Røshjert

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"His name will never be sung, son. Skalds and bards like me will never tell his stories to the mass. But only us and us alone will keep telling his story, his actions, his saga. For he is the man who started all of this."

This is a story no man in Lumenter will ever hear, no man except for an Arnesen, for his stories are dull and generic to the ears of the masses, except for us, because he is the very reason why our people traveled this far east, why kingdoms in Erisgi fell and rose, why I... even existed in the first place.

He is Geir, son of Arne, called 'the Stranger' by the people.

But what he truly is, is a fiery red heart that beats inside every Eyklandian, Arnesen, and me.

Røshjert

(My Submission for Royal Road's Writing Competition in June 2022)

Information

Status: Completed
Year: 2022
Author: Merrikkia

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 4.5/ 5.0
Followers: 5
Views: 4,264

Chapters(12 total)

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Community Reviews(3)

nitromereader007Royal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
This is generally really well done - the story is interesting, the characters are good, the grammar is practically flawless and it's just a blast to read! The tense moments are very entertaining to go through, and it really knows how to build atmosphere. Really excited for new stuff related to this, keep up the good work man!
Evelyn AdelbergRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
The start of this story is a bit rough, with some tense switches and incorrect word usages. It is also very slow and somewhat repetitive while not being linear enough. But I think some minor edits could sort all of that out. Plus, the MC’s character is very well established and quite likable.
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TheredsheepRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
A good start! The author did their homework and put actual Germanic archaisms in there--bonus points for "Konung"--and the atmosphere they're striving for is distinct; this first part in places feels almost like Cormac McCarthy, with the sparse text and brief segments broken up and placed out of chronological order, flashing back and forth. The tone and style fit the work. It starts out grounded in an actual farm, in ordinary not-killing-monsters human experience, which is way too rare on RR.
Now, it is clear that English is the author's second language. There are odd but characteristic grammar errors scattered throughout--tense changes, subject-verb disagreements, and suchlike. This is honestly frustrating to me because I can tell that they have a story to tell, and it's a (potentially very) good story, and I'm getting fractured glimpses of it. But the fix for lack of experience with a language is to keep practicing at it, so Geir's story can only get better as it goes on.