Out of This World (Into a Time Loop)

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Description

In a world where everyone was either a Lighter (someone who had ignited a flame/ability) or an Asher (Someone who failed to ignite a flame and their fuel was reduced to ash), Christopher was neither. His fuel (biological energy) never reached the minimum temperature required for ignition.

At the age of twenty-nine, he was divorced, stuck in a dead-end job, and had no interest in igniting a flame. He was tired of hopes and ambitions.Just when he thought his life would not get any worse, he ignited. His ability opened a space-time doorway, leading him to an unknown desolate planet where nothing but death waited for him.

This is his story as he shuffles life on two planets – unable to die on one, and dying every day on the other in hopes of stability, peace, and love.

Information

Status
Hiatus
Year
2022
Author
Underload

Tags

LITRPGACTIONADVENTUREROMANCE SUBPLOTSTRONG LEADMYSTERYHIGH FANTASYTIME TRAVELTIME LOOPARTIFICIAL INTELLIGENCEDUNGEON CRAWLERFIRST CONTACT

Royal Road Stats

Rating
4.1/ 5.0
Followers
30
Views
5,578

Chapters(8 total)

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Community Reviews(4)

  • NatarajaRoyal Road
    ★★★★★ 5.0
    This fiction has two great strengths: The story and the characters. The world-building is interesting and original. It can be difficult to get into the story at the beginning because of the terms used "ignite" or "flame" but you get used to it quickly. I can't wait to know more about the Earth and where these supernatural powers come from, the variations from the classic time loop make the other world very interesting too!
    Note: I don't usually like systems, but the way this one is brought in is light enough that it doesn't spoil the story.
    - Style:
    There are some contradictions (words are his best friends... or not). Sometimes we don't understand what's going on and time passes in a surprising way (when the hero's perception goes out of his body). Overall the style is good enough to enjoy the story and that's all that matters.
    - Story:
    The story is the great strength of this fiction. The world-building is extremely interesting, the relationships between the different elements are well thought out, and the situations are brought coherently. Some events could happen a little slower to build up more anticipation.
    - Grammar:
    The quality of the language could be better, I spotted some inaccuracies even though I am not a native speaker (use of “he” instead of “it” for a reflection, girls when she's alone). There are also some repetitions. Few sentences can be a bit obscure which handicaps the good understanding of the story, but I'm sure the author will improve that as the story goes on.
    - Character:
    This is the second strength of the story. The MC is well developed, his emotions and motivations are clear. We want to know more about him. Secondary characters would be welcome.
  • BullerRoyal Road
    ★★★★★ 4.5
    If I had to point at one good thing about this fiction, it would be massive amount of work which must have been done in making sure that the tables looked alright. Because damn me like the emerging of cells done on those. And making it change further down as well. It looks fully dynamic and new. What is there to hate about it?
    sure, there were a few issues later in the story. Style seems forced at points. Need more variation with word-choice. Personalty isn't something that has had time to develop as well. Time will tell how this one will work out. 4.5/5 for now.
  • LioraLaneRoyal Road
    ★★★★★ 4.5
    This is a time loop litRPG with a twist in it. I enjoyed slowly getting to understand the situation MC is in and what he needs to accomplish. This story is fairly gruesome, which I personally don't mind but, if you're squeamish this may not be for you. Interesting worldbuilding, I would have liked to have known more about your initial setting and what it is we're supposed to be seeing in our mind's eye for your character.
    Overall this story has a lot of potential. There are some grammatical errors that cost it a half-star. With some additional editing, this story could go places. Good work and keep writing!
  • CheshireccatRoyal Road
    ★★★★ 4.0
    The story isn't long yet but I'm hoping it continues. The Groundhog Day mechanic has a nest twist that puts pressure on the looper, where
    the enemies are added to the loop after he dies. They don't remember at the beginning of the loop but they remember sooner and sooner.
    No infinite chances here. It's a race against time and armed thieves to save the life of a baby.
    The litRPG elements haven't had a chance to develop yet but that's not a complaint. I am writing this after only the first story arc, after all.
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