One with Heaven and Earth

Information

Status

Hiatus

Author

Golden Robster

Reviews

Community Reviews(1)

• YoshiOnuRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 4.5

  I don’t generally like the xianxia genre, but folks, there is no overpowered protagonist here. The story begins with Li Dong starting off his martial journey when he tries to attain the legacy of Xue Yun, a fallen immortal.
  Story
  The story is very interesting and not generic at all. The twists and turns that occur are very entertaining and keeps the reader guessing. During the legacy arc, I didn’t expect him to not proceed into the final six.
  Character
  This is where stuff might get a bit wierd. The character of Li Dong is good, especially the moment during the oasis when he’s crying. Good character development but I feel like something is missing. Maybe it’s just me but I feel that your third-person writing doesn’t tell me anything about the characters. Nonetheless, it’s still very well done.
  Grammar
  The grammar is very good. No major mistakes here. Maybe a minor mistake each chapter but nothing major.
  Style
  The style is definitely very unique and I believe your writing is also sharp. Maybe fix some of the interactions between the characters since it seems quite bland and 2-d. The descriptions are fantastic and really engage the reader into the writing.
  Conclusion
  A gem in the rough; focus on the interaction between characters and explanations and I promise you that this fiction will definitely become a weekly favourite.
  Things to work on
  Speech and using more varied language for talking
  More explanations