Oderria's Last Light and the Counterfeit

Information

Status

Hiatus

Year

2021

Author

Of Pen and Paper

• Prologue (Final Draft)
  Dec 11, 2021

Reviews

Community Reviews(3)

• [email protected]Royal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  My opinion of this story is that it is one of my favorites. It's a quick-paced fantasy that keeps you on the edge of your seat. I could see this adapted into a successful movie. I hope that someday it does get adapted into a movie. I am very proud of the author and look forward to more to come from his brilliant mind.
• Jeristotle05Royal Road

  ★★★★★ 4.5

  If you're looking for an old fashioned, traditional, riveting fantasy, with twists and turns that may turn those traditions on their head: Look no further than Oderria's Last Light and the Counterfeit Hero.
  There are many ways to justify this glowing review, but I shall give two reasons here.
  The style of the Narrator speaking to the reader is engaging, will leave you with a sense of wonder, a sense of being apart of the story, and overall a sense of further connection with the story.
  I give one example here:
  "Buried within another time, world, dimension, or  He.  simply your mind, there lies a fantastical land of discovery.  Welcome to a country filled With empirical magic, infection, and a dying hope.  A plain of existence where fantasy and reality entwine.  A compilation of unlikely characters bound by insurmountable odds"
  What does he mean that it might exist in my own mind? What dying hope? What infection? What insurmountable odds. These first few lines of the book leave one with a sense of questions and wonder. It is a perfect introduction, since it sails you right on to the daring chase scene that drops you right off into the world .
  2. The characters are interesting, lovable, and leave us with profound moral questions.
  Here are a few examples. If you don't like spoilers, skip this point.
  Barden: He's big, he's wild, he's gruff, he's a pretty stone cold trainer if he's willing to chase Jeramy with an axe all around Tearkah Fortress just to make him stronger… unless he's the shape shifter and he's trying to assassinate him! There's something always interesting about those tough characters with long beards and no manners. They give us a sense of wildness, of those men who once roamed the earth who were built for war.
  Elnith: She loves all things ``customary". She loves them more than humanity itself. It's that crazy queen of Tearkah Forest: Elnith. One of the things that is so important to grasp from her character is the evil of legalism. Legalism does not reac
• WithinTheStormRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 3.5

  Reviewing from Chapter 14
  Overall: I liked your magic system and the peculiarities of the world you are building, the type of narrative you are going for and the attempt at the introspection of character motivation but with major caveats.
  Character: I mentioned introspection because I noticed that Jeramy would often think about the implications of being thrust into the role of hero and wonder to himself if he was worthy. Character introspection is good, but my problem is precisely what Jeramy wonders to himself; he hasn't really done anything to warrant being a hero. He's just a normal kid that's been thrust into the position. What I really wanted to see is for Jeramy to be tested because right now all the other people are doing all the fighting and thinking for him. This leaves him with no opportunity to show the reader what kind of person he is when the solutions to his problems come from other people. Stop holding his hand and let him lose an arm or two!
  Also, again, Jeramy wonders why he of all people was chosen besides having the special hero mark. I think it would help if the beginning chapters were extended to show Jeramy with his powers having a tangible effect on his life before he’s thrust into his role as the hero. That way we get to know him more and it doesn’t feel like he’s been randomly selected since he’d already be somewhat familiar with the whole magical powers thing. Just a suggestion. Otherwise, to reiterate, I do like how Jeramy is actively thinking about how he factors into the bigger picture. Shows that he’s not just being blithe about the hero’s journey ™.
  As for the other characters… I think I’ll get into that with style. But if there is one last nitpick I have it’s Jeramy’s brother. Why is he coming along for the ride? Now, I can guess since it’s been hinted at but still, couldn’t you create a similar dynamic just between Jeramy and Timothy where they act as foils for one another? That way they could bounce off of each other and strengthen