Phantasmal Party

Information

Status

Hiatus

Year

2018

Author

tremir

• Chapter 07 - Knights in White Satin pt. 3
  May 13, 2019
• Chapter 06 - Knights in White Satin pt. 2
  May 12, 2019
• Chapter 05 - Knights in White Satin
  May 7, 2019
• Chapter 04 - Woody Blues pt. 2
  May 5, 2019
• Chapter 03 - Woody Blues
  May 1, 2019
• Chapter 02 - Jazz Claws pt. 2
  Mar 3, 2019
• Book 2 Chapter 01 - Jazz Claws
  Feb 25, 2019
• Phantasmal Party out on Amazon
  Feb 23, 2019
• Appendix 1 - Shards
  Nov 29, 2018
• Chapter 4 - The Drunken Pug
  Oct 16, 2018
• Chapter 3 - Shopping
  Oct 15, 2018
• Chapter 2 - Into the Labyrinth
  Oct 14, 2018
• Chapter 1 - The Bazaar
  Oct 13, 2018
• Prologue: The Impediment
  Oct 13, 2018

Reviews

Community Reviews(10)

• RafMereCRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  Loved the story from beginning to end.
  Raf
• Baosheng TaoRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  Unravels more mystery nd great premise with character depth, a good read
• bradyman50Royal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  I first found this on amazon, and have been waiting anxiously for more. I actually felt pretty dumb when I realized it was hosted here. This is definitely one of my favorite stories on this site. The world building was amazing and I can't wait to see how it continues to develop.
• Sam1515Royal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  the story is good but concept of story is nothing new, and similar LN and WN are availible on diffrent sites
  But similarity ends in early chapters, bcz you get interesting concepts like shards magic and dungeon in modern world also it is interesting to see girls do have personality like disgreeing with mc and taking the relationship to harem by bringing her friend in it albeit it is getting bad in latest chapters especially after bonding so hope i you will improve upon it.
  i am not native english speaker so i can't say much only, i have read worse and it is much better
  also you should explain why delver's are not using modern weapons and other tech, bcz i think biggest it is flaw in your story
  well in the end i wil say to a fellow reviewer that he should at least read the story before reviewing it
  so keep up the hard work author and try better.
  thanks.
  currently chap -49
  sorry for my grammer torcher
• KarolusRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  There are three main critiques I read that amount to: the MC is a cardboard cutout, the magic and tech is all over the place, and the slavery thing is distasteful.
  I agree that these are not insignificant complaints, but I don't think they really mar the reading expirence.
  For the MC: yeah, he could use work, but as a vehicle for the story I think he is fine. He gets us into the dungeon, gives us a reason to have a "useless" shard, and has a reason to be distrustful of the more prominent houses.
  For the Tech: a single sentence explaining that modern offensive and defensive tech simply does not work in the dungeon would suffice. An explination that swords pass through kevlar and other advanced materials like cloth, that that firearms and other traditional chemicals do not work in the dungeon would be enough to dispell this complaint I think. A comment about how video capture is unaffected, for whatever reason (the dungeon wants advertising I guess) explains the streamer.
  For the Slavery: I agree the idea is distasteful. I would prefer a story where the women were not compelled to obey the MC, but instead felt a strong desire to do so. I am thinking the kind of feeling you have to eat when you are hungry, but not starving. Still that is a stylistic choice and doesn't really impact my opinion of the story.
  Overall, I think despite the misgivings others have, the read is quick and easy, so if it isn't your cup of tea, no great loss. Otherwise, I find the story good even if the MC is a bit too bland for my taste.
• BStewRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  At chapter 52 now. Gave 4 stars a a RR score, as its not great literature, but its definitely worth a sub for some daily update fix.
  The style is pretty standard third person, usually following the MC and only a few time following some other people, pretty later on. There are some times when the story seems to take some pretty abrupt turns, lacking any real foreshadowing, but never unforgivably egregious, just maybe a bit amateurish.
  Story follows some DnD elements and uses some clever tricks for the MC's (relative)OPness, but the very basis of that power seems difficult to think no one else, among thousnands of previous magic interested individuals, ever intentionally or accidentally did that same as MC. Aside from that, there's nothing really great nor notworthy in the story.
  Grammar's fine. A few here's and there's.
  Character's are a pretty shallow, but at the same time, in a believable way. Main character's primary motivation is introduced in the synopsis, but never mentioned in the story until a dedicated chapter in the 20's. Even with that, it would make the perfect "Here's why I'm here," character monologues to others, but instead, its some internalized soliloquy.
  That immediately follows the "romance" that really has no lead up, but again is made somewhat believeable in their brief dialogues, though also far too easily makes the harem tag viable.
  All told, it's a fun (growing-to-be)OP story with believeable, if shalllow characters, and fills the "daily updates" fix.
• Tyroth GideonRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 3.5

  I normally do not review any story here on RR, with a few exceptions. I am only up to chapter 16 at the moment but still felt the need to review it.
  As others before me have said this is a relatively original story, it has an interesting mesh of rpg elements and modern tech, it is not the only story to do so but it still is an original concept.
  i do agree that some parts of the story feel a bit forced (the events in chapters 12-13 first and foremost). Despite that this is still an ok story. I will update this review as i read, perhaps, but all in all this is still a story i think people should give a chance, if you like it continue reading, if not then don't.
• RevengeFireRoyal Road

  ★★ 2.0

  First of all, I avoided this story for a very long time, reason? The synopsis was very standard and the picture just wasn't appealing. If you want to reel in people you should focus on your uniqueness. For example why the hell is a goblin and a rainbow gem on your front fiction picture.
  So now for the harsh part. I absolutely didn't like to see something similar to internet. This is a mix of classic medieval fantasy setting with modern technology. Saddly the combination only show the worst part of each other.
  As far as I read, there is a washing machine, a wikipedia for adventures and James(a party member of our mc) uses a subscriber channel while he and his party adventures with their life on the line. But we are missing any kind of actual usefull modern help. There are no guns and no modern building around. You have to meet in a bar so that a bartender sends you to a random party instead of using the internet.
  This absolutetly destroyed my immersion of the story. If I were to give you advice, either do something properly or not at all. If you want to have a modern and medieval setting, well okay. But if you just want a medieval world with a washing machine and random subscriber system stop it.
  Another glaring flaw in the story is the reaction of the love interest to our mc's world shackling secret.
  !!Spoiler!!
  To summarize it: Peasants need to choose unlevelable and mostly useless skills to enter the labyrinth while the nobles have acces to good (or at least can level them up) skills. Our mc finds out that he can upgrade his useless starter skill with a racialgem to upgrade which allows him a good summoner monster and the ability to level his skill up. Why is this now important? Well you can only level up two skills at every time and only get new skills once an older skill is at max level.
  Now that our mc has a secret which should be hidden from any kind of person, expectlly nobles, he gets confonted from a girl he met 2 days ago. She tells him that his goblin's s
• JaksterzooRoyal Road

  ★★ 1.5

  I'll do a brief reasoning for each. (To author- contact me for more in-depth reading, dropped after chap 40)
  style score
  I have seen similar story lines to this particularly story and I loved how he started it out, but after a little while (10 chapters) the style made little to no sense. It didn't stick with the story at all, and gave it a three because for the most part, the style is to my liking (personally) so it's almost an automatic three.
  Story Score .5
  I might be hitting a bit hard, but it drove me to think of dropping this novel. Basically, there were so many plot-holes that I felt like my interest just fell into one of the holes. A lot of contradictory statements made, rules of the maze not being held down or not made clear, and not going deep enough (if at all) into parts of the story that the MC (eddy) should know from the wiki. Also, what noble sends their child into a deadly danger without a 'safe-line' of some sort if they have a over-protective mother?! Even if she is stubborn, they would have found a way to do it in secret. Also more reasons I won't list or I'd be here all day.
  Grammar score
  It deserved a 4, and that I would even say a 2 if someone was a critic. Why? There are a lot of awkward sentences or words that an easy proof read can fix, without a problem. My normal grading is: 1- near- impossible to read, obviously written by a foreigner using google translate. 2- Hard to read in a sentence, no editing whatsoever, and mistakes that seem like a person just learning English made. 3- Readable, but the errors look like a person on a phone typed this. The errors are numerous and slightly affect me reading. A few easy fixes. 4- Doesn't affect my reading too much, roughly ten errors per chapter that are blantantly obvious. (Meaning it can be fixed with a proof read.) 5- Little to no errors (obvious ones) made, doesn't affect my overall reading or the story. The scoring is basically means that if you (or if you ask someone to) re-read your novel or c
• th30dorRoyal Road

  ★ 0.5

  I have no idea how a story that had such an interesting premise could become so bad so fast. How often does one read about a summoner MC? When almost everything on this site is a magic swordsman of sorts, summoning is like a breath of fresh air.
  But make no mistake. This is a bad story. We are first introduced to the need for people without enough status or wealth to handicap themselves with an impediment shard, in order to get access to the labyrinth. And then immediately after, the MC has them in abundance. It's like the scarcity before was just some temporary situation, that the author used for starting the book, and then immediately forgot about it.
  And the same pattern keeps repeating. In the first few chapters, the MC stumbles into a game-changing use of his impediment, and thinks about how he should keep this a secret. Within 2 chapters, he casually blurts out all that info the first time he is asked. Same situation like before. Previous character and world building easily forgot by the author, in order to keep the plot moving.
  And the weird thing is that there is no need to do such a thing. The plot was somewhat ok, there was no need for such drastic measures. It speaks volumes of the consistency of the plot and characters in the future.
  There are also other alarm signs. A chapter written from a very annoying side character point of view, which, the author plans to kill later, for absolutely no story or plot value. Maybe to try and get rid of his readers? It boggles the mind. And even the decision to kill the character is made via a readers poll. One would expect the author to have some modicum of control over his story.
  The only thing the story has going for it is the unusual class of the MC, and that immediately gets drowned by the, frankly, poor plot and character choices of the author. And this is for the revised chapters.
  Stay away people, there are better stories worthy of your time.