter 5: On 16th birthday, connect to shard. Now can start doing all the advertury stuff without the ridiculous illogical timeskips.
Also, the grammar and spelling are awful. the MC is detestible (literally a rapist), and characterization is inconsistant.