Prophecy Knight

Self-Published

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Description

A re-imagination of the boy who cried wolf in a fantasy world. Kin grew up an orphan, working as a dish-boy/ barman in the local tavern. He had heard story after story of the world and its many mysteries from the travelers who passed through his little town, but now it was his chance to make some stories of his own. But fate flings him much farther than he expected as he is called to save a time-travelling monster from witches, conscripted into a bureaucratic demon army, and eventually lost at sea in an archipelago frontier all in search of what it means to be a "Prophecy Knight."

Unique fantasy world with standard mechanics. Light Litrpg elements (classes, progression, rankings) but no voice in the head or levels.

This is the first work I have ever released, so please leave comments and critique so I can improve my writing skills. I plan on releasing a new chapter every week. Check out the prologue and let me know what you think :)

Cover image originally by Melissa G.

Information

Status
Hiatus
Year
2022
Author
ClockworkOrange

Tags

ACTIONFANTASYADVENTUREMAGICANTI-HERO LEADSUPERNATURALGAMELITMALE LEADKINGDOM BUILDINGHIGH FANTASYMYTHOSPROGRESSIONTIME TRAVEL

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Rating
3.0/ 5.0
Followers
1
Views
264

Chapters(1 total)

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Community Reviews(1)

  • YoshikageKiraStan13Royal Road
    ★★★ 3.0
    Hello, this is my first review on this site and I am not really a writing expert or anything like that, but this what I think of your story so far:
    It's pretty good, but it does have some problems. The first thing is that I think that opening is somewhat weak. I have a feeling that this bedtime story was put in the first chapter for a reason and it probbably will have some larger signfiicance later on in the story, but it kind of fails as a hook.
    I also think that some parts of this bedtime story drag on for a little too long; they're too wordy.
    Everything else is much better. I didn't find any gramtical errors. The only other problem I had is that I don't have a very clear picture of what the protagonist's prediciment is. It's clear that he wants to escape, but I can't tell if he's an employee of this Irene woman or some sort of slave. You don't have to solve this problem with an infodump (one common pitfall that you managed to avoid; good job), but a little more information would be nice. Does he just want to change where his life is going and avoid and awkard conversation or is this guy in for a beating? Please make that clear.
    So thats, what I think. There are some minor problems, but it has a lot of potiential.