Project: 6

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Status

Hiatus

Author

ChikaoJ

Reviews

Community Reviews(5)

• A V DalcourtRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  Overall, I loved the first chapter, and the second chapter was a very nice start to the actual story, leaving me anticipating the next step in the story. I'm glad there's more to read :)
  Style: Written in a distant 3rd person, the story is conveyed through descriptions and action, which may not be too everyone's tastes. It suited me just fine, balancing the line between giving me a visual and driving the action forward. Each chapter is pretty long, but I barely noticed, being used to books where chapters don't even exist (Hello Discworld!).
  Story: Like I said, the opening is strong, and honestly that's what hooked me. There's the promise of a labyrinth style dungeon crawl, murder, and betrayal. The mystery of the masked man is enough to make me read on. In the following chapter we're introduced to G-6 a Homunculi. Not much is revealed behind the intent of these creatures, but we are told that they are powerful weapons, named according to the formula used to create them.
  Character: A number of characters are introduced initially, each with a presence of their own. It was easy to distinguish who was who and recall their motivations when their names popped up. I only had some minor confusion about G-1 and G-6 as I did not catch when we transitioned from focusing on G-6 to G-1.
  Overall an interesting premise, and has been added to my reading list.
• AkasoRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  >STYLE
  Limited third person, past tense. In the more meaningful sense of the word, the style does its job - this isn’t a point against the story, rarely does the literary style of a fic stand out to me enough to make me mention it. One thing I find somewhat unwieldy is the use of single-person “they” to refer to the protagonist despite them being a truly androgynous homunculus, thought that may be purely because I’m an ESL and my native language is gendered by design.
  Setting-wise, it’s in the somewhat vague realm of sci-fantasy, though there are inklings of an interesting greater setting being hinted at, so I hope the author pulls through on that front.
  >STORY
  So far, it’s mostly been just Six, our protagonist, being born and going through the initial stages of her “education”. I can’t judge the greater story since it hasn’t gotten its pace yet, but what I’ve read so far is a good start.
  The core concept of the fic appeals to me by default, being that my own story has a similar starting point of the MC being a homunculus.
  >GRAMMAR
  No real mistakes as far as I can tell, though the formatting can be a little inconsistent at points. I’d also suggest using line breaks instead of many dashes to form… Well, line breaks.
  >CHARACTERS
  Well-done, from what I’ve read so far. Six, is an archetypal blank slate, but is made to stand out through being the only in a class of six homunculi with true free will. The other characters, that is to say the human authority figures, I find to be well handled.
• AlixRocheRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  Overall, a great flowing story with an interesting premise and a distinct writing style.
  Style: the writing is really cinematic, in the sense that there are PoV switches that feel like panning to a different scene or character on a screen. The style of the narrative and the story that is being told is very immersive because of these choices on the author's part.
  Story: the start is indeed slow, but it is well fleshed out and the setup is definitely there. I'm looking forward to diving in deeper into the MC's journey. The premise as a whole is interesting so I want to see the execution through.
  Grammar: I'm notoriously bad at spotting grammar mistakes, so I can't comment on this, but I saw the author is working with an editor so I'm sure it's cleaned up. I didn't find anything while I read.
  Characters: I like the MC, but it is still very early on for me to make up my mind. They are a child in the beginning and the author is able to covey that very well. It actually felt like the character was a child and the way they act is endearing.
  Closing thoughts: I will update this once I get deeper into the story. The setup and hook is already there, I'm looking forward to the payoff.
• Ser Patrick PentRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  Yeah, yeah, I know. Bad pun with the title. But come on, you have to admit that it was due.
  I've read a few chapters ahead and gotten some insight from the author, so suffice to say, I like what I've seen.
  Style: Probably my only issue with this. The narration can seem somewhat distant. Blocky paragraphs exist, but the author has promised to fix them. It starts getting more cohesive the further in you read, especially when you realize this is a story about homunculi. They aren't really "human", per se, so the author's choice to tell the tale from a distant perspective isn't without merit. Particularly enjoyed chapter 14 (which I have read ahead).
  Story: Pretty interesting premise, and the author takes a careful approach to worldbuilding. If anything, I'm glad this isn't another reiteration of murder hobo number #3164.
  Grammar: Solid. Nothing really jumps out at you.
  Character: My favorite bit of the story. I love 6, and the bits exploring his (their?) innocence and naivety showed how much thought the writer put into characterization. I also love 4 and her interactions with 6. Struck me as particularly realistic. Alea and Olena round up the rest of the well thought-out cast, but I'm still on the fence about Tyren.
  Summary: Give this a try. Stories like these deserve more love, and I am curious to see how the author would evolve over time. If I had to sum up what this story had, it will be F G P: Full Greater Potential.
• SirPawsRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  Read through chapter 1 so far, it's definitely descriptive and solid take on world building. Super emotive, I can clearly see the actions of the room unfold with such vigor. Really made me rethink simple interactions. Can't wait to see how this unfolds. I'll come back as I read further.