Original Wolf - (The Originals)

Information

Status

Hiatus

Year

2019

Author

Somenonebody

• 74 Demon
  Dec 25, 2019
• 73 Change
  Dec 25, 2019
• 72 Witch Fight
  Dec 25, 2019
• 71 Death
  Dec 25, 2019
• 70 In a Pickle
  Dec 25, 2019
• 69 Retired
  Dec 25, 2019
• 68 Dahlia
  Dec 25, 2019
• 67 To Many Things
  Dec 25, 2019
• 66 Hormones
  Dec 25, 2019
• 65 Rebekah's Feelings
  Dec 25, 2019
• 64 Anger
  Dec 25, 2019
• 63 New Mikael
  Dec 25, 2019
• 62 Slip up
  Dec 25, 2019
• 61 Caught
  Dec 25, 2019
• 60 Freya's Plight
  Dec 23, 2019
• 59 Niklaus vs Mikael
  Dec 20, 2019
• 58 Niklaus's Rampage
  Dec 18, 2019
• 57 Talking
  Dec 18, 2019
• 56 Confirmation
  Dec 18, 2019
• 55 Nevan vs Mikael
  Dec 18, 2019

Reviews

Community Reviews(2)

• Curtly D. AsgillRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  I really like the way the story keeps unfolding in new and exciting ways and the way the variuos characters keep developing as time progresses. There are a few grammar mistakes but not so serious that it would interupt your reading. Every new chapter is captivating amd leaves me wanting more. Really hope you continue this series and hope to see new series emerge as well.
• FenninRoyal Road

  ★★★ 3.0

  TL;DR at the bottom of the review. And disclaimer, I read till ch4.
  Let me start by saying thanks for writing and sharing your story. It was not my cup of tea, but some people might really enjoy it. This review isnt meant to bash you, but to give advice.
  Lets start the review:
  Style:
  Your style feels really amateurish. You tell us information by putting it in paranthesis. Try to integrate that into the story instead of telling us as author. Furthermore you should not make a conversation with: David- '....', Anne- '....' try to make it flow more naturally by: David said ..., and Anne replied with an enraged tone ... (I hope that this made sense.) And lastly try to use more descriptive language.
  Story:
  Your story was way too fast paced. In 4 short  chapters we went from the origin story to multiple encounters which were not fleshed out. The precipe was interesting (even though I didnt watch the series), but he is way too OP. And his packmate (whom has lived for millenia) encounters someone she couldnt defeat in the 4th chapter. If that was true, how come she hadnt died way earlier?
  Grammar:
  Too be honest I didnt focus much on your grammar. That means that it wasnt horrible, or it would have caught my attention.
  Character:
  Like I said before, he is really OP. Which can be fine, but that vampire should also be really strong. And he could defeat her in 1 move. And why did he suddenly stop his solitude? Why did he try to flirt with that vampire? Those kind of questions should be told or at least hinted at.
  Tl;dr and conclusion, the story feels like an inexperienced teenager writer. He/she needs to include more flowery words and not just move from scene to scene. Also try not to just give us information as a writer. But tell it as part of the story.