Poison Studios: Princess Space Marine Number 2218

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"My Father Is A Kind Little Prince, Mother An Evil Old Orc Queen & I'm A Princess Space Marine!"Number 2218, daughter of an old evil Orc Queen and a young loving human prince, wakes from her drop pod to find the ship she was born on is falling from orbit. With a few thousand of her emergency deployed sisters having become compromised by an unknown zombie fungus, 2218 must work with her hateful sisters, a devil-worshiping nun, and a katana-wielding feline, to finish the mission. A mission with a 0% survivability, at least that's what the little brother AI says.

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2023
Author: The Bookkeeper

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 2.3/ 5.0
Followers: 299
Views: 52,729

Chapters(13 total)

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Community Reviews(3)

monologo21Royal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
To be honest? The story is bad. Like, really bad.
But dont be discouraged!
I can see all the care you put in your work. So maybe look up some tutorials, post a bunch of different stuff and see where things end up. Then come back thing long and hard where ur story should go and what it should say. And remember, we do not see the world you do. You need to show it to us.(and honestly you are way closer to doing so than me bcs I cant bring myself to post mine.)
burningGroundRoyal Road
★★★ 3.0
Oh wow, that's new! This series is dialogue-rich like a screenplay. But it has even less contextual references than an actual screenplay, unfortunately making it confusing. It also has the added bonus that makes it harder to keep track on what's going on.
Remember author, us readers don't have the full visualization the way you do! Especially since you didn't provide accompaniment illustrations (in the case you don't want to depict the scenes).
Furthremore, it is also hard to sense the passage of time due to the aforementioned stylistic decisions given by the author.
Another nitpick is that, the dialogue doesn't feel "natural" at times and gives me whiplash. (My brain tries to read everything outloud because it felt like a screenplay; and sometimes it would "autocorrect" some parts when I get a headache)
Sometimes I have no idea who's talking especially after a scene transition. tl;dr: It's hard, but not impossible to keep track what's going on, but it makes the whole experience more akin to a "reading assignment" than a "reading for fun" moment for me.
Ruby_DuskRoyal Road
★ 0.5
despite an interesting premise, at least in these initial three chapters, the story fails to deliver more than an annoying unhelpful ai, a rather empty protagonist, and an obsessively xenophobic deuteragonist. I am unfortunately unable to find any motivation to continue reading this story which is a real shame because the idea itself is lovely.