Re: Rabbit Eyes [Draft]

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White is an 18-year old sophomore who suffers from severe anemia and schizophrenia after his parents' death. One day, his life came to an end, but he was unexpectedly brought to life in a different world... in the company of a split personality hiding within him. Torn between two personalities, White struggles to survive in this strange, grimdark world with unfavourable, relapsing memories.

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Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2018
Author: Sinpathyy

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Rating: 4.1/ 5.0
Followers: 242
Views: 269,297

Chapters(104 total)

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Community Reviews(5)

JeanDRaccRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
When I thought it would fall in typical stereotypes! But it didn't. Also the story is good enough. Give it a try!
LoneRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Issue 1. Coloured text. It is my opinion that you should never use coloured text. It is jarring and breaks immersion.
Issue 2. The Spacing. There is far too much spacing between some paragraphs and normal spacing between others. Consistency matters.
Issue 3. The characters' thoughts and dialogue seem to be a bit hamfisted so you can force-feed us the exposition you want us to know. This is a common error for new writers, so just take your time to iron this one out.
The grammar seems pretty good considering your apparent style and I didn't notice any spelling errors in the few chapters that I read, though I was just skimming to get a general idea to give you some tips.
The art is amazing and worthy of praise. Keep up the good work and I hope you become an excellent writer as well as a fantastic artist.
BombbastikRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
I had trouble staying with the plot, and for what little that i did, it was disorienting to say the least; This is a personal problem. the grammar is good. the characters are a bit confusing to understand, but they are ok. The story is a bit hard to follow and the style is quite cool.
BoredBeyondBeliefRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
The fact that the author avoided the 'slaves obey master for no reason' logic is worth 4 stars itself, I get rather annoyed seeing people bow down to some guy they have no clue about and never really getting a indepth character development besides 'Loves mc for no reason, boo hoo family died aswell but don't care'.
The author also avoided the annoying god reincarnation sterotype, what exactly is the logic behind a god reincarnating a human unless its someone important like a genetic researcher or something like that.Even worse, its terrible when a god reincarnates someone stronger then themselves.This novel avoided all of this and more which make it worthy of 4 stars, my only concern is the slow developments.
Oh the author also made the twist quite interesting in chapter 11.
The_RahmanRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
Story:
This is a good story that deserve the tragedy tag. In this story, the main character will experience good amount of suffering, so people that dislike tragedy should not read this story.
Spoiler: Spoiler
Unlike other story isekai story that have tragedy tag, but only use it at the beginning, in this story the mc will experience suffering from time to time
Character: The mc is behaved like your usual harem protagonist, i hope it will be changed later. Other character is good enough
Grammar:
Is readable and easy to understand