Overlord Spirit Martial Emperor

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For years, since he was 6 years old, Feng Yun was trained in various Martial Arts and the way of the assassin. He killed thousands, slaughtered many evil people and those that sought to destroy the peace of the world. He had become so accomplished and well known that he had earned the title, "Slaughter Ghost". Eventually, he got bored of killing people that were so weak. One day, he was walking home and was killed by government agents storming the room he lived in."This is it huh? Well, I had fun. I guess I'll die now."He never would have expected for him to be reincarnated in a new continent, Wushu Zhicai( Martial Sanction) where experts and strong people areas numerous as the seas are large. Every child born with the ability to practice martial arts gains a spirit upon reaching 6 years old that is unique to them. On top of that, he is reincarnated as a baby with the same name as he had before, as the grandson of the head of the prestigious and powerful Cloud Scale Sect. Follow Feng Yun's journey to becoming an expert in the Wudao(Martial Way) and shaking the continent with his power. Follow him on his path to becoming the Overlord Spirit Martial Emperor._____________________________________________________________________________________________WARNING-MATURE CONTENT( This novel will include some gore(not too extreme), foul language(really frequent) and quite the sexual content if I do say so myself. It will become a bit more plentiful as he grows older so readers, please be prepared and don't read this if it doesn't gell well with you. Please enjoy.

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Status: Hiatus
Year: 2015
Author: raghavssundar123

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Rating: 3.8/ 5.0
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Community Reviews(10)

Dat_KarmaRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Spirits and spirit bones from Douluo Dalu., interspatial rings from Coiling Dragon and more.
Well it only matters if the author can write it well with these concepts.
AziroFFRoyal Road
★★★★ 3.5
with all the perks he has,he should be a lot stronger...it makes no sense....and your dialogs are awkard and iritating... and when there is a martial move,after the move is made you don't say that he says,you should say that he thought,if not its like everybody have a chunnin spirit....
kikyorebornRoyal Road
★★★★ 3.5
This is a very good story so far, except for grammar issues and some small style issues which are not that great a problem. The MC is still very shallow and 2-D, but I am guessing that that is the result of his first life’s upbringing and that you will try and make him less introverted and more social to fix some of his first life’s personality problems, especially as the MC seems to like having a “True” family and not like his relationship with his first father.
rolotinioRoyal Road
★★★ 3.0
je suis sur que ça peu être une histoire intéressante a quand la suite ?
mioRoyal Road
★★★ 3.0
so, a few points you have to fix.
1. CURSIVE FOR THOUGHTS it's not hard, ctrl+i and you have it, works even on RRL.
if you don't, it just looks like a huge mistake in your text, until you get to the he thought part, and then you have to go back to see what exactly he thought. this is not only annoying, it disturbs my reading.
2. SLAUGHTER GHOST is wrong. it is either slaughtering ghost, or ghost of slaughter. slaughter is something you do, not something you are. except for when you are slaughtered. but that' still something someone does to you.
3. Don't call an enemy arrogant and then have your MC act 10 times as arrogant, it makes the storyteller look stupid. this might sound harsh, but in third perspective the storyteller is an alknowing ntity, ithat should be unbiased. so if yun says he's arrogant, it's ok, even if he's not, as yun is but a character, and character make mistakes. but if you say he's arrogant, he better be the most arrogant fucking prick in a ten-block radius. you're supposed to tell the story like it is, you're the one telling us the "facts" of your story. so you can't call someone arrogant to make your mc look better and then hae your mc act even more arrogant.
not only that, he sounds like a generic road-side bandit half the battles he fights...
4. and most important : READ YOUR OWN STORY!!!!! don't just edit it! read it like you would any other book. this is the best way to realise your own mistakes, and find out where you have to change your writing. just do it.
5. FIX YOUR FIRST 2 CHAPTERS!! i can't begin to guess how much readers you've lost there, just by mixing 1st and 3rd person. even i had to fight just to keep reading.
anyway, i'm guessing you're between 12-16 years old from the way you're writing, and if that's the case, you're doing a very good job of it. if it's not... well, you should think a bit about how easily you're influenced by things. but i really do think you are, in which case this is normal.
oh, and don't go "i say thi
kariRoyal Road
★★★ 2.5
I was super excited by the summary but I decided to read the first few reviews (kelicant & asestado)
Kinda killed it 4 me there... If a reincarnated person given everything in the world to cultivate, is unable to defeat ppl his own age (no matter how outstanding) with ease, then he isn't worthy of being the MC, forget OP-MC! :(
And I was excited 4 this book too *sigh*
Of course, I ended up not readin ur book so I can't say much, just that please don't make this mistake in ur future books.
P.S. Maybe a rewrite would help?
kingasas33Royal Road
★★ 2.0
this is my personal opinion since i dont like much a story with an OP mc....begin reading at 2 month is way pass the acceptable limit for me...stop reading after that...sorry...not my type of story...
asestadoRoyal Road
★★ 2.0
I have to say that i had a few expectations with this story, however it failed at a few critical points.
First of all the mc starts with an overpowered cultivation method, receives a lot of spirits and have combat experience, however people of his age could fight with him in the tournament... even worse he doesnt feel as strong as he should be, you start cultivating nearly as a baby and people of your generation can have a better cultivation level? plainly bullshit.
Next is the romance was forced, yeah i suppose a lot of people may like it however we are talking about a reincarnated boy who was an assassin and... he is this friendly with a little girl? kidding?, this is a serious lack of consistancy between the personality you are giving him and the truth. If you were going to do that you could have eliminated his memories but let his past life influence his decisions.
Lastly most events are too forced... if you have a genious in your family, there isnt any chance that you will leave him alone without a few experts from the family protecting him, if i was his grandfather i would protect him at any cost, i would let him gain experience but protect him so that he doesnt die. One thing is that the family doesnt recognize you as a genious as it happens in a lot of light novels, however there must be a line between being "influenced" and "forgetting important details".
Couldnt continue reading after he was so easily convinced to join the academy. I hope that i have given a constructive critic and if it offended even if its a little then i wanna say sorry before anything.
BloodKingxRoyal Road
★ 1.0
I can practically hear the Authors wet dreams through my screen, can you?
I hope it will be rewritten and way more fleshed out and make more sense..
I mean c’mon in the forth chapter he’s a two month old baby walking around, picking up books, and TALKING fluently with no teeth!!!!!
That right there should be enough to tell how wildly unreasonable and unrealistic the story will be. It’s so sad because it actually has potential even if a lot of things are taken from other stories. Which makes me think it’s just another crap self-insert Wet Dream story
There's also the fact that he should be so much stronger but the author can never figure out how to balance strength and weakness, fu*k it makes me wanna cry.
It's only a fun story to read though, oh how could I forget, it keeps switching between 1st person to 3rd person to some random narrator in the same sentence it's really confusing
BhanthemagicBeanRoyal Road
★ 0.5
I was lurking before and created an account just for this,
The story became so force that the writer just like literally shoving the forced plots in your face.
Writer didn't even tried hiding the plot armor and just be like well guess here's an almighty powerful being to save the die, which reaks of Japanese Bs plotlines.
So overall not really recommended.