Portal Mage Hiru [LitRPG Adventure]
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Description
Hiru's world changes forever when his adoptive parents tell him to leave his home, the Silver Wolf Mountains. Hiru will have to learn how to adapt to human life in a village part of a big kingdom in a war-torn world.
Talents. Some people have them and some don't. Those who have them gain fame, riches, and power. Adopted by a poor, talentless family, Hiru must work hard to help those he grows to love, even if it means putting his life on the line at only seven years old.
Litrpg Fantasy Adventure
Chapters released 2-4x a week!
Information
- Status
- Ongoing
- Year
- 2023
- Author
- Dexter May
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- Rating
- 4.3/ 5.0
- Followers
- 435
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- 8,865
Chapters(3 total)
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Community Reviews(5)
- OrthoLoessRoyal Road★★★★★ 5.0I love Hiru, both the character and the story.
MC has the potential to be op, but there seem to be fairly sensible limits on his abilities (for now at least).
Don’t come into this expecting the most serious highbrow fantasy stuff, I think it’s just the right level of silly fun 😁 - summoner 99Royal Road★★★★★ 5.0fun start in a dangerous world, but good worldbuilding where anything can happen! i like the characters and theyre growing, even if theres some anime style influence, it fits the genre, and isnt over the top.
keep going! :D
more words for the review length, but encouraging, nonspecific critique so the review doesnt get taken down this time! thanks for the chapters!!! - DecadunceRoyal Road★★★ 3.0Heyo, so this will be my first non advanced review. Honestly, even though there's been so few chapters released, the start has been fairly weak imo.
The story content is fairly inoffensive and bland, it's like eating a plain cracker. It's not really nice but also not really bad, will probably make you thirsty for a better story though.
The story is 90% cliches, the protagonist is a boy raised by wolves, there's a strong sword kid that says princess like pwincess, the mc is super special and cool and is the specialist boy ever wow! The princess is kind and caring, there's a stern Knight order, there's the kids, the father etc. It's all just cliches. It's... fine. It's not good, not bad it's there, if you're an experienced reader/watcher like me then you've seen all of this before.
The prose is where my actual issue with the story is, the author has really poor prose it seems like. He writes like translated LNs that I've read. The writing lacks a natural flow and rhythm to it. I'm notnsure if this is just a Japanese/Korean thing (as I see this most commonly in stories from that region of the world, but I don't know the authors nationality/influences) or if its just a second language thing that leads to this stilted and unnatural prose.
The dialogue also is pretty bad, characters are, again, fairly.. meh and this isn't helped by the basic and boring dialogue.
If the story drammaticly improves later then I'll give it another go and rewrite this. - LuxRoyal Road★★★ 2.5Like previous reviews have said the story content is fairly inoffensive and bland, not really bad but very by the numbers. Very standard MC with no real special traits or personality except being "special/unique". Like a lot of these types of stories the MC gets a bunch of OP powers for no real reason. Unfortunately this is one of those instances where rather than building on eachother or a domino effect causing them to accumulate it is just random chance and plot that give them all to him.
It also feels like it is written by a kid or as a young child power fantasy with no real understanding of the world. For example, a 5 year old is made chief of the town and everyone, despite knowing it is insane, just goes along with it. Only in a child's mind/power fantasy for kids does that make any sense, in a realistic world there would be a regent put in charge. Similarly, that same five year old beats up a grown man just because she has strong magic and another child becomes skilled with insanely powerful and difficult magic after practicing for all of two weeks.
It also has weird disconnects like a super dangerous world with basically no healers and yet people don't consider injury or death a real threat or very common. It very much feels like how people treat injury and death in our modern world but this is a fantasy world with monsters everywhere so it makes not sense. A man nearly dies and gets a massive debilitating injury after doing something extremely dangerous and stupid but everyone is just a little sad, shrugs their shoulders and goes on with life. The guy does not even reconsider his dumb choices and just does it again, but this time we have a magic toddler so it's fine even though he and the toddler could die as a result of his dumb choice.
Finally, the author seems to lack an understanding of cause and effect and how society back then functioned. In this story everyone in a medieval world is able to read but not do math, which is the reverse of how things real - SayianrjRoyal Road★★ 1.5The story starts out very interesting just feels hard and hard to stay immersed when you remember the MC a kid who 7 or 8ish killing and beating up full grown people and monsters. Plus some of what the bad guys do just seems super unlikely. Overall I gotta say I love the idea and that the story has potential just seems really unpolished.