Phantom Ddraig: Blood of Kings

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Description

The fall of the multiverse has reshaped reality under the hands of the primordial Sophia, creating the new world of Jord. Join Christian Ddraig, the prince of the reemerging kingdom of Avalon, that now finds itself in the middle of a war between its new neighbors that threatens to drag Avalon into it, as Christian works with his companions to stop the possible total war and the many dark forces emerging from the shadows.

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Status: Hiatus
Year: 2023
Author: Redchaos-1

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Rating: 4.2/ 5.0
Followers: 11
Views: 17,951

Chapters(61 total)

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Community Reviews(8)

FirstNexusRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Overall, this story gets a 5/5 as that was my level of enjoyment. It's an interesting premise, though a little rough around the edges, and I'll check in from time to time.
Style: I like this style, because while many might say the paragraphs aren't long enough or the writing feels kind of in pieces because of it, I think that it actually helps the reader comprehend the amount of information and worldbuilidng in small pieces, because yes, this is a massive world with a lot of fantastical elements that take a lot of time to understand.
Story: So far, the story is more set up and world building than actual events occurring, but I actually like the world building and lore aspects of this story. I understand that a story like this with a lot of set up and moving pieces may not do the best on RR, but I think honestly anyone who likes fantasy should give this a try. I find the world and the fantastical elements very interesting, though the one issue I have is that the magic system isn't really explained all that well so far. I've only read about 7 chapters (around 20k words), so hopefully the system is explained in more depth in later chapters.
Grammar: The grammar, while not the greatest in many places, isn't so egregious that it jarred me. Yes, there were some spots that the words didn't quite fit, but most of the problems can be fixed by a grammar checker.
Character: This, for me, is by far the largest strength of this story. There are many characters introduced in the first few chapters, but they don't feel impossible to keep track of, as other stories with endless amounts of characters sometimes feel. I think each character has their own development, and each of their personalities feels fleshed out. Not a single character feels one dimensional and I think just because of this, Phantom Ddraig is an overall solid story.
EmolRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
This story presents an imaginative and creative take on a complex magical world, complete with plenty of political intrigue and nation-state squabbles for those who enjoy that sort of thing, and I do!
Style
This author excels at descriptive writing, and can vividly paint scenes that are easy to visualise. The action sequences are written with an exciting flair, and the overall pacing of the story is well-managed, keeping the reader engaged throughout.
Story
Regarding the story itself, I particularly enjoyed the political intrigue and the gradual buildup of tension throughout the narrative. The author demonstrates a talent for creative world-building, crafting a universe (or multi-verse) that has intriguing possibilities and diverse settings. However, I did find the mix of modern or futuristic technology with medieval weaponry somewhat confusing. The blend of different eras, while intriguing, could benefit from an earlier explanation to help readers understand how this came to be. Perhaps this aspect will be further explored and clarified in future chapters, which would enhance the coherence of the story's setting.
Grammar
There are a few spelling mistakes, and some sentences that could be worded better, however, it does not detract the quality of the story. I note that the grammar tends to be very good when the author writes descriptively. Extending this to the rest of the fiction would enhance the story significantly.
Character
It is a large cast of characters, but each one is distinct and has well-defined traits. The author's choice to accompany character descriptions with illustrations is a nice touch, they are well drawn as well. The races populating this fictional world are imaginative and unique to the story, promising an interesting exploration of their respective cultures in future chapters. The main character, in his role as the second prince, is well-crafted. His flawed yet relatable desire to prove himself adds layers to his personality.
Overall
I enjoyed
StainedGlassThreadsRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
Only a few years ago, the multiverse collapsed. Multiple countries are thrust into a new world, with new wildcards that each intends to compete over recruiting--or eliminating--first. Chris Ddraig, the antsy secondborn prince of Avalon, is tired of patrolling the most well-protected areas of his country, despite his parents allowing his sisters to risk themselves in protecting their people. When he hears rumors of age-old nightmares resurfacing, he jumps at the opportunity to go and investigate--but is he ready for the challenge?
First, let's start with what the other reviews heavily focus on: the grammar. In my opinion, the grammar is not awful. The main issue is that the author seems to have flaws in three fundamental aspects of English grammar, and because these things are so fundamental, we see the same three flaws repeated again and again and again, making it all seem much worse than it really is. If these three errors were to be addressed, I think the amount of errors would decrease dramatically. Not to say it would go down to zero, but it'd be only a little below average.
Aside from this note, I must admit I do quite enjoy the style, and the world itself. If you're a fan of expansive fantasy worlds with complex political relationships, this story is one you should at minimum give a cursory glance. If you're bored of endless generic isekais about elves and dwarves and dragons, you should give it a little more than a cursory glance. My favorite thing about this story is its descriptions, the art accompanying each chapter, and how new, fresh takes are given to things that some readers of fantasy call stale, interwoven with the introduction of new and original fantasy creatures, and a large number of human refugees from the recently-destroyed Earth. The world of Jord is extremely colorful and fun, and I eagerly await how the author's prose will grow and develop. I already quite like some of the prose, but I'd love to see Jord someday described as vibrantly and be
unfadableRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
Style & Story: The general feel of the story, I would say, is interesting. The fantasy world (or multiverse) that is depicted in the story is very broad, but has a clear and interesting backstory to it, and thus there are many possibilities the story could go, which enthralls me to the story. The story starts of with a clear start of a plot development, which until now is unfolding in an interesting way. The story does tend to skip between different focus points, which can make the read a little confusing, but it always picks up a red line to follow.
Grammar: On average the story is a nice read. However, there are times where the grammar doesn't really read smoothly unfortunately (But this is improving with every chapter, so keep it up!). I would also have to say that there are a few spelling mistakes and inconsistencies with punctuation, but as I said, this is improving every chapter, and doesn't take away much from the reading experience.
Character: All characters, main characters and side characters, are well depicted with a good description to them that allows me to imagine what they would look like (the added drawings also help!). There are also different races in the story, which always makes it interesting. Can't wait to find out more about the characters as they develop in the story!
InfinityphoenixRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
The author has a very bad habit of not listening to the helpful advice of the comments that would aid the improvement of their story. Huge long lists of grammatical errors all pointed out, but no editing of the chapter? I- just, I can't understand as a fellow author how how another author can sit by and ignore such a long list showing their mistakes! But moving on from my personal gripes about this...
Style: Multiple povs. I'm liking this, because it shows they plan to have some important characters besides the protagonist. I do feel like some chapters to reveal more of Christian's character before moving on to other povs would be a good idea, because we don't yet know a ton about his personality, but regardless, the author is good at describing the world, even if I haven't quite seen too much of the 'sci-fi' aspect of this yet.
Story: Epic worldbuilding, as stated in the title. Futuristic setting, with a bunch of people from other worlds, including earth, escaping to Avalon's world to be safe. I have to admit, the whole fae and zodiac thing while being a sci-fi story was kinda hard to get my head around, but it's a cool way of creating and separating different cultures and nations from each other, creating a unique world. Magic system so far hasn't been fully explored, but that shows potential. Also, author's a good artist. So good in fact that I'm beginning to suspect the 'actor' in his bio is supposed to be 'artist'.
Grammar: So, grammar. I will be frank, this has pretty terrible grammar. All because the author keeps repeating these few mistakes: no full stops or commas to end dialogue before quotation mark, spaces after opening dialogue quotation mark, and sometimes sentences start on a new line halfway through. Also a few spelling mistakes each chapter. If these cleared up, I could give 4.5 stars to grammar. I highly suggest to the author to get a free grammar program like Grammarly, because that program would sort everything out for them.
Character: Mostly uni
Lile BanRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
Plot: The plot follows Prince Christian Ddraig as he embarks on a mission in the deserts of Avalon. He is tasked with escorting archeologists on a dig, which leads to confrontations with dangerous magical creatures called Night Terrors. The plot has been engaging so far, with a good mix of character interactions, worldbuilding, and action sequences.
Characters: The main character, Chris, is complex and flawed. We see his frustration at being sheltered by his mother, and his desire to prove himself. His teammates Hamanymu and Ursa add some lighter moments. The mysterious Pyrrha Ulster has an interesting dynamic with Chris. The Night Terrors make intimidating antagonists. Overall, the characters are distinctive and multi-dimensional.
Writing: The writing style is immersive and descriptive. Action scenes are exciting and easy to visualize. Dialogue flows naturally. There are some nice moments of humor to break up the tension. The magic system and history of Avalon are explained well without excessive exposition.
Pacing: The story moves along at a good clip. There's a nice balance between character development/worldbuilding and action scenes. The mission into the desert adds a sense of rising tension and stakes. Enough background details are provided without slowing things down.
Themes: Main themes so far include proving oneself, overcoming trauma/fear, and redemption. Chris wants to step out of his family's shadow. Past events with Pyrrha still haunt him. The themes are subtly explored through the characters.
Originality: The fantasy world of Avalon, with its unique magic system and creatures, is creative and feels fresh. Chris is an interesting protagonist as a prince with heroic aspirations. The Night Terrors make for intense battles.
Enjoyability: Overall this has been a very enjoyable and engaging opening to the story. It quickly draws you into the world and characters. The action is thrilling. Enough plot threads are set up to leave the reader curious for more.
St
AshtelleRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
We follow a prince, Chris Ddraig, who has problems with an overprotective mother and struggles with self-doubt and a sense of duty, wanting to prove himself and show, that he also could be considered a capable knight. He is accompanied by other characters, with quite distinguished personalities, and we also have an insight into their heads as there are chapters from their perspective.
The world is interesting. I must say that the prologue told me nothing and was kind of boring, I preferred more to learn everything from the hints the characters gave me. But taking into consideration only this, it's nicely built, although sometimes there's too much exposition. I like the unique people and races that live there and the political relations.
The story is nice and interesting. We begin by going on a mission with our MC that he managed to obtain from his parents, and this is where our exploration of the world starts.
Speaking of grammar, I see that there was an improvement, the story was edited after a suggestions in the comments, although I must say, there were so many repetitive words that I noticed them and spaces in strange places. And also, for some reason, sometimes new scenes had longer spacing between paragraphs than the rest of the chapter. It's a little throwing off.
The writing style, I must say, I wasn't a fan of the at the beginning, but I think it improved with later chapters, so it's a plus. It first sounded like matter-of-fact writing, like in a school book and not a novel, but then the sentences began better written and more captivating and engaging, more showing and less boring.
Overall it's an interesting story in a unique world that is worth giving it a try.
The Reality Next DoorRoyal Road
★★★★ 3.5
I have read the first five chapters so far, it also seems like there are long waiting times between chapters, but let's go over what I have read so far.
The style of writing is quite jarring while also being fun, I am still unsure who the main character, or main party will be. As it does switch from characters a lot, and a lot of people are being introduced in a small timeframe, it feels, rushed. I would have loved it if there was more focus on one character first and fleshing that one out.
As for the story, it seems like a wild ride, there are empires at war, magical creatures with wings, and many other beings after the downfall of the multiverse. Plot wise, I can probably see that the phantom king is not truly dead, the guy who killed the multiverse, and he is coming back and the main party needs to kill him for good, at least that is what I expect. Or some mad scientists finds fragments from the shattered phantom king and resurrects him.
Then there is the grammar, this is my biggest gripe, we all let tiny errors slip though the cracks, it is human, but there are big glaring issues with the grammar, but not bad enough that you cannot follow the story. Some missing words, and other things you can get when proofreading, I would suggest reading it out loud to yourself to find some of the bigger grammar problems.
All in all, I am curious as to where this story is going, or how all the newly introduced characters will meet up.